Poetry and Poison
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Comment from I am Cat
Wow! I saw your name and thought... wait a minute... did I ever read the last chapter of P&P? And I went to my bookcase... yea, I had READ it... just not reviewed it! OMG!
So here I am and on the perfect day of the week as well! lol
Sorry about that Andre! If my head wasn't attached, I'd forget it as well. :(
Needless to say, I loved this except I WANT that sculpture! ;) But oh you are teasing me along, aren't you? This is wonderfully written with some amazing imagery and just such great descriptions... i loved the one of your dad looking like Goofy! lol
I've put the ones I especially liked, below and I hope that it helps you as it does me, to see what people especially enjoy.
I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Loved it!
Cat
'Oh, Andre, why didn't you grab Dad's slide projector, too, when you rescued his art slides from his Albuquerque studio after he died? It would have made examining these slides easier. Who has a slide projector nowadays anyway?' (we do! ;)
'She gripped her bulged belly, like the Venus of Willendorf--that Paleolithic carving of a woman with child-bearing hips and milk-filled breasts' (wow, what great imagery)
'Despite his warning not to remove the slides, he or someone did, because slide #20 for Woman in Pain was not there.' (seriously? arg!) lol
'She looked like a vampire having a miscarriage' (well that made me actually laugh out loud!)
'The size of my thumb, the slide refused to release its secret.' (again, great sentence!)
'His fur-lined earflap hat, visor up, completed his resemblance to the Disney character Goofy'. (perfect imagery! Love it! lol)
'My mother would love to have had thousands of dollars from him to raise his three kids alone. Now he expects me to give him thousands to raise an army of bronzes?' (oh snap! well played)
I'm looking forward to the next one!
Cat
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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Wow! I saw your name and thought... wait a minute... did I ever read the last chapter of P&P? And I went to my bookcase... yea, I had READ it... just not reviewed it! OMG!
So here I am and on the perfect day of the week as well! lol
Sorry about that Andre! If my head wasn't attached, I'd forget it as well. :(
Needless to say, I loved this except I WANT that sculpture! ;) But oh you are teasing me along, aren't you? This is wonderfully written with some amazing imagery and just such great descriptions... i loved the one of your dad looking like Goofy! lol
I've put the ones I especially liked, below and I hope that it helps you as it does me, to see what people especially enjoy.
I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Loved it!
Cat
'Oh, Andre, why didn't you grab Dad's slide projector, too, when you rescued his art slides from his Albuquerque studio after he died? It would have made examining these slides easier. Who has a slide projector nowadays anyway?' (we do! ;)
'She gripped her bulged belly, like the Venus of Willendorf--that Paleolithic carving of a woman with child-bearing hips and milk-filled breasts' (wow, what great imagery)
'Despite his warning not to remove the slides, he or someone did, because slide #20 for Woman in Pain was not there.' (seriously? arg!) lol
'She looked like a vampire having a miscarriage' (well that made me actually laugh out loud!)
'The size of my thumb, the slide refused to release its secret.' (again, great sentence!)
'His fur-lined earflap hat, visor up, completed his resemblance to the Disney character Goofy'. (perfect imagery! Love it! lol)
'My mother would love to have had thousands of dollars from him to raise his three kids alone. Now he expects me to give him thousands to raise an army of bronzes?' (oh snap! well played)
I'm looking forward to the next one!
Cat
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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Oh, thank you, Cat, for your generous, six star review. It made me laugh. I am working on my next chapter where I unveil sculptures which the public have not seen in half a century. This is a daunting project because I have to research and write at the same time. The evidence is all around me in slides, poems, and articles. I just have to assemble the answers to the mystery. Thank you for your review.
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Oh how exciting! I'm really interested in finding out more! Awesome! So much fun to uncover it as you do! ;)
Comment from Treischel
An interesting bit of detective work as you chase down the identity if that sculpture, Woman in Pain. I look forward to future installations the cover his artwork.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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An interesting bit of detective work as you chase down the identity if that sculpture, Woman in Pain. I look forward to future installations the cover his artwork.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Yes, Treischel, I plan on showing my father's sculptures in future chapters. I spent several hours yesterday searching for slides of that sculpture. You will hear my results in future chapters. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a well presented and well written chapter.
You wrote this:
"Indian Lady," "Hold on Little Woman," "Sister of Holy Family," "Fat Lady," and "Woman in Pain."
*Suggestion:
replace those double speech marks with single ones, or better still, use italics for them) Italics=slanted font.
Reserve double speech marks for speech alone.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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This is a well presented and well written chapter.
You wrote this:
"Indian Lady," "Hold on Little Woman," "Sister of Holy Family," "Fat Lady," and "Woman in Pain."
*Suggestion:
replace those double speech marks with single ones, or better still, use italics for them) Italics=slanted font.
Reserve double speech marks for speech alone.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Curly Girl, for your review and suggestions. I will use it. Thanks.
Comment from alvina224224
Feels like a mystery combined with an autobiography, but the content is very intriguing. Well written, it sways from narrative by the author to reports revisited, in the narrator's efforts to unravel the mastery. Looking forward to next episode.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Feels like a mystery combined with an autobiography, but the content is very intriguing. Well written, it sways from narrative by the author to reports revisited, in the narrator's efforts to unravel the mastery. Looking forward to next episode.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Yes, alvina, this is an autobiographical mystery. I am glad you found it intriguing. Thank you for your review.
Comment from TallySally
I found this intriguing. I have an artistic bent - supported by few resources. Wish I had been as determined to work on as 'my father' character in your story.
I like the mystery to be unravelled ... Not only what the works mean, but where they are. I like the 'connecting link' phrase. To connect a man and wife is high praise. Deep. Isn't connecting what all art is about?
Fresh take on art, artists, and art lovers.
Loved the 'deformed' concept. Live long enough we all are deformed!
Excellent job.
Relda
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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I found this intriguing. I have an artistic bent - supported by few resources. Wish I had been as determined to work on as 'my father' character in your story.
I like the mystery to be unravelled ... Not only what the works mean, but where they are. I like the 'connecting link' phrase. To connect a man and wife is high praise. Deep. Isn't connecting what all art is about?
Fresh take on art, artists, and art lovers.
Loved the 'deformed' concept. Live long enough we all are deformed!
Excellent job.
Relda
Comment Written 01-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Yes, Relda, my father, Fred Robert Wilson, was determined. The more I study his life, achievements, and failures, the more determined I become to finish this book and accomplish any dream I set my mind to. I really did not know my father until I looked at his sculptures.
The "connecting link" was my mother's, poet and writer Jessie Lee Dawson-Wilson. In the 1960s she wrote a story about how she first met my father. I was only was able to find the third and last page among her effects. Since she stated the sculpture was the "connecting link" between them, I am compelled to unravel the mystery.
Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from ericawrites
This is a very interesting chapter,
holds the reader's attention from
start to finish.
The search to put together the pieces of
the puzzle is fascinating.
Well done,
thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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This is a very interesting chapter,
holds the reader's attention from
start to finish.
The search to put together the pieces of
the puzzle is fascinating.
Well done,
thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Yes, ericawrites, "the search to put together the pieces of the puzzle is fascinating." I am very grateful that my parents left me thousands of slides, poems, stories, interviews, sculptures, and other material. The answers are there. I just have to put together the right pieces. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Ekim777
The tale holds our attention because of its languid, engaging style. We can accept its authenticity because t he author has found his true, literary voice. In poetry every line must be thought out and fine. In a rambling piece like this, we have no reason to doubt our narrator. Whatever he says is acceptable. We are willing to suspend our sense of disbelief. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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The tale holds our attention because of its languid, engaging style. We can accept its authenticity because t he author has found his true, literary voice. In poetry every line must be thought out and fine. In a rambling piece like this, we have no reason to doubt our narrator. Whatever he says is acceptable. We are willing to suspend our sense of disbelief. -Ekim777
Comment Written 01-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Yes, Ekim777, sometimes when I look over the material my parents left me I think, "Mom and Dad, you did what? No one will ever believe me." And then I look at the photographs, diaries, and interviews and I think, "Oh, my God. It's true."
Thank you for your review.
Comment from writeapoem
This was educational for me to read August 27 2012 it marked my 41st.anniversary to my lovely bride lynnalou. I agree with your Dad's prophecy this is a woman's world. I trust your next submission will enlightens us more on your parents love story. All the best and God Bless.
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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This was educational for me to read August 27 2012 it marked my 41st.anniversary to my lovely bride lynnalou. I agree with your Dad's prophecy this is a woman's world. I trust your next submission will enlightens us more on your parents love story. All the best and God Bless.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Thank you, writeapoem, for your warm review and comments. Yes, I am astounded by my father's prophecy. Thanks.
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your welcome
Comment from robyn corum
This is a fascinating story - and for that reason alone, I thought it must be fiction. To think that it's fact makes it even more interesting! Thanks for letting us take this journey with you! I enjoyed this chapter and found it very well written.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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This is a fascinating story - and for that reason alone, I thought it must be fiction. To think that it's fact makes it even more interesting! Thanks for letting us take this journey with you! I enjoyed this chapter and found it very well written.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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No, Robyn, it is not fiction. I am pouring over thousands of slides, poems, letters, interviews, sculptures, and other documents to uncover the truth about my parents. I share my latest findings in my chapters. Thank you for your review.
Comment from c_lucas
Very few sculptors could afford to cast their successful products in Bronze. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Very few sculptors could afford to cast their successful products in Bronze. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Yes, c_lucas, casting sculptures into bronze was prohibitive for my father who always remained a carver. I am glad you enjoyed this smooth read.
