Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Yikes! I'll look at scarecrows in
a different light now - and will
only skirt the field.


it's head draped in bloody burlap. - its


Margaret

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015

Thank you for checking it out and taking the time to read and comment on my latest Tiny Tale of Terror, Margaret. I very much appreciate your review.
Take care, my friend.
~Dean :}

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Guess Timmy really did get the point of this well written poem.

Now, the scarecrow can have even more fun with other little kiddies and stakes.

Another Classic from FanStory's best Horror writer.

Par Excellent!

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015

Thank you for checking it out and taking the time to read and comment on my latest Tiny Tale of Terror, Brett. I very much appreciate your review as well as your most generous five- star rating.
Take care, my friend.
~Dean :}

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Clever story with a perfect ending. Just one tiny thing you might change.

the scarecrow. It scared the beejeezus

The word SCARE twice so close together... might be better to say: It frightened the beejeezus outta him.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015

Thanks, Phyllis, and I thought about that myself. I'll be sure to change it ASAP.
Thanks so much for taking the time to read, review, and offer your suggestions. I do appreciate it.
~Dean :)

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

Stalking in the corn.
Too bad Timmy didn't have a detour.
I saw and felt the creeping of the scarecrow as he watched his victim's daily journey. Great timing. Eerie conclusion.

Timmy's screams were silenced as pitchfork tines punctured his tender throat, choking off his shrieks in a gurgling fountain of blood.(Punctured and gurgling are very visual; tender throat adds nice alliterations; screams and choking off his shrieks is auditory. You covered several senses in this one line.)

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 Comment Written 29-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015

Thanks for stopping by to read and review this, Ellen.
As for the alliteration, you know what they say...You can take the writer out of the poet, but you can't take the poetry out of the writer....or something to that effect, lol.
Much obliged for the kind comments!
~Dean:}

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

OMG Dean, this is one very sad and frightening, horrific piece of writing. Your cruel author notes did not make me laugh - take a punch up the throat LOL. Now I laugh! I am recovering from this well written story but sometimes wonder how your weird mind works. I blame your Grandpa. Are your 2 brothers as weird as you - or indeed are you as weird as you appear on FS. Probably not! This is the YOU reserved for FS. Well done yet again.....Dorothy x

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 Comment Written 29-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015

I'm really quite normal in person, Dorothy, I swear I am, lol. In fact, if you were to see my walking my ten pound, 12 year-old Chihuahua, Gidget down the street (complete with her diamond-studded pink collar), you'd never think that I was capable of writing such things. But that's how I work out my aggressions--through my writing. And because of that, I'm far more laid-back because of it, believe it or not. More so than those who allow their pent-up demons to fester and boil up inside of them.
Thanks for taking a gander at this latest edition of Tiny Tales of Terror. I really appreciate it.
~Dean :}

reply by Dorothy Farrell on 29-Nov-2015

Nice to hear from you Dean. I know what you mean. Writing a poem always makes me feel content afterwards. I think it is very therapuetic - keep writing what you do best. Dorothy x