Haiku (tadpole ponders 'neath)
Haiku contest entry42 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
The two lines have very good concrete imagery
in the tadpole and the pool of water
With good grammatical connection
Very good satori line
Excellent picture to match
Very well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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This is a fine entry for the contest
The two lines have very good concrete imagery
in the tadpole and the pool of water
With good grammatical connection
Very good satori line
Excellent picture to match
Very well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you rspoet for this wonderful, descriptive review my friend. I am loving all these wonderful comments.
God bless!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
LOL amphibian zen... I like that. Perfect form with two connected lines, short/long/short under 17 syllables, and a very clever satori. Best in the contest so far. You got my vote.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Hello :)
LOL amphibian zen... I like that. Perfect form with two connected lines, short/long/short under 17 syllables, and a very clever satori. Best in the contest so far. You got my vote.
Gypsy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Awe! Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose for this wonderful review and support! I had a great time crafting this piece.
God bless!
Comment from Glasstruth
Cool layout. Picture and poem are meant to be. I guess all animals need to mediate at one or another. The last line is what really makes this. Great job. Les
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Cool layout. Picture and poem are meant to be. I guess all animals need to mediate at one or another. The last line is what really makes this. Great job. Les
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you Les for this awesome review my friend. Everyone seems pretty fired up over this one. I feel like a superstar lol!
God bless!
Comment from Sis Cat
A contemplative and deep haiku. I enjoy the image you created and the stillness of the poem which I found to be quite meditative. Your poem causes me to slow down, take a deep breath, and exhale. Thank you for haring this haiku. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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A contemplative and deep haiku. I enjoy the image you created and the stillness of the poem which I found to be quite meditative. Your poem causes me to slow down, take a deep breath, and exhale. Thank you for haring this haiku. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you Sis Cat for this awesome review my friend! I really enjoyed crafting this one.
God bless!
Comment from pbomar1115
I imagine the little fellow is tired and sleepy. Swimming for you life requires rest. After all, he's not the only fish in the sea. Ha! Ha!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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I imagine the little fellow is tired and sleepy. Swimming for you life requires rest. After all, he's not the only fish in the sea. Ha! Ha!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Lol! I suppose he would be for sure! Thank you for the awesome review my friend. I am simply over the top with this beautiful six star rating.
God bless!
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You're welcome
Comment from azwildrosa
I love tadpoles. This is a great little haiku. Picture perfect. You've got your image in the first two lines followed by your thought in your last. Great entry for this prompt. Thank you for share and best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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I love tadpoles. This is a great little haiku. Picture perfect. You've got your image in the first two lines followed by your thought in your last. Great entry for this prompt. Thank you for share and best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Me too! Thank you for the taking the time to read this little piece.
God bless!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I really like the imagery of this piece and the denouement in the last line gave me a good chuckle.
A bit different and fun. Good luck in the contest.
GMG
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Hi there,
I really like the imagery of this piece and the denouement in the last line gave me a good chuckle.
A bit different and fun. Good luck in the contest.
GMG
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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OOH!~ What a great word "denouement" is. Thank you for this most excellent review GMG.
I always welcome your thoughts.
God bless!
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
You have an interesting haiku-zen entry here! Who would have thought about a tadpole...when thinking of zen? Not me, but he could be our best example...quietly waiting during his transformation.
Your satori is great and it's nicely presented as well,
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Poet,
You have an interesting haiku-zen entry here! Who would have thought about a tadpole...when thinking of zen? Not me, but he could be our best example...quietly waiting during his transformation.
Your satori is great and it's nicely presented as well,
Linda
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you Linda for this most excellent and thoughtful review. This piece has gotten quite the attention!
I love it lol!
God bless!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good haiku. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly and line 3 is a stand alone satori. Regarding the Zen content. I am not an expert but I think this is a very acceptable entry. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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A good haiku. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly and line 3 is a stand alone satori. Regarding the Zen content. I am not an expert but I think this is a very acceptable entry. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you Dorothy for this incredibly thoughtful review. This piece has certainly gotten a lot of attention.
I have to say, I am enjoying that lol!
God bless!
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Poet
I like the concept behind this very much and feel it could be a winner. The image is great though the poem stands alone. Excellent concrete imagery and juxtaposition with the satori line. A definite AHA, and also brings a smile to my face as I contemplate the magic of the moment in your snapshot. Light and eloquent. Great use of 'p' alliteration and consonance; 't', 'l' consonance and 'a', 'o', 'e', 'i' assonance. Truly zen. Well done,. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Warm Regards - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Hi Mystery Poet
I like the concept behind this very much and feel it could be a winner. The image is great though the poem stands alone. Excellent concrete imagery and juxtaposition with the satori line. A definite AHA, and also brings a smile to my face as I contemplate the magic of the moment in your snapshot. Light and eloquent. Great use of 'p' alliteration and consonance; 't', 'l' consonance and 'a', 'o', 'e', 'i' assonance. Truly zen. Well done,. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Warm Regards - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Oh Lovi! I love this warm, thoughtful, insightful and simply wonderful review you have given this piece. I have had a wonderful flood of excellent reviews over this one and I am just beside myself.
God bless!
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My review is simply my response to this fabulous haiku. I do love it and hope it is the winner. I'll have to wait to read your reviews ... I'm so pleased when a great poem has great recognition deserving of it. I felt excited reading it. My pleasure to read and review ... some are just special. This one is. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
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I just love that!
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LOL. I'm so pleased. Keep smiling. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
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I just love that!
