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Comment from BeasPeas
Well, I guess sooner or later it was bound to happen that those willing to give Russ money up front would realize he actually has no script. I'm surprised Charlie remembered. Nobody seems too intent on "minding the store" which keeps the charade going. I'm curious how all the loose ends will be resolved. Interesting. Clear and amusing scene and dialogue. I hope you have a wonderful Thanksgiving. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Well, I guess sooner or later it was bound to happen that those willing to give Russ money up front would realize he actually has no script. I'm surprised Charlie remembered. Nobody seems too intent on "minding the store" which keeps the charade going. I'm curious how all the loose ends will be resolved. Interesting. Clear and amusing scene and dialogue. I hope you have a wonderful Thanksgiving. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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BeasPeas
I'm glad you enjoyed this short chapter. I appreciate your choice of words: 'minding the store,' 'charade' and 'clear and amusing.' Thanks for the 5 stars and your continuing support.
Marv
Comment from Pyrrho
Dropping in for a chapter out of context makes for difficult reviewing ... usually. But this one flows, has sufficient action to be interesting and also has interesting content and good prose and dialog.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Dropping in for a chapter out of context makes for difficult reviewing ... usually. But this one flows, has sufficient action to be interesting and also has interesting content and good prose and dialog.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Pyrrho
I'm glad you were able to derive something from reading this chapter out of context. Please drop in again. Thanks for the many compliments. I appreciate the 5 stars.
Marv
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Marvin, This is an interesting read. It held my attention from start to end. Descriptive enough to intrigue me enough to want to read more and also feel like I was sitting at the coffee table too. My only comment would be in the para: "I carried my coffee to her table...." - "to her table and sat next to her" is written twice.
Well done and thank you for this enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Marvin, This is an interesting read. It held my attention from start to end. Descriptive enough to intrigue me enough to want to read more and also feel like I was sitting at the coffee table too. My only comment would be in the para: "I carried my coffee to her table...." - "to her table and sat next to her" is written twice.
Well done and thank you for this enjoyable read.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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PoemsOfDD
Thanks for reviewing this chapter. I appreciate the compliments and the 5 stars.
Here's a poem for you:
If you'd like to read more,
I suggest chapter four.
Thanks for pointing out the typo.
Marv
