Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "The Mulberry"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
53 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Did you ever see the movie "Mirrors?" Crispy critters for Christmas indeed! Half way through your chapter I was laughing. Looking like a reject from an Easy-Bake Oven, Sarah Lee would be proud! Old Charlie ain't no dummy, he went runnin' for his mummy! LOL. You are a wicked writer my dear friend. Best wishes for the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Did you ever see the movie "Mirrors?" Crispy critters for Christmas indeed! Half way through your chapter I was laughing. Looking like a reject from an Easy-Bake Oven, Sarah Lee would be proud! Old Charlie ain't no dummy, he went runnin' for his mummy! LOL. You are a wicked writer my dear friend. Best wishes for the contest!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Yes, I certainly have seen that movie, Aussie. It's very creep and one of my personal faves. The jaw-ripping bathtub scene is horrendous!
Thanks for your complimentary comments and show of support for the upcoming contest. It is deeply appreciated, my dear.
~Dean :}
Comment from Eric1
Hi Dean, another well written story for this brilliant book of short stories, This one was a little longer than most but then - the lead character had a lot more to say, great stuff my friend.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Hi Dean, another well written story for this brilliant book of short stories, This one was a little longer than most but then - the lead character had a lot more to say, great stuff my friend.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting on the story, Eric. I appreciate it, mate!
~Dean
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Ulla
Very well written Dean as per usual, and a very good take on the dark side of Christmas. There was something about the Charlie Munchhausen name you've chosen, until it dawned on me. Of course the Munchausen syndrome. I can't quite remember what it is. Something about causing damage to others in order to gain sympathy. Something like that. Very cleverly used here. All best. Ulla
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Very well written Dean as per usual, and a very good take on the dark side of Christmas. There was something about the Charlie Munchhausen name you've chosen, until it dawned on me. Of course the Munchausen syndrome. I can't quite remember what it is. Something about causing damage to others in order to gain sympathy. Something like that. Very cleverly used here. All best. Ulla
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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You're absolutely correct, Ulla. It was used prominently in the film, The Sixth Sense, starring Bruce Willis.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting on the story. I appreciate it.
~Dean
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Dean,
read your horror tale about Charlie
he certainly had a wicked syndrome. Your horror tale reminds me of one of Baron Munchausen tales he entrained his dinner guests with tales about his adventures like your character Charlie.
Kept my attention
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Hello Dean,
read your horror tale about Charlie
he certainly had a wicked syndrome. Your horror tale reminds me of one of Baron Munchausen tales he entrained his dinner guests with tales about his adventures like your character Charlie.
Kept my attention
Gert
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Great, Gert, I'm happy to hear it.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting on the story. I appreciate it.
~Dean
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You are welcome Dean
Gert
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Ok, Dean
I finally gathered up my courage and read your tale of the dark side of Christmas. I must say it was not as gory as I expected. It was full of great details and intrigue. I was engaged throughout the story. The name Charlie Munchausen gave me a hint about his "occupation." I have heard of the Munchausen syndrome in medical terms where a person causes injuries/illness to others in order to gain sympathy from those around making them look like such a caring person. So Charlie is like that. He does not like his job and working on Christmas Eve. Yet he does it making people think he is such a good and caring man to work the holiday where others can have it off--so they think. He has ulterior motives. He is a pyromaniac in the guise of a caring cop.
Good job with the story. You told just enough of the aftermath to give the reader a sense of dread, but enough to keep them reading.
I enjoyed your tale. I see no changes. Best wishes in the contest.
Excellent!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Ok, Dean
I finally gathered up my courage and read your tale of the dark side of Christmas. I must say it was not as gory as I expected. It was full of great details and intrigue. I was engaged throughout the story. The name Charlie Munchausen gave me a hint about his "occupation." I have heard of the Munchausen syndrome in medical terms where a person causes injuries/illness to others in order to gain sympathy from those around making them look like such a caring person. So Charlie is like that. He does not like his job and working on Christmas Eve. Yet he does it making people think he is such a good and caring man to work the holiday where others can have it off--so they think. He has ulterior motives. He is a pyromaniac in the guise of a caring cop.
Good job with the story. You told just enough of the aftermath to give the reader a sense of dread, but enough to keep them reading.
I enjoyed your tale. I see no changes. Best wishes in the contest.
Excellent!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Damn you're good, Jan! Just you and one other person have picked up the hidden meaning in this story. I'm very impressed.
Thanks for reading into this story what I had hoped nearly everyone would, but haven't. If I could return your kind generosity and award a reviewer six stars, as you have done here in your rating of my Tiny Tale of Terror, you would sure be getting one from me.
Thanks so much again for "getting it"
With deepest gratitude
~Dean :}
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Dean,
One of these days, you may be inclined to give a poem of mine a 6. If not, I still value your opinion. Jan
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Sure thing, LJ. Anytime.
~Dean :}
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Oh, I have no doubt I will, Jan. I think you're a very talented poet and writer in general. Not only that, but you're a very kind and caring person too.
I can just tell...
~Dean
Comment from TomyKan
This is a creepy, dark Christmas tale filled with ghosts and mannequins that come alive. You can be morbid in prose as well as poetry. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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This is a creepy, dark Christmas tale filled with ghosts and mannequins that come alive. You can be morbid in prose as well as poetry. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Hahaha...so I've been told, Tomy. I do try. On the same token, I also try to abstain from the buckets of blood and gore which seems so prevalent in much of horror writing today. That's not horror, not to me. That's just splatter porn. True horror is that feeling you get after reading something that makes you look over your shoulder and behind you after you're done reading. It causes you to casually turn on a few more lights than you had on before you began. The hairs on the back of your neck prickle, and you get goosebumps on your arms. THAT'S the sort of feeling I always strive so desperately to achieve. And while I'm not always successful, it isn't for a lack of effort, heh-heh.
Thank you very much for your comments.
~Dean
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You do a terrific job of reaching your horror objective. Keep writing.
Comment from ciliverde
I had a bad feeling the minute I read about the mannequins. Geez, those things are creepy! All alone guarding an empty building, with a bunch of mannequins? No thank you. Well, I have a feeling this is going to be it for Mulberry and Sons....
Nice job, Dean,
Carol
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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I had a bad feeling the minute I read about the mannequins. Geez, those things are creepy! All alone guarding an empty building, with a bunch of mannequins? No thank you. Well, I have a feeling this is going to be it for Mulberry and Sons....
Nice job, Dean,
Carol
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting on this, my latest Tiny Tale of Terror, Carol. I always try to abstain from buckets of blood and gore which seems so prevalent in much of horror writing today. That's not horror, not to me. That's just splatter porn. True horror is that feeling you get after reading something that makes you look over your shoulder and behind you after you've finished. It causes you to casually turn on a few more lights than you had on before you began. The hairs on the back of your neck prickle, and you get goosebumps on your arms. THAT'S the sort of feeling I always strive so desperately to achieve. And while I'm not always successful, it isn't for lack of effort, heh-heh.
Thank you very much again for your comments.
~Dean
Comment from LIJ Red
Popping sounds like hooves...something red reflecting the light...the smell of pipe smoke...the intruder in the storeroom, could it be--? Looks like an excellent short horror for the collection...
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Popping sounds like hooves...something red reflecting the light...the smell of pipe smoke...the intruder in the storeroom, could it be--? Looks like an excellent short horror for the collection...
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Thanks for reading and commenting on my latest Tiny Tale of Terror, Red. There's some hidden meanings here, and it's a bit more subtle than most I've written.
I'm very glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from Sis Cat
I knew with a name like Munchausen I would be in for a ride. This is a classic, dark Christmas tale filled with ghosts and mannequins that come alive. I would not want to be the night security guard at Mulberry & Sons, Inc. the department store is haunted. I also enjoyed the voice and tone of the narrator which lured me into his macabre tale. Thank you for scaring.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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I knew with a name like Munchausen I would be in for a ride. This is a classic, dark Christmas tale filled with ghosts and mannequins that come alive. I would not want to be the night security guard at Mulberry & Sons, Inc. the department store is haunted. I also enjoyed the voice and tone of the narrator which lured me into his macabre tale. Thank you for scaring.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Thanks for reading and commenting on my latest Tiny Tale of Terror, Andre. There's some hidden meaning in this one, and it's a bit more subtle than most I've written.
I'm very glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from GWHARGIS
Creepy, as always. You hold enough back for my imagination to kick in. Good character voice. I could picture old Charlie. I bet his uniform is wrinkled. Great story. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Creepy, as always. You hold enough back for my imagination to kick in. Good character voice. I could picture old Charlie. I bet his uniform is wrinkled. Great story. Gretchen
Comment Written 07-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Hahaha, I'll bet it's wrinkled too, Gretchen.
Thanks for reading and commenting on my latest Tiny Tale of Terror. There's some hidden meaning in this one, and it's a bit more subtle than the rest.
I'm very glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
