Comment from N.K. Wagner

Excellent

If your picture doesn't put you over the top in this one... A seamless transition from reality to fantasy. But which reality is real and which is fantastic? :) Nan y

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015

Thanks, Nancy. The conditions were quite restrictive on this one. I had to try hard to make my piece stand out from the rest!

Steve

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi
A great Diamante poem you have written for the contest. I like your well chosen words and the image is a great one, Good luck Mary

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015

Thanks, Mary - glad you enjoyed.
Steve

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Very nice, Steve - I liked your chosen opposites and how you take us from reality into fantasy. A better journey, perhaps than going the other way. Great insight in your -ing ending words, and wonderful use of alliterative lines that do not feel contrived or forced to fit the poem.
Rose.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015

Thanks, Rose. Lots of restrictions on this form - I was trying to find some way to make mine stand out from what will be a host of similar poems.

Steve

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Yes, another thin line between reality and fantasy, as with writers and poets they can travel the world on a whim, in the comfort of their own home. Great job, and good luck. :-)

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

You did a terrific job with this style, Steve. I love every single word you chose and the alliteration enhanced them so much. I enjoyed reading this. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015

Thanks, Lou - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

I like how the poem changes from reality (position, possessions) to fantasy (passion, perception), showing that material things are not everything. Stopped at the 'waveriding' (like the alliterations in this line). There's a new word you could've entered in the create a new word contest.
Hope I can do some waveriding today and wish the same to you.
:)

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015

Thanks, Tessa.

I never really thought about waveriding - it just seemed to fit, though I note spellcheck doesn't like it. There, I did it again - it doesn't like 'spellcheck' either...

Steve

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello :)

Nice diamante poem about reality and fantasy. Well chosen words to describe the nouns. Correct shape alignment. Attractive presentation. Good job!
Gypsy

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork for your topic.
-Good ant./syn. choices.
-I think you like words beginning with "w".
-The criteria is met, but I think "waveriding" is two words; I don't know if that matters.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015

Thank you.

I guess, strictly speaking, I should at least hyphenate waveriding.

Steve

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

This is a wonderful read. Excellent use of alliteration to move from the word "reality" to its antonym "fantasy." And you move it so gradually that is seems like a natural progression.

I hope you do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

I learned a new word. 'Winnowing'. Never heard that one before, Steve. I like it!

Good word choices, I think, throughout this poem. I like how you sandwiched the 'p' alliterations between the 'w's'.

I also enjoyed the trip from reality to fantasy. I often have days like that. :)

Best of luck in the contest!

Av

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015

Now I would have thought winnowing was right up your alley - slightly archaic of course and I guess mainly used metaphorically these days.

Alas, reality is the constant winner...

Steve