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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Franklin S. T. DePeteet"These are fictional character sketches.
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Comment from Gloria ....
Well, Bill, it's all in the name isn't it? A little self-fulfilling prophecy perhaps?
Love the budder knife and burnt cheroot. This series is really very entertaining. Hopefully it's not about people in your hometown. LOL.
Great work.
Gloria
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2015
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Well, Bill, it's all in the name isn't it? A little self-fulfilling prophecy perhaps?
Love the budder knife and burnt cheroot. This series is really very entertaining. Hopefully it's not about people in your hometown. LOL.
Great work.
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the excellent review. These people are my family. The names were changed to avoid arrest. Bill
Comment from Dawny53
I got such a good chuckle out of this poem! I like your choice to misspell.. thought it gave your work a great flavor..so to speak.. a good idea.. made it fun to read! I enjoyed!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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I got such a good chuckle out of this poem! I like your choice to misspell.. thought it gave your work a great flavor..so to speak.. a good idea.. made it fun to read! I enjoyed!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Dawny, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from livelylinda
Bill: funny, laughed out loud, bawdy (we all enjoy some of that). I wonder how many SDT's Franklin spread around . . . doesn't sound like a careful fella . . . and how many children did he create? There is a lot more which could be said of Franklin. Happy Thanksgiving to you and your family! livelylinda
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Bill: funny, laughed out loud, bawdy (we all enjoy some of that). I wonder how many SDT's Franklin spread around . . . doesn't sound like a careful fella . . . and how many children did he create? There is a lot more which could be said of Franklin. Happy Thanksgiving to you and your family! livelylinda
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Linda, for the kind review. Franklin was a caution for sure.
Comment from amada
Mr. Franklin S. T. DePeteet was a well-lived man, I read. Maybe a legend in that town? It made me smile specially the part of the well-worn wife. Heavens!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Mr. Franklin S. T. DePeteet was a well-lived man, I read. Maybe a legend in that town? It made me smile specially the part of the well-worn wife. Heavens!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Amada, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Sis Cat
What a great and animated use of vernacular. Your language is rich and musical to the ear. It is also humorous. It reminds me of the sailors' shanty songs of the 19th century. They were quite ribald for their times. Thank you for sharing this talent today, but I would not sing this song in the presence of ladies.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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What a great and animated use of vernacular. Your language is rich and musical to the ear. It is also humorous. It reminds me of the sailors' shanty songs of the 19th century. They were quite ribald for their times. Thank you for sharing this talent today, but I would not sing this song in the presence of ladies.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Sis Cat, for the excellent review and critique. Bill
Comment from misscookie
Again you captured my attention.
Making me smile from the first line to the last. This poem reminded me of my uncle Melvin.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Again you captured my attention.
Making me smile from the first line to the last. This poem reminded me of my uncle Melvin.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Miss Cookie, for the excellent review. Any depiction of persons living or dead is coincidental. Bill
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Your very welcome, until next time.
Cookie
Comment from Eric1
Hi Bill, this is brilliant! A well written poem spoken in what I think is the old Jamaican way of speaking, great humour in there and a pithy sense of wonderful words, thank you for sharing my friend.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Hi Bill, this is brilliant! A well written poem spoken in what I think is the old Jamaican way of speaking, great humour in there and a pithy sense of wonderful words, thank you for sharing my friend.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Eric, for the excellent review. Mi deh goweh now. Likkle more. Bill
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LOL yu're welcome Bill.
Comment from Zue65
I guess the vernacular and the misspelling is necessary to be consistent as a writer. The poem should carry out the mission of the writer, as you have done here. Thanks for sharing this excellent write.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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I guess the vernacular and the misspelling is necessary to be consistent as a writer. The poem should carry out the mission of the writer, as you have done here. Thanks for sharing this excellent write.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Nassus, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from c_lucas
Taking favors from the darlings on the street
Many an unknown disease he is destined to meet
His pride and joy reduced to a pissing toy
No longer will he worry of leaving the seed of a girl or boy.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Taking favors from the darlings on the street
Many an unknown disease he is destined to meet
His pride and joy reduced to a pissing toy
No longer will he worry of leaving the seed of a girl or boy.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Charlie, for the excellent review and the Ode to Franklin. Bill
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a fairly graphic poem, but it is a story worth telling.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a fairly graphic poem, but it is a story worth telling.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Tomes, for the excellent review. I did note that it was for adults. Bill
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Indeed you did.
