Faith
Self-worth coupled with God's love leads us to success61 total reviews
Comment from bcwoods
It is clear through your poem your faith. I enjoyed reading it. The second stanza, I felt you could have done without. It appeared that you were trying too hard to rhyme there. But overall, I enjoyed the poem.
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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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It is clear through your poem your faith. I enjoyed reading it. The second stanza, I felt you could have done without. It appeared that you were trying too hard to rhyme there. But overall, I enjoyed the poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thanks for reading.
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Understood. Thanks for the clarification.
Comment from Neonewman
Outstanding, spiritually lifting artwork you have chosen to accompany this wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered my friend! God is everywhere, not just in the church or temples. I agree with this statement whole heartily.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Outstanding, spiritually lifting artwork you have chosen to accompany this wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered my friend! God is everywhere, not just in the church or temples. I agree with this statement whole heartily.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Neonewman, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts, fantastic words and blessings. I am so glad you liked it. ~ RP
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My pleasure RP!
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My pleasure RP!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
We have to attend a service in a church to feed your soul. You will not keep your faith when you don't regularly feed your soul by listen to a teaching. We should have a peace in our hearts despite the stress and darkness around us.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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We have to attend a service in a church to feed your soul. You will not keep your faith when you don't regularly feed your soul by listen to a teaching. We should have a peace in our hearts despite the stress and darkness around us.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Sandra du Plessis, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts and fantastic words. I am so glad you liked it.~ RP
Comment from ravenblack
I do like that you make this poem inclusive, worship at temple, mosque or church all pathways to the divine. I just trip on the third stanza. " oblivious of divine light"- of should be to. I also have no idea what you mean by the simile of musk deer seeking it outside. Do you mean rutting? I'm sorry, the simile just is not clear to me. Other than what I have pointed out, this is a strong poem of faith.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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I do like that you make this poem inclusive, worship at temple, mosque or church all pathways to the divine. I just trip on the third stanza. " oblivious of divine light"- of should be to. I also have no idea what you mean by the simile of musk deer seeking it outside. Do you mean rutting? I'm sorry, the simile just is not clear to me. Other than what I have pointed out, this is a strong poem of faith.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Ravenblack, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts and fantastic words. I am so glad you liked it.
Dear Friend, 'musk' is a very strong, pleasant and fragrant substance rarely found in some male deer but they are quite ignorant of their this treasure and remain running/looking for it in the forest.~ RP
Comment from Louise Michelle
I really enjoyed this poem, RP, and agree with your sentiments. Faith, God, spirituality - it all comes from within. It is in our nature to make use of the inner strength if we only open ourselves up to the possibilities. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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I really enjoyed this poem, RP, and agree with your sentiments. Faith, God, spirituality - it all comes from within. It is in our nature to make use of the inner strength if we only open ourselves up to the possibilities. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Louise Michelle, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts and fantastic words. I am so glad you liked it. ~ RP
Comment from rjuselius
This is an interesting piece of poetry dear RP! I do agree with the premise. I think people who search for god can find him everywhere.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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This is an interesting piece of poetry dear RP! I do agree with the premise. I think people who search for god can find him everywhere.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Rjuselius, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts, fantastic words and Good Luck Wishes. I am so glad you liked it. ~ RP
Comment from krys123
Rpsaxena;
-right from the get-go I noticed the picture you have chosen which is very appropriate, relative and complementary to your writing.
- I must admit however, that some of your rhyming seems to be a bit forced as such rhymes you used were: " God" and "Lord" which are near or oblique rhymes and are acceptable, however, rhyming words like: "nod" and "rod" seem to be a little bit unnecessarily forced. All of your other rhymes are contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm the flow smoothly.
They also neither forced nor labored which are very helpful.
- Your rhythm's meter are anapestic at 12 syllables per line and your cadence, timing and tempo were all helpful in making your reading clear, fluid and easy.
- good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concept from one stanza, line and couplet to the next without a syntactical break.
- I realize your general concept that we all have a place of worship that we use for our own devices but they all have one thing in common and universal and that that reads worship in search for the Lord.
- thank you for sharing and posting and good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Rpsaxena;
-right from the get-go I noticed the picture you have chosen which is very appropriate, relative and complementary to your writing.
- I must admit however, that some of your rhyming seems to be a bit forced as such rhymes you used were: " God" and "Lord" which are near or oblique rhymes and are acceptable, however, rhyming words like: "nod" and "rod" seem to be a little bit unnecessarily forced. All of your other rhymes are contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm the flow smoothly.
They also neither forced nor labored which are very helpful.
- Your rhythm's meter are anapestic at 12 syllables per line and your cadence, timing and tempo were all helpful in making your reading clear, fluid and easy.
- good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concept from one stanza, line and couplet to the next without a syntactical break.
- I realize your general concept that we all have a place of worship that we use for our own devices but they all have one thing in common and universal and that that reads worship in search for the Lord.
- thank you for sharing and posting and good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Alex, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts, fantastic words and Good Luck Wishes. I am so glad you liked it. ~ RP
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You are so very welcome RP
Alex
Comment from kathleenspalding
Good poem and words of wisdom. Great choice of artwork. Flows well. I would recommend this to anyone. The only thing that tripped me up was ' As musk deer' - just seems a little out of place as it is the only animal reference. Otherwise very direct and easy to understand. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Good poem and words of wisdom. Great choice of artwork. Flows well. I would recommend this to anyone. The only thing that tripped me up was ' As musk deer' - just seems a little out of place as it is the only animal reference. Otherwise very direct and easy to understand. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Kathleenspalding, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts, fantastic words and Good Luck Wishes. I am so glad you liked it.~ RP
Comment from kittykatnoel
Good entry for the faith poetry contest. My favorite line of the poem is the last one, "Dispelling the darkness caused by nerve-racking stress". It seems to best wrap up the whole idea.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Good entry for the faith poetry contest. My favorite line of the poem is the last one, "Dispelling the darkness caused by nerve-racking stress". It seems to best wrap up the whole idea.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Kittykatnoel, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts, fantastic words and good wishes. I am so glad you liked it. ~ RP
Comment from AnnaLinda
RPSaxena,
You've written a really strong faith entry poem. Your thoughts on faith and seeking the God within are well conveyed. Your lines read smoothly and this one line does really seem to stand out to me:
"Self-worth coupled with God's love leads us to success"
Thank you for sharing this with us,
Linda
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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RPSaxena,
You've written a really strong faith entry poem. Your thoughts on faith and seeking the God within are well conveyed. Your lines read smoothly and this one line does really seem to stand out to me:
"Self-worth coupled with God's love leads us to success"
Thank you for sharing this with us,
Linda
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you Sweet Linda, for this wonderful review, gracious thoughts and fantastic words. I am so glad you liked it. ~ RP
