Haiku
Nature-related haiku4 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
This is an exquisite piece of poetry dear anonymous! Please change the title to haiku (first line of poem) or you will probably be disqualified.
This is a strong contender and I would hate this going to waste.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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This is an exquisite piece of poetry dear anonymous! Please change the title to haiku (first line of poem) or you will probably be disqualified.
This is a strong contender and I would hate this going to waste.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Just returned to Fanstory after leaving for several years. A much belated thanks for your review.
Comment from LIJ Red
The format is precise, 17 syllables, and the subject is appropriate to the prompt, but that third line is a continuation of the others, not very twist-ending-satori-like, or so it seems to me, but I am no Haiku guru. Good luck with the judges. Excellent.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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The format is precise, 17 syllables, and the subject is appropriate to the prompt, but that third line is a continuation of the others, not very twist-ending-satori-like, or so it seems to me, but I am no Haiku guru. Good luck with the judges. Excellent.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Just returned to Fanstory after leaving for several years. A much belated thanks for your review.
Comment from Glasstruth
Autumn is a murderer. Put him/her, whatever you want to call it on trial. Poor rose, I'm sure didn't feel anyhing in its numbed death. The word, 'killing' is very powerful here. Well written. Good luck with the contest. Les
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Autumn is a murderer. Put him/her, whatever you want to call it on trial. Poor rose, I'm sure didn't feel anyhing in its numbed death. The word, 'killing' is very powerful here. Well written. Good luck with the contest. Les
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Just returned to Fanstory after leaving for several years. A much belated thanks for your review.
Comment from Nosha17
It is so sad when there are early frosts and they take away the last vestiges of summer and autumn. Well chosen words and message. Good luck in the contest. faye
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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It is so sad when there are early frosts and they take away the last vestiges of summer and autumn. Well chosen words and message. Good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Just returned to Fanstory after leaving for several years. A much belated thanks for your review.
