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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Scene at a Coffee Shop"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
12 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Beans, Beans good for your heart
The more you eat, the more you'll......
You know the rest. I first heard it in high school.
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This is very well written with a touch of humor.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Beans, Beans good for your heart
The more you eat, the more you'll......
You know the rest. I first heard it in high school.
***
This is very well written with a touch of humor.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Charlie, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Bill,
I enjoyed this one scene script. A good play on words and miscommunication. Very humorous and well written.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Hi Bill,
I enjoyed this one scene script. A good play on words and miscommunication. Very humorous and well written.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you, GMG, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
Ba-da-boom!
You would have quite the vaudville act here if you could bring to life the characters of Ned and Pons. As a team, Pons defines patience while Ned is just a tic away from being certifiably imbicilic, though lovable.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Ba-da-boom!
You would have quite the vaudville act here if you could bring to life the characters of Ned and Pons. As a team, Pons defines patience while Ned is just a tic away from being certifiably imbicilic, though lovable.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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I'll take them through a few more locales to see if they hold up. Thanks for reviewing, Jay. Bill
Comment from sibhus
ha, ha, this is such a riot. Probably, because I think I know your cousin, or someone very like him. I can actually see this happening. Thanks for the great laugh. This a well written piece that was an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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ha, ha, this is such a riot. Probably, because I think I know your cousin, or someone very like him. I can actually see this happening. Thanks for the great laugh. This a well written piece that was an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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Thank you, sibhus, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
Heh-heh... poor Pons. With a friend like Ned at your side, one would almost have to be a walking encyclopedia; a veritable bottomless wellspring and, essentially, a thesaurus with legs. Oh, let's not forget a movie trivia expert, and a talking dictionary as well.
Another hilarious chapter of Ned and Pons Excellent Adventures, Bill...
~Dean :}.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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Heh-heh... poor Pons. With a friend like Ned at your side, one would almost have to be a walking encyclopedia; a veritable bottomless wellspring and, essentially, a thesaurus with legs. Oh, let's not forget a movie trivia expert, and a talking dictionary as well.
Another hilarious chapter of Ned and Pons Excellent Adventures, Bill...
~Dean :}.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Dean, for the excellent review. Ned comes easy ( which is frightening). Pons has the patience of Job; that's tougher.
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You're very welcome, Bill. I had a Job once that required a lot of patience. Didn't like it much, but the pay was good, heh-heh... (something old Ned might say?)
~Dean :}
Comment from chasennov
a one-scene script "Scene at a Coffee Shop" Confusion, confusion, confusion. I love it. This is a great script you have created here, Bill. The humour of it is quite incredible. Very well done.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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a one-scene script "Scene at a Coffee Shop" Confusion, confusion, confusion. I love it. This is a great script you have created here, Bill. The humour of it is quite incredible. Very well done.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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Thank you for the kind review. That Ned is as thick as a bear steak.
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You are most welcome, Bill. As thick as a bear steak, huh?
Comment from krys123
Bill;
-it seems that Ned is somewhat less educated then Pons the best seems to make the conversation more entertaining to read. I think that's because Ned is not that uneducated as it seems. I believe that Ned is playing Pons or that's what I read into it.
-the picture you have chosen is appropriate for the writing sets up the mood and tone for the piece.
-also I can assume that night is a little younger than Pons though I may be wrong with that assumption.
- thanks for sharing and posting this Bill and may you have a very Merry Christmas.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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Bill;
-it seems that Ned is somewhat less educated then Pons the best seems to make the conversation more entertaining to read. I think that's because Ned is not that uneducated as it seems. I believe that Ned is playing Pons or that's what I read into it.
-the picture you have chosen is appropriate for the writing sets up the mood and tone for the piece.
-also I can assume that night is a little younger than Pons though I may be wrong with that assumption.
- thanks for sharing and posting this Bill and may you have a very Merry Christmas.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for a cool character analysis and an excellent review. We pray that you and yours have a very merry Christmas as well.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
BEDTIME FER GARBONZO! LOL! Love it. These two guys are always fun. Liver beans... LOL! Well, we know what he means, don't we? My mom was like that. Usually got close enough that you figure out what she was talking about. :)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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BEDTIME FER GARBONZO! LOL! Love it. These two guys are always fun. Liver beans... LOL! Well, we know what he means, don't we? My mom was like that. Usually got close enough that you figure out what she was talking about. :)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Phyllis, for giving this a look. I like these guys. Bill
Comment from Dawn Munro
HAHAHAHAHAHA - these make a wonderful little TV comedy show (I can see them on something like Saturday Night Live) - in fact, I can "SEE" them!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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HAHAHAHAHAHA - these make a wonderful little TV comedy show (I can see them on something like Saturday Night Live) - in fact, I can "SEE" them!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Dawn, for the fun review. Bill
Comment from Joyce Long
How very cute. My what a play on words. I didn't think you could do so much with beans, but the English language is very versatile and works well in many situations. Ned seems a little slow, but certainly carries the humor of your writing.
Very well done. Keep up the good work. Do you share your writings with your students?
Joyce 12-19-15
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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How very cute. My what a play on words. I didn't think you could do so much with beans, but the English language is very versatile and works well in many situations. Ned seems a little slow, but certainly carries the humor of your writing.
Very well done. Keep up the good work. Do you share your writings with your students?
Joyce 12-19-15
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Joyce, for the excellent review. Bill
