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Comment from yonashalom

Exceptional

This work has reached the exceptional level

Shalom old friend,

This poem has awesome alliteration and sounds and rhymes with vivid pictures and thoughts tightly fixed. It's been a while since I've been in here. This poem shows growth in your style. Amazing. Good work!

Yona

Comment Written 22-Nov-2015

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015

Hi Yona...-smile-...hope you've been well. thank you, glad you enjoyed. Sorry its about something so tragic. shalom to you too. love Michael

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Quite the depth level on this piece Mike!
Thoroughly enjoyed ...
'Box of 'Kleenex....
'Sheltered fears gone astray...
Resilience to forever stay...
Thanks,
Ricky 1024.

Comment Written 21-Nov-2015

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2015

Hey Rick...-smile- i thank you Sir. yes indeed isolated fear gone astray....all the way over here to stay. Appreciate you man. love Michael

reply by Ricky1024 on 22-Nov-2015

Thanks so much for all the comment on my review when your peace Parisian you could be my kid because you're right like me which is kind of strange but I'm a check in here and English gentleman but anyhow I can come to you my kid if you like that it would be nice to have a kid a son back again my phone actually has written some writings are you studing poultry 11-3 believer in mind I just took over where he left off writing right on his Dell computer three weeks after he died and I'll leave you with this first poem written 633 Brooks a waiter stretching across two rooms in my house and not one book has been published on trying to start with the gift of life on the View there waiting for a letter that's TV show out of Manhattan I'm going to go on the show I've already got approval from Laura I'm already DLSw and we can rock this entire world and start reversing what was people cause God knows please don't take your organs to heaven we need them here on earth so I'll leave you with this you'll be my buddy friend and then you realize why are competing got a trophy for this beautiful piece buddy friend dedicated to my son Jason's many friends when they realize he was dead their trip to Disney World with Roland written April 21st around that 2003 now going on 13 years ago buddy friend is what I used to call him lose it shawty lived in his own world oblivious to everything else when he passed on the picture taken 20 minutes before is that my granddaughter on his lap trying to form a heart the name of his band was called for ways to say when he did say for people 3 left the lodge now almost 13 years later so here is buddy Franklin heated in Vegas or not Vegas in DC my first competition want a beautiful silver bowl I'm not here right now but I'm not far at the place close by and not far as a star you feel this place just take a moment and you'll see and then you'll know just where I'll be when I put that on his computer trying to win $5,000 within a side picture they wrote a letter back to me saying was very rare beautiful because it came from up there along with the a good percentage of my work I've tested myself to the extreme no one can match writing 20 beautiful complete rhyming pre titled religious poems based on the Sacrament church and Jesus Christ and Heavenly Father after the 9:30 Sacrament from 10 o'clock to 10:30 I was time by a missionary from Salt Lake City female when I got close to the couple minutes she told me that so I wrote a 575 Haku in 5 seconds and finished it off with a slim one minute palm in the 58 seconds with two seconds to spare nobody can ever imagine. Closest I've come is so 11 and 33 minutes all completely filtered from upstairs above when I recently wrote 6 off of my hand ride even got dark deeper and changed from one direction to the other one he was when he was channeling through me why he picks me why you text me rollies accident bicycle three times total Lincoln to motorcycle accidents with ride and heart attacks and bring the average of soul Mobile and walking around even though I got an 18 inch rod my right leg you know what that is nothing I'm still waiting patiently for his next test which is going to be the ultimate one of course and then one that does happen hopefully I'll get to be with Mike hit again cuz that's all I care about these days I would take everything I'v I would take everything in my house over 5,000 records antique front with Tori and furniture and all of my 633 books and burned it down to the ground with me in it just to be with my son again and I say these things in the name of Jesus Christ amen, coming through a ZTE Android phone it is now 12:07 a.m. Eastern Standard Time in Manahawkin New Jersey Southern Ocean County only 20 35 minutes from My where they film the show Jersey Shore my daughter met a couple of people and they found that were they hang out like you really care less it's 24 to Mr Michael or we can solve grandma color is incomplete run instances of course on this phone bugged by candlelight 24 out e written my house contentsdThanks

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

Another poem that pays tribute to the victims of the tragic massacre of innocent lives in the name of a misguided ideology. When will it end, I hope the government of France is now awakened by the threat of open borders. Thanks for sharing.

Comment Written 21-Nov-2015

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2015

Hi...-smile- and thank you. But I fear their "Government" is controlled by an agenda chiefly motivated by a few as ours. the people of France have been opposed to this "forced" acceptance and now its consequence. love Michael

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello :)

Very nice poem about the current events in Paris. Well chosen words to evoke feelings of sadness for all the victims that died. Attractive presentation. Good job!
Gypsy

Comment Written 19-Nov-2015

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015

Hi Gypsy...-smile-...amen...the French people have been worried that this would come....their Government ignored their concern. and here we are....again. thank you Dear. love Michael

Comment from Linda Engel

Excellent

Viva la France.. It is sad and heart breaking that hateful people wish to destroy others for no other gained means except because "I hate you. You don't worship my god". Thoughts and prayers go out to the families. You have written a beautiful poem expressing what we all feel.

Comment Written 19-Nov-2015

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015

Hi Linda...-smile-...all of these people have one common denominator...their religion. Their belief system...the core of who they think they are. There are those who claim it is only a "few" misguided individuals who have interpreted their holy word in erra.....and that we should not fear most who "believe" in Islams core truth....but they are foolish, for any religion that waits for a sign from its god to eliminate all others...cannot be trusted to be tolerant and or acceptant of others truths and or belief systems. the proof has been played out century after next atrocity. When from childhood you are taught to hate...a race...an ideology...or every other religion....you become numb to its right to breathe. Dumb to your own sinful souls self-destruction. love Michael

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Reconciled,

You've penned a striking and memorable poem in honor of France and the victims.
Amazing choice of words...full of grace and compassion. "Resilient" is well fitted and chosen by you.

The music is fantastic and you have an overall impacting piece.

Linda

Comment Written 18-Nov-2015