The Gobbledegooks
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Comment from Delahay
This is a nice little bit of silliness for the season. There are quite a few words I've never seen before, and perhaps a few uses for old words. I imagine it would be hard to be a judge for such a competition.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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This is a nice little bit of silliness for the season. There are quite a few words I've never seen before, and perhaps a few uses for old words. I imagine it would be hard to be a judge for such a competition.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Thanks for the kind remarks.
Have a great Christmas.
Steve
Comment from Chrissy710
Kiwisteveh. This is without a doubt a fabulous poem and so cleverly written I was smiling all the way through, at your fabulous wit and rhyming and brilliant meter.
I loved the everything -dom? fitted beautifully. This deserves to win so I wish you all the best for the competition I loved it and will be one of my bookmarks, Cheers Christine (back for another read right now
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Kiwisteveh. This is without a doubt a fabulous poem and so cleverly written I was smiling all the way through, at your fabulous wit and rhyming and brilliant meter.
I loved the everything -dom? fitted beautifully. This deserves to win so I wish you all the best for the competition I loved it and will be one of my bookmarks, Cheers Christine (back for another read right now
Comment Written 20-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Chrissy, thanks so much for the lovely review.
This is the fifth in the Gobbledegooks series. I may well have to continue until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.
Steve
Comment from tfawcus
I haven't had such a good canter since the good news was brought from Aix to Ghent! A rumbustious poem that leaves MasterChef in the shade and the kitchen could have come straight out of Alice in Wonderland! My only suggestion, as far as tempo is concerned, is 'rattle of tins' rather than 'rattling' in the 11th verse. Wonderful names - you've had some fun there! Could there be a Princess Hilda in the offing, I wonder? Good luck in the contest. I'm anticipating a runaway victory for you, celebrated with a slice or two of Christmas cake.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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I haven't had such a good canter since the good news was brought from Aix to Ghent! A rumbustious poem that leaves MasterChef in the shade and the kitchen could have come straight out of Alice in Wonderland! My only suggestion, as far as tempo is concerned, is 'rattle of tins' rather than 'rattling' in the 11th verse. Wonderful names - you've had some fun there! Could there be a Princess Hilda in the offing, I wonder? Good luck in the contest. I'm anticipating a runaway victory for you, celebrated with a slice or two of Christmas cake.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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I galloped, Dirck galloped, we galloped all three - but they were all galloping in the other direction. I think there is a parody where they went Vice Versa1
Thanks so much for the kind remarks - I appreciate them coming from you. I have already had two victories for the month - one more than my quota, but yes, another one to complete the trifecta would be a welcome Christmas present, especially since my income dries up over the Christmas holidays!
Have a great Christmas, Tony. Are you still B&B-ing? I expect you'll have guests over Christmas and work to do...
Steve
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Happy Christmas to you. Yes, we are fully booked over the Christmas break and for most of the January school holidays - so it will be fairly busy. However, we usually have about 15-20 nights booked throughout the year, so not much more than usual - just hotter weather for the changeovers!
Comment from trumby
Wonderful poem. Great story shared in a poem. I enjoyed reading the fancy names, well presented. I'm sure the kids will enjoy hearing this poem when told to them. Well rhymed from start to the end. Good luck in the contest. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Wonderful poem. Great story shared in a poem. I enjoyed reading the fancy names, well presented. I'm sure the kids will enjoy hearing this poem when told to them. Well rhymed from start to the end. Good luck in the contest. Keep it up.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Thanks for the kind words - have a great Christmas.
Steve
Comment from foxangie123
Good One. This seems more like a story versus a piece of poetry. With way you have done a fine job with it. Is this a story you have created on your own? What inspired it?
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Good One. This seems more like a story versus a piece of poetry. With way you have done a fine job with it. Is this a story you have created on your own? What inspired it?
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Thanks, Angie.
This is one of a series of poems about the Gobbledegooks - I am gradually working towards getting the scullery-maid Hilda married off to Prince Rupert. A few more adventures first - I believe I will have him go off to fight a dragon next....
Steve
Comment from Jay Squires
This is the fun-est poem I think I've read here on FanStory. But it's not just funny, it's witty and it's intelligent.
Your comedic timing is impeccable.
I found two spelling errors that don't effect the rhyming:
They come bearing chocolate and cheeses and chilli, [Chili has only one "l"]
See Hilda's sweet blushing, her legs growing week [...legs growing WEAK]
Good luck on the contest. If they're looking for the joy of language, yours should be a shoo-in.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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This is the fun-est poem I think I've read here on FanStory. But it's not just funny, it's witty and it's intelligent.
Your comedic timing is impeccable.
I found two spelling errors that don't effect the rhyming:
They come bearing chocolate and cheeses and chilli, [Chili has only one "l"]
See Hilda's sweet blushing, her legs growing week [...legs growing WEAK]
Good luck on the contest. If they're looking for the joy of language, yours should be a shoo-in.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Thanks, Jay. Joy of language must have won the day!
I appreciate the sharp eye for spelling - chilli vs chili is a UV vs American thing, but week was a typo.
Merry Christmas.
Steve
Comment from Liberty Justice
Deliciously scruptious baking contest. Chefs are battling in a baking contests with flour, sugar, eggs flying every way. Bouncy competitive verses sing joyfully to cooking contest.liberty justice
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Deliciously scruptious baking contest. Chefs are battling in a baking contests with flour, sugar, eggs flying every way. Bouncy competitive verses sing joyfully to cooking contest.liberty justice
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Thanks, LJ - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Joy Graham
Wow! This is fantastic. Entertaining from beginning to end. I love the characters and the images are vivid in my mind. This would make a great picture book for children, in my humble opinion. I think this is a top contender in the contest, if not the winner. Sorry I'm out of sixes.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Wow! This is fantastic. Entertaining from beginning to end. I love the characters and the images are vivid in my mind. This would make a great picture book for children, in my humble opinion. I think this is a top contender in the contest, if not the winner. Sorry I'm out of sixes.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Thanks, Joy.
This is the fifth episode in my Gobbledegooks series. I have tried to get a publisher interested, but no luck so far. I intend to keep going till I get Hilda and Rupert married off!
Yes, it is a winner - my third this month - I'm really on a roll.
Steve
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a masterwork as far as I'm concerned. I truly enjoyed the farcical story and all the zany names. The contest was full of neat names and concoctions. The conclusion was happy and made this a wonderful read.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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This is a masterwork as far as I'm concerned. I truly enjoyed the farcical story and all the zany names. The contest was full of neat names and concoctions. The conclusion was happy and made this a wonderful read.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Bill, thanks for the great vote of confidence - yes, we have a winner - my third this month so I'm on a really hot roll.
Merry Christmas.
Steve
Comment from cj lutton
What can I say, but fantastically presented!
What a magical kingdom you have created for all to enjoy.
A lesson of perseverance, courage and confidence.
Great job!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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What can I say, but fantastically presented!
What a magical kingdom you have created for all to enjoy.
A lesson of perseverance, courage and confidence.
Great job!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Thanks for the great review. This is actually the fifth poem in my Gobbledegooks series. I'm gradually working towards the big romance for Hilda and Rupert.
Steve
