The Wonder
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Wow! What an stunning presentation. I love it! It is a good match for your beautiful and very romantic poem, very creative and instinctive work very artistically done to match the theme very well chosen words.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2015
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Hello :)
Wow! What an stunning presentation. I love it! It is a good match for your beautiful and very romantic poem, very creative and instinctive work very artistically done to match the theme very well chosen words.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2015
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Hey Gypsy...-smile- yea I came out like that...the doctor and both nurses started running...my parents have always told me not to worry about it...but ..-headtilt- ...i dont know. anyway thanks kid....love michael
Comment from XGoneX
Hi friend,
Sorry I've been missing your post, but it's not just you, it's everyone. I've been posting and logging out. My time for reviews has been short with a deadline to finish my manuscript and another project I'm involved. Hopefully things will calm down soon.
I loved the romance you poured in these lines.
Love, desire, connection was felt all through.
Many beautiful lines, but particularly liked the second and fourth stanza best.
Great work!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Hi friend,
Sorry I've been missing your post, but it's not just you, it's everyone. I've been posting and logging out. My time for reviews has been short with a deadline to finish my manuscript and another project I'm involved. Hopefully things will calm down soon.
I loved the romance you poured in these lines.
Love, desire, connection was felt all through.
Many beautiful lines, but particularly liked the second and fourth stanza best.
Great work!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Hey Jade...-smile-...thank you Beautiful. ah dont worry about it...i still have life and death issues...its tough trying not to die...-wink- ...i'm getting closer to finding who is jacking with me...then I'm going to jack back....-smile-...I think someones tracking my phone trying to sabotage my business. I only know one weirdo who'd do such a thing......Satan's son...skip me....so I've got my hands full of rotting flesh right now....Though I'm glad you're back....love Michael.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Michael,
first lines sucks you in to everything that follows... and that visual? Yeah, magic touch for sure... and no doubt the effectiveness as you paired your words to suite the music with a such a precise emotion... yeah, loved reading and living in this moment... a real pleasure to have these feelings coursing my veins all the way to my heart... yes, another... beautiful Brother!
With our thoughts we create,
moments of pure bliss,
James.
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hi Michael,
first lines sucks you in to everything that follows... and that visual? Yeah, magic touch for sure... and no doubt the effectiveness as you paired your words to suite the music with a such a precise emotion... yeah, loved reading and living in this moment... a real pleasure to have these feelings coursing my veins all the way to my heart... yes, another... beautiful Brother!
With our thoughts we create,
moments of pure bliss,
James.
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hey Brother...-smile-...I found the song a while ago, forgot about it. then reclaimed it the other night. Wanted to write something that complimented it, or at least accompanied without complaint. Appreciate you enjoying James...hope things are well with you Bro. love Michael
Comment from Linda Engel
excellent kick ass music. thanks. Seductive and smooth.
Sensuous imagery and worded well
Nice with a bottle of Scotch.
Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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excellent kick ass music. thanks. Seductive and smooth.
Sensuous imagery and worded well
Nice with a bottle of Scotch.
Well done.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hey Linda...-smile- ...yea right...the songs got a vibe of its own. Thank you Sweetheart...cheers....love Michael
Comment from Glasstruth
Love how you start this in the first verse, and similiar the last one is. Especially like the ending which is only the beginning: "sssh lover come to bed..." Great flow and rhythm throughout. Beautifully written. Les
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Love how you start this in the first verse, and similiar the last one is. Especially like the ending which is only the beginning: "sssh lover come to bed..." Great flow and rhythm throughout. Beautifully written. Les
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hi Les...-smile- thanks man...always appreciate your say so....love Michael
Comment from DragonSkulls
Hey, Mike, hello. Sweet little seductive piece you've penned here, friend. I will have to admit though, you lost me in a couple places. "Hungers pacifier cradles Armageddon" Maybe I'm ignorant or something but that line went clear over my head. Lol. Might I get you to elaborate so I'm on the same page? Plus I'm not quite grasping "breath take mine promise kept" either. I'm not real good at figuring out free verse too well, as you can see, lol. I caught all the rest of it though.
On another note, can you please explain to me how to get 'moving' pictures added to your work? I can't for the life of me figure out what I'm doing wrong. Plus where do you find these cool pics at? The only site I found moving pics on only has little pictures. This one is awesome, by the way.
Anyway, great write, Mike. Have a good one, friend.
Ron
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hey, Mike, hello. Sweet little seductive piece you've penned here, friend. I will have to admit though, you lost me in a couple places. "Hungers pacifier cradles Armageddon" Maybe I'm ignorant or something but that line went clear over my head. Lol. Might I get you to elaborate so I'm on the same page? Plus I'm not quite grasping "breath take mine promise kept" either. I'm not real good at figuring out free verse too well, as you can see, lol. I caught all the rest of it though.
On another note, can you please explain to me how to get 'moving' pictures added to your work? I can't for the life of me figure out what I'm doing wrong. Plus where do you find these cool pics at? The only site I found moving pics on only has little pictures. This one is awesome, by the way.
Anyway, great write, Mike. Have a good one, friend.
Ron
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hey Ron...haha...ah well its ah its hard to explain I'd have to show you...but I dont ah like boys like... like that...ahhhaha...ah I guess it goes a lil' overboard...not much though...hungers pacifier dont play...until after he's been fed...so...so i'm sorry you weren't endowed with the magic of my hands...I may write an instructional guide...a ah how to pamphlet..ya know if you guys act right...-wink-...lol ah...do you really want me to explain it...-headshake-...right...? Ron, you're just here to pick my brain, tell the truth....haha...yes of course , its easy....ya know find your picture...photobucket whatever...if you want moving...then press the "animated" gif button....once you find it...click the left side of the mouse...it should take you to where your alone with the picture...and now your in -wink-...lol...no seriously...once there...you'll have options on the right side...click.."html" or the one that looks close to that...it should turn yellow...now you know you've copied it...so go to your poem...and here is the trick...paste it where you would normally start your poem...that should work Bro...-smile-...thanks for letting me joke around....I had to write something sorta sexy for the song...overblown makes me look larger from a distance...i'll tell you about it in the pamphlet...lol...love-
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Haha. Okay, I'll see if that works. The pics I'm finding don't have any animated buttons. As a matter of fact, there's no buttons at all. I just did a google search though. I'll check out photobucket and see what happens.
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yea you have to start at photobucket...there the only ones I know that have the animated...its easy once you figure it...let me know...love-
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I was trying to build crescendo...and ah by the time we get to..."hungers pacifier cradles armageddon" ...we find an energy a ah need....that well well like none ever known...thus Armageddon..... the other..."breath take mine promise kept"...is really two statements in one...on purpose...I'm sure theres comma issues...but I dont care...I want it read like that...so the brain is processing...even while reading the next line...-smile-...and there is my head in that most wonderful moment...lol...ahh you get that figured out...pictures I mean...?.
Comment from livelylinda
Michael: beautifully written you romantic, you! Your words and the picture are quite stirring to the loins. Took me past to my most memorable "fall in love" moment and sent me to the paper and pen to write yet again. Good morning to you! Soft Thunder, Thunder, Dos, Linda, or whatever you want to call me . . .
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Michael: beautifully written you romantic, you! Your words and the picture are quite stirring to the loins. Took me past to my most memorable "fall in love" moment and sent me to the paper and pen to write yet again. Good morning to you! Soft Thunder, Thunder, Dos, Linda, or whatever you want to call me . . .
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hello wonder Woman...-smile- thank you Sweetie....ah ha good i'll be by to read your pondering. Linda told me about some of your visit....I'm real sorry about people who dont know how to parent. I dont know why people have babies if their not willing to give all for them. I do know the feeling Linda....maybe...maybe it was the shame of what he had done that kept him away. love you Michael
Comment from Joan E.
I am pleased to catch another of your posts while in Kyoto. What an amazing animated, top image you selected and the second one looks a bit like the geishas we discussed! I relished your "lullaby" and "seductions" and could sense the "burning coals". Big hugs and happy weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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I am pleased to catch another of your posts while in Kyoto. What an amazing animated, top image you selected and the second one looks a bit like the geishas we discussed! I relished your "lullaby" and "seductions" and could sense the "burning coals". Big hugs and happy weekend- Joan
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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I'm a Geisha geiser J...what can I say....a tourist attractive mainstay..beautiful women with bound feet generally follow me around...hopping happy to do so....-palmstogethernow- bow...aso...aso.....haha. have fun...love Michael
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I can do without the bound feet and the squeaky--otherwise, consider yourself one lucky guy! Bows back, Michael san!! -Joan san
Comment from Zue65
I love the animated picture, for it amplified and reinforced the message of your poem. The lines which repeated some lines sounded like a refrain of a song. I am not a rocker so I don't quite appreciate the music, the picture look like two women in a romantic tryst. This somehow offended my sensibilities. My personal views and I don't impose on others. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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I love the animated picture, for it amplified and reinforced the message of your poem. The lines which repeated some lines sounded like a refrain of a song. I am not a rocker so I don't quite appreciate the music, the picture look like two women in a romantic tryst. This somehow offended my sensibilities. My personal views and I don't impose on others. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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their actually Sisters...I think, getting ready for bed after saying their prayers. Anyway we shouldn't draw conclusions on assumptions first glance Nassus....-smile-.. yes maam, I considered the exposed buttock affect...but really its beautiful in the innocence of that moment...now what happened afterward...-shouldershrug-...ah....do you know? I have money...no really I have money....lol....just playing. the other video has a picture of a grasshopper...trust me this is way easier to look at. love Michael
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, Michael, excellent imagery presented throughout, I like your tercet form of writing. the video looks like it could be naughty, can't pull it up
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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this is an excellent write, Michael, excellent imagery presented throughout, I like your tercet form of writing. the video looks like it could be naughty, can't pull it up
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Hey Jax...-smile- good to see you girl...hope you're feeling better now. ah thank you ...wrote it listening to the song. love Michael
