Comment from Tessa Kay

Exceptional

This is a real poetry feast. Full of lovely ingredients like alliterations and rhymes within the lines, lots of expressive verbs and adjectives. And a whole lot of humour.
A great recipe for this contest. Sounds like a winner to me. Love the Gobbledegookians. :)

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Tessa, thanks for the great review and the six stars.

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Steve

reply by Tessa Kay on 23-Dec-2015

Please do. Nothing nicer than a gobbledeegook wedding. :)

Comment from ellie6

Excellent

A charming and funny poem. Lickladle Licorice and Wineberry Whiskit , Mousse Marzipanaigan and Truffles Trelawney are priceless! A brilliant offering.

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks. Ellie.

Steve

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

Great rhymes and unfailing rhythm make it fun to read. Nice to see the scullery main, Hilda take on the big chef. Well done, Steve. Good luck in the contest!

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thank you!

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Steve

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Good

I like children's poetry, and I like your idea for the cake of the year. It had my attention for a while, but I think it is too long. When you said in your notes that this will be a chapter, I can believe it. But, for a poem, I suggest trimming it down a bit to a more manageable length. It's cute, and I like the Gobbledegookians idea. The rhymes were good and the meter was fine. I suggest trimming the fat a little, that's all.
Have a merry Christmas.

Peace, Jesse James


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 Comment Written 20-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks, Jesse.

Yes, it is long for a poem, but not for a story...

Merry Christmas to you too

Steve

reply by Jesse James Doty on 23-Dec-2015

That makes sense to me.

Jesse

Comment from giraffmang

Exceptional

Hi Steve,

I don't even know where to start with this!

It was fantastic, the words zing about and spill from the tongue, a pleasure to behold for old and young! I read this to my little one and she giggled at the names and the lovely words.

Can't get a better seal of approval than that!
All the best and good luck
G

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks a lot for the great review, the six stars and for road-testing this on your little girl.

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Steve

Comment from cuttlefische

Excellent

A splendiferously well-baked poem that paints a vivid baker's shop window display of scrumptious delights and tells of a rags to riches story with a happy ending.
What more could we wish for at this time of year?
Awesome poem, thanks for sharing.

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks for the great review.

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Steve

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Just like wow what a mouth full, very good well written well versed and read. reads with such a flow for even as long as it is just carries all the way through. Great job and good luck with this.

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Steve

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This sounds like an interesting cake that you have created here. Well done and Merry Christmas.

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks, Tomes.

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Steve

reply by Tomes Johnston on 23-Dec-2015

Good luck.

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

Well, I think this a contest I did well not to enter.
Hard not to like a story with two winning cakes.
I especially like you choice of names--they will delight children, unless I miss my guess.
Even a little hint at happily ever after in the end.
Well done, Steve.

Best of luck with the Committee.

Peace, Lee

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks, Lee.

I always have fun with thes,

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

These gobbledygook poems are wonderful to read, Steve, but I must say a little testing to the tongue! LOL. This one is very appropriate as all the Christmas bakers will be active, no doubt. Giddy

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015

Thanks, Giddy.

This is the fifth poem in the Gobbledegooks series. I can see I'll have to keep going until I get Hilda and Rupert married off.

Merry Christmas to you and yours.

Steve