Falling Star
A person surrendering to alcohol abuse7 total reviews
Comment from Eric1
Hi RJ, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, an excellent free verse poem that tells of the perils which wait in a bottle, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Hi RJ, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, an excellent free verse poem that tells of the perils which wait in a bottle, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you taking time to read a post a review. Your comments were nice to hear. RJ
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You are very welcome RJ
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You are very welcome RJ
Comment from writeapoem
A very nice poem my own father was a falling star, alcohol and too much of it the culprit. The flow of words descriptive of the person worsened by the terrible intoxicated drink.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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A very nice poem my own father was a falling star, alcohol and too much of it the culprit. The flow of words descriptive of the person worsened by the terrible intoxicated drink.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you taking time to read a post a review. Your comments are nice as you know what I'm going through. RJ
Comment from patcelaw
Alcohol abuse is so devastating to a family. They can lose everything, even the lose of some of the lives in the family. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Alcohol abuse is so devastating to a family. They can lose everything, even the lose of some of the lives in the family. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you taking time to read a post a review, and your well wishes for the contest. RJ
Comment from Ben Colder
Very good contest piece. The poems spelled out one of the worse down- fall for mankind. Alcohol can either be a friend or enemy. Good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Very good contest piece. The poems spelled out one of the worse down- fall for mankind. Alcohol can either be a friend or enemy. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you taking time to read a post a review, and the contest wishes. RJ
Comment from write hand blue
A good attempt at an acrostic poem.
Infinitely readable about the battle of alcohol abuse and the trouble caused to a family.
Good poem.
:) Mel. ***
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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A good attempt at an acrostic poem.
Infinitely readable about the battle of alcohol abuse and the trouble caused to a family.
Good poem.
:) Mel. ***
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you taking time to read a post a review. Your comments were nice to hear. RJ
Comment from AnnieDawn
A very unique and inventive poem. I enjoyed reading the way you extended the sentences. This is a good entry for the Acrostic contest. A very good job and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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A very unique and inventive poem. I enjoyed reading the way you extended the sentences. This is a good entry for the Acrostic contest. A very good job and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you taking time to read a post a review, and contest well wishes. RJ
Comment from Pyrrho
Falling Star drops sluggish across the sky. ... sluggish=>sluggishly
If this were a rhymed/metered poem and you omitted the "ly" to enhance flow/meter, it would be 'poetic license'' but in a free-verse poem, it is a 'poetic felony'
Acrostics with no poetic attributes are not impressive, in fact are usually a bore. How much talent does it take to begin each line with a particular letter. if you hadn't managed to put enjambment into your second verse, I would have assessed this as needing work. But I shall give your the benefit of my doubt as too its worth.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Falling Star drops sluggish across the sky. ... sluggish=>sluggishly
If this were a rhymed/metered poem and you omitted the "ly" to enhance flow/meter, it would be 'poetic license'' but in a free-verse poem, it is a 'poetic felony'
Acrostics with no poetic attributes are not impressive, in fact are usually a bore. How much talent does it take to begin each line with a particular letter. if you hadn't managed to put enjambment into your second verse, I would have assessed this as needing work. But I shall give your the benefit of my doubt as too its worth.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you taking time to read a post a review Your comments are well received and I will be making a few changes. RJ
