November's child.
Our dear grandson.83 total reviews
Comment from Eigle Rull
What a beautiful poem. And what a handsome young grandson. I hope this poem is saved for him to enjoy when he is older. It will bring his a smile given by a wonderful grandfather. Best wishes, my good friend. No six left or you'd have it.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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What a beautiful poem. And what a handsome young grandson. I hope this poem is saved for him to enjoy when he is older. It will bring his a smile given by a wonderful grandfather. Best wishes, my good friend. No six left or you'd have it.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thanks my dear friend for this beautiful tribute for a special boy, I'm preparing an anthology for all my grands, blessing to you and yours, Roy
Comment from krys123
Roy;
-thank you for your authors notes it was help in determining the concept and thoughts of your writing.
- their lovely home in tribute and laudation to Jo Jo who is six today. You definitely gave great justification to your loving feelings towards JoJo in this writing.
- each of your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making your rhythm the flow so smoothly and neither of your rhyming words were forced nor labored which was also helpful.
-your rhythmic meter was iambic tetrameter in your cadence, timing and tempo were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
- one of your best metaphorical lines in this poem that I enjoyed noticing was this one: "I pray God's light reveals your way, that faith won't sway, hopes robe won't fray."
-good use of enjambment
-thank you so much for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always especially on this Happy Thanksgiving.
Alex
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Roy;
-thank you for your authors notes it was help in determining the concept and thoughts of your writing.
- their lovely home in tribute and laudation to Jo Jo who is six today. You definitely gave great justification to your loving feelings towards JoJo in this writing.
- each of your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making your rhythm the flow so smoothly and neither of your rhyming words were forced nor labored which was also helpful.
-your rhythmic meter was iambic tetrameter in your cadence, timing and tempo were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
- one of your best metaphorical lines in this poem that I enjoyed noticing was this one: "I pray God's light reveals your way, that faith won't sway, hopes robe won't fray."
-good use of enjambment
-thank you so much for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always especially on this Happy Thanksgiving.
Alex
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thanks so much for your very kind, generous thoughts, wishes and review, I most appreciative, Alex, blessings, Roy
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You are so very welcome Roy.
Alex
Comment from drivenbackward
Well put, Roy. It's a dark world at the moment, and those times have reoccurred many times throughout history. Kids have a right to have fun and enjoy life. I hope things change for the better over the next decade or so. Anyway, happy b-day to the little guy.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Well put, Roy. It's a dark world at the moment, and those times have reoccurred many times throughout history. Kids have a right to have fun and enjoy life. I hope things change for the better over the next decade or so. Anyway, happy b-day to the little guy.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thanks so much for the most generously kind, uplifting words, review and tribute for JoJo, blessings, Roy
