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2015 Haiku

Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "haiku (radiant hot sun)"
A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015

12 total reviews 
Comment from Linda Engel
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Another good haiku blended with the right color background to inspire your words.
Good that you found your missing work and presented them again for us to read.
I never got to read them the first time so it is a treat.

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 31-Dec-2015
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my haiku.. Happy New Year!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your haiku. Good job with the format. I like the presentation, too. It is fun to think about how this really happens. I see no changes. Good job and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
    Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from pbroussard209
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another great haiku, you are visually stimulating all of my favorite images: lakes, mountains, and sun sets with these wonderful poems. I miss the west coast and all it beauty, Louisiana has its natural charm, but you have to fight the insects to enjoy it (they usually win).

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
    Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Gypsy
Sound like the sun decided to look like an egg when it's cooked sunny side up
good haiku I like it.

Gert

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    Thank you very much for taking the time to review and for your kind words. :)
    Happy New Year!
reply by Gert sherwood on 29-Dec-2015
    You are welcome
    Take care.
    Gert
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Gypsy,

This is a really cute and creative haiku as well.
What a shame you lost it. It must be there, no?
That's a very clever satori and beautiful imagery
in the first 2 lines.

Linda

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    Thank you very much for taking the time to review and for your kind words. :)
    Happy New Year!
Comment from a.w.brooks
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I nice Haiku I loved it I think of the mountains I drive across and can see the sun tucking in behind the mountain, and the sunny side up makes me think of an egg I love sunny side up LOL thanks for the right and the words flow very well

A.W.Brooks

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    Thank you very much for taking the time to review and for your kind words. :)
    Happy New Year!
Comment from I am Cat
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Hi Sweet Sister Gypsy...
Mwah... love the radiant colors! love you!
Happy New Year! (you really should just save your posts until after the first... everything resets then) hugs
Sister Cat

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    what do you mean reset? It was a stupid thing to do. I had a lot of old poems that I wanted to delete because they were terrible, from when I started. I was happy to see my improvement, thanks to everyone's help in FS. In the process I deleted a few poems I wanted. ((((sadness)))) Live and Learn.

    Thank you very much little sister, for taking the time to review and for your kind words. :)
    Happy New Year!
reply by I am Cat on 29-Dec-2015
    Please tell me that this isn't the ONLY place you're saving your poetry? Please tell me you are saving them to hard drives?
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    Yes, I have a copy of all my work in my hard drive. I asked Tom and he is going to undelete everything. I will have to start over but I will way until next month. :)
Comment from kittykatnoel
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I love it. No picture needed, it says it all. I especially like your last line, 'sunny side up'. Ah-ha, it is sunny side up, the rest is under the horizon, genius.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    Thank you very much, I appreciate you taking the time to review my kaiku :)
Comment from judiverse
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Very colorful. I like the sunny side up last line. It really works well. The haiku gives an excellent visual picture. Descends is a strong verb choice. The reader gets a good sense of the sun sinking behind the mountain tops. You need to change the spelling in your title to Radiant. It's correctly spelled in the poem. judi

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    Thank you very much Judi, I appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku. :)
reply by judiverse on 29-Dec-2015
    You're very welcome. We like things sunny side up. judi
Comment from lightink
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I see it's a revive! I am pretty certain I have reviewed this already!
It has a great seasonal reference (hot sun, summer) - a wonderful and very visual concrete image and a perfect, imaginative satori line! I'm glad you didn't allow it to get lost!

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    Thank you Jiyoti, I appreciate your kind review (second time). Happy New Year!