Drinking Problem -- The Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Ransom"Alcohol destroys life long friendhip
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Comment from mbroyles2
Interesting conversation between Tone and the Professor. The professor should consider himself lucky that Tone carried on a conversation for so long.
Sounds like the professor isn't getting through though. The money or else.
Great job keeping the tension high.
Michael
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Interesting conversation between Tone and the Professor. The professor should consider himself lucky that Tone carried on a conversation for so long.
Sounds like the professor isn't getting through though. The money or else.
Great job keeping the tension high.
Michael
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from AnnieDawn
I really enjoyed your chapter. I found no errors in grammar or punctuation that stood out when I was reading it. The only question I would ask is would this chapter be long enough for a book? Good job and well done.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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I really enjoyed your chapter. I found no errors in grammar or punctuation that stood out when I was reading it. The only question I would ask is would this chapter be long enough for a book? Good job and well done.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this tale. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from cj lutton
Excellent excursion into the violent world of greed and depravity.
Your storytelling techniques are outstanding and your thoughts can be provocative in the simplicity of placing an ordinary citizen in an untenable situation.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Excellent excursion into the violent world of greed and depravity.
Your storytelling techniques are outstanding and your thoughts can be provocative in the simplicity of placing an ordinary citizen in an untenable situation.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more to come. So, stay tuned. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
Again you've written this very well. You sure are great at writing so many different stories, poems, songs etc. As always I enjoyed reading this. I look forward to what you'll post next.
Kat
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Hi Brett,
Again you've written this very well. You sure are great at writing so many different stories, poems, songs etc. As always I enjoyed reading this. I look forward to what you'll post next.
Kat
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. It was time to revisit the Dungstons and the Jenners. Your comments and support appreciated.
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I love reading your work. Kat
Comment from doggymad
Great chapter. For a moment I thought that the professor wasn't overly anxious to have his son safe. But then there was that twist.
Money and position aren't going to be much good to him soon
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Great chapter. For a moment I thought that the professor wasn't overly anxious to have his son safe. But then there was that twist.
Money and position aren't going to be much good to him soon
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. Professor Dungston has many issues to be dealing with right now. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MelB
Wow, I thought the professor had him there for a minute, but Tone really did have all the goods on him. I sincerely hope Jonathan's ear stays intact. Thank you for posting the definition of locoitis. I was going to have to look that one up!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Wow, I thought the professor had him there for a minute, but Tone really did have all the goods on him. I sincerely hope Jonathan's ear stays intact. Thank you for posting the definition of locoitis. I was going to have to look that one up!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. Not sure "locoitis" is even a word. So, may not find it on google. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Sloegin
I thoroughly enjoyed the scene presented in this chapter. You delivered tension, fear and the threat of violence in a way I was able to accept them.
Your dialogue had a real, if scary tone(?) to it.
The last line of your chapter really set the stage for me to want to keep reading.
I don't understand your need for copyright protection.
Sloegin
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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I thoroughly enjoyed the scene presented in this chapter. You delivered tension, fear and the threat of violence in a way I was able to accept them.
Your dialogue had a real, if scary tone(?) to it.
The last line of your chapter really set the stage for me to want to keep reading.
I don't understand your need for copyright protection.
Sloegin
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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I do that as a reminder because I have previously had a storyline I wrote changed by some writers on this site, who then tried to pass it off as if it was their original work, when it obviously was not.
This system has a good copyright registration, but this problem still could persist, so I add as a reminder.
Glad you enjoyed this little tale.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Linda Engel
Another excellent suspenseful chapter. You always wonder what would happen if you called their bluff. What would happen if the professor told the authorities and the college that he was being blackmailed? Except that the professor was having an affair and was into some kinky stuff.
Tone is a demented soul for sure but everyone has a weak point. The story is interesting and you keep us wanting more. So hurry up and give us another chapter. :)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Another excellent suspenseful chapter. You always wonder what would happen if you called their bluff. What would happen if the professor told the authorities and the college that he was being blackmailed? Except that the professor was having an affair and was into some kinky stuff.
Tone is a demented soul for sure but everyone has a weak point. The story is interesting and you keep us wanting more. So hurry up and give us another chapter. :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. Your comments, support, and the six stars appreciated.
Much more of this story still to come, so stay tuned.
Comment from Zue65
My, my this chapter is really packed with action and mounting tension. Why is this locoitic Tone, so keen on hurting and ruining the life of Professor Dungston? Is there a hidden grudge or hatred towrads the Prof to go such length as to plant evidence, having the DNA of the Prof on Gail Stevenson's dead body? Then now, threatening to kill the Prof's son Jonathan in exchange for money. Next chapter will surely be more interesting. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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My, my this chapter is really packed with action and mounting tension. Why is this locoitic Tone, so keen on hurting and ruining the life of Professor Dungston? Is there a hidden grudge or hatred towrads the Prof to go such length as to plant evidence, having the DNA of the Prof on Gail Stevenson's dead body? Then now, threatening to kill the Prof's son Jonathan in exchange for money. Next chapter will surely be more interesting. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale.
Tone and Professor Dungston having a sordid past? Hummmmm??????
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello Brett. I stopped by to say hello and to thank you for using my artwork. I see also that you write songs. Are you aware of Fanmusic.com? I have a few songs of mine posted there. I also write and sing gospel, some country as well. I will have to check out your work. Loyd
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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Hello Brett. I stopped by to say hello and to thank you for using my artwork. I see also that you write songs. Are you aware of Fanmusic.com? I have a few songs of mine posted there. I also write and sing gospel, some country as well. I will have to check out your work. Loyd
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thanks for heads-up on Fanmusic.com.
Not the first of your artwork I have used.
Won't be the last either.
Glad you enjoyed this little tale.
Your comments and support appreciated.
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Hi Brett. Thanks for your response. Don't forget that I have several written works here on Fanstory.com as well. I have a few of my songs, "Oceans of Love... Kisses of the Wind." for example. Be blessed, Loyd
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Maybe you would consider entering the contest below. So far, there are several open spots. Loyd
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Hi Brett. Thanks for your response. Don't forget that I have several written works here on Fanstory.com as well. I have a few of my songs, "Oceans of Love... Kisses of the Wind." for example. Be blessed, Loyd
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Maybe you would consider entering the contest below. So far, there are several open spots. Loyd
What Are You THANKFUL For?
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