Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 84 "Bat Out of Hell?"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Okay, so let me see if I understand this, Debbie.
The woman, Diane, who lived in this old, reputedly haunted Victorian home, could shape-shift, transforming herself into a bat. Is that correct? Either that or she's had herself one heck-of-a dream, lol.
Well, if your answer's yes, then she's a vampire.
Or, perhaps she'd been a bat all along.
Lastly, she might have dreamed the entire scenario and was never really flying with bats and hanging from rafters at all. After all, it does mention earlier in your story that she walked by the attic door on her way to bed each night, so I doubt she was a bat.
Whatever she was, I liked your Tiny Tale of Terror and I certainly appreciate your contribution to the book.
Well done, Debbie.
~Dean ;}
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Okay, so let me see if I understand this, Debbie.
The woman, Diane, who lived in this old, reputedly haunted Victorian home, could shape-shift, transforming herself into a bat. Is that correct? Either that or she's had herself one heck-of-a dream, lol.
Well, if your answer's yes, then she's a vampire.
Or, perhaps she'd been a bat all along.
Lastly, she might have dreamed the entire scenario and was never really flying with bats and hanging from rafters at all. After all, it does mention earlier in your story that she walked by the attic door on her way to bed each night, so I doubt she was a bat.
Whatever she was, I liked your Tiny Tale of Terror and I certainly appreciate your contribution to the book.
Well done, Debbie.
~Dean ;}
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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I let the reader decide, but either way, she got caught by her own net--hope that doesn't happen to me. What a way to go, LOL. Thanks, Dean~Debbie
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Sometimes it's best to let the readers decide for themselves, Debbie. I do it all of the time too.
You are very welcome, my friend. ~Dean :}
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Sometimes it's best to let the readers decide for themselves, Debbie. I do it all of the time too.
You are very welcome, my friend. ~Dean :}
Comment from Dawn Munro
HAHAHAHA! What a GREAT little tale - I LOVED this, Deb. Bats freak me out when they're flying around me at night, but they are actually fascinating creatures, and completely harmless, except if they are carrying rabies (and the guano is highly toxic - bat shi*).
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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HAHAHAHA! What a GREAT little tale - I LOVED this, Deb. Bats freak me out when they're flying around me at night, but they are actually fascinating creatures, and completely harmless, except if they are carrying rabies (and the guano is highly toxic - bat shi*).
Comment Written 12-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Thanks, Dawn. After reading about your bats, I thought you might enjoy this. Take are, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Mastery
Wow! I didn't see that coming, Debbie. I had no idea you could write horror, Debbie. This started out to be a haunting and ended up with bats. LOL...I will watch out for that woman. Merry Christmas, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Wow! I didn't see that coming, Debbie. I had no idea you could write horror, Debbie. This started out to be a haunting and ended up with bats. LOL...I will watch out for that woman. Merry Christmas, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 10-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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I write a bit of everything, I think. Jack of all trades, master of none as the saying goes. I missed your post last week. I'll read it before I get to this weeks. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
This is certainly an unusual story, Debbie.
I hope you are doing well.
I'm personally having one of my off days. I am dealing with dizziness and being tired, which means my heart is acting up today.
In other news - I am officially retired now.
No long after I put in my notice on the job the operations manager ask me to go ahead and leave now, or he was going to let me go since my heart condition was affecting my job performance. It's hard to be talking on a phone doing tech support when you have trouble breathing and cough a lot.
Take care, my friend. JW
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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This is certainly an unusual story, Debbie.
I hope you are doing well.
I'm personally having one of my off days. I am dealing with dizziness and being tired, which means my heart is acting up today.
In other news - I am officially retired now.
No long after I put in my notice on the job the operations manager ask me to go ahead and leave now, or he was going to let me go since my heart condition was affecting my job performance. It's hard to be talking on a phone doing tech support when you have trouble breathing and cough a lot.
Take care, my friend. JW
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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I hope you are feeling better today, my friend. Enjoy retirement--write a lot. Take care~Debbie
Comment from royowen
Some people have quite often aligned and thought some people resemble their pets, or vice versa. This takes this to the enth degree. I thought it quite lighthearted with a touch of pathos and with a very clever ending that takes a very moral twist in the tail, well done, Debbie, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Some people have quite often aligned and thought some people resemble their pets, or vice versa. This takes this to the enth degree. I thought it quite lighthearted with a touch of pathos and with a very clever ending that takes a very moral twist in the tail, well done, Debbie, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Thanks< Roy. glad you liked it, my friend~Debbie
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Welcome Debbie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good story. She turned into a bat, probably from being around them and handling them so much. That might be a side effect of dealing with bats. I'll have to remember that if I ever see any. I have never seen a bat in my life... I've been so deprived. LOL!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Good story. She turned into a bat, probably from being around them and handling them so much. That might be a side effect of dealing with bats. I'll have to remember that if I ever see any. I have never seen a bat in my life... I've been so deprived. LOL!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Oh no! I'll turn in to a bat! Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Realist101
Hahahaahahaaa!!!! Love this! Thank you for a smile Debbie. This reminds me of my house I lost. It had bats in the attic and once in a while they'd get into the house. My cat grabbed one once and had it pinned in the living room...I had to get the broom and swat it outside...after it flew around and around and around for about a half hour! I was exhausted swinging the broom up in the air! I like the part in this where the lady thinks she might turn into a bat. Nice touch! Love and a hug....suse
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Hahahaahahaaa!!!! Love this! Thank you for a smile Debbie. This reminds me of my house I lost. It had bats in the attic and once in a while they'd get into the house. My cat grabbed one once and had it pinned in the living room...I had to get the broom and swat it outside...after it flew around and around and around for about a half hour! I was exhausted swinging the broom up in the air! I like the part in this where the lady thinks she might turn into a bat. Nice touch! Love and a hug....suse
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thanks, Suse. Glad you enjoyed it. Get a fish net. They get tangled in it and can't get out. On my way to bed--hopefully, no bats tonight. Hugs~Debbie
Comment from giraffmang
Hi There,
A good premise for the story established here. you don't have to explain everything in these types of tales and let it sit with the reader the way it is.
Nice job
GMG
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Hi There,
A good premise for the story established here. you don't have to explain everything in these types of tales and let it sit with the reader the way it is.
Nice job
GMG
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you, my friend. I'm primarily a poet, but giving some fiction a try. Any advice is appreciated~Debbie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Debbie :)
This is a confusing story to me.
Tuesday night, she felt the wind pulling her first toward, and then under the attic door. (I understand this far) She found herself hanging upside down from the rafters. What happened? She turned into a bat? I am assuming she did because at the end she gets caught in the net. It's just the transition that seems odd.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Hello Debbie :)
This is a confusing story to me.
Tuesday night, she felt the wind pulling her first toward, and then under the attic door. (I understand this far) She found herself hanging upside down from the rafters. What happened? She turned into a bat? I am assuming she did because at the end she gets caught in the net. It's just the transition that seems odd.
Gypsy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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yes, she turns into a bat. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Jay Squires
This is really a clever story, Debbie. I liked the way you didn't even indent for a new paragraph when you first introduce Diane being drawn to the draft at the bottom of the door. It's much more effective the way you did it.
There was quite a feast to be eaten out there, if you were a bat. [Debbie, a little suggestion. By now the reader has figured Diane is a bat. To me it's kind of like making an unspoken statement to the reader "Diane is a bat" by adding that last "if you were a bat." I would consider leaving that clause out.]
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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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This is really a clever story, Debbie. I liked the way you didn't even indent for a new paragraph when you first introduce Diane being drawn to the draft at the bottom of the door. It's much more effective the way you did it.
There was quite a feast to be eaten out there, if you were a bat. [Debbie, a little suggestion. By now the reader has figured Diane is a bat. To me it's kind of like making an unspoken statement to the reader "Diane is a bat" by adding that last "if you were a bat." I would consider leaving that clause out.]
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Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thanks so much, Jay. Glad you liked it. Hope my bats do too!. He-he. I did change that. Thanks for the suggestion, my friend~Debbie
