Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Untitled"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
31 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Bret - another poem on lost love. Well written in good rhyming aabb form. The starting first line, with Atlanta burning, I thought you were going to write about 'Gone with the Wind' LOL. How about Careless Love. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Hi Bret - another poem on lost love. Well written in good rhyming aabb form. The starting first line, with Atlanta burning, I thought you were going to write about 'Gone with the Wind' LOL. How about Careless Love. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Will consider the title recommendation. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Unspoken94
As I was reading this I wondered if I was
reading a song. Excellent pace and rhyme.
Being on the road can take its toll on a relationship.
I think you need to come up with the title. You've
got a lot more invested in this than we do.
BTW, in your notes, change the word "Complied" to "Compiled."
Bill
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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As I was reading this I wondered if I was
reading a song. Excellent pace and rhyme.
Being on the road can take its toll on a relationship.
I think you need to come up with the title. You've
got a lot more invested in this than we do.
BTW, in your notes, change the word "Complied" to "Compiled."
Bill
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from jaho58
I enjoyed this very true-to-life set of lyrics. An apt portrayal of betrayal.
These titles come to mind:
The Road to Heartbreak
The Grass is not Greener
Stepping Out and Stepping Down
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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I enjoyed this very true-to-life set of lyrics. An apt portrayal of betrayal.
These titles come to mind:
The Road to Heartbreak
The Grass is not Greener
Stepping Out and Stepping Down
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Will consider the title suggestions. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Neonewman
Love's lost travels!
I enjoyed this wonderfully crafted piece of music. I can only imagine in my own mind the sounds with which accompany.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Love's lost travels!
I enjoyed this wonderfully crafted piece of music. I can only imagine in my own mind the sounds with which accompany.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Pantygynt
A title, well it needs to hook onto the lyric some how so I think I would suggest "Stepping Out Again". That will hook into the second verse and that's what everyone seems to be doing here.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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A title, well it needs to hook onto the lyric some how so I think I would suggest "Stepping Out Again". That will hook into the second verse and that's what everyone seems to be doing here.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Will consider the title suggestion. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Irish Goat
Nice quatrain construction with couplet rhyme. Americana dialect gave it the feel of a western or country song. I liked the progressive movement across the country.... made me think "The Westbound Lane" would be appropriate as a title. Nice piece.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Nice quatrain construction with couplet rhyme. Americana dialect gave it the feel of a western or country song. I liked the progressive movement across the country.... made me think "The Westbound Lane" would be appropriate as a title. Nice piece.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Will consider your title suggestion. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from scd41
I feel such a poem with good lyrics and flow should have a better title than 'Untitled'. For the fellow who is so wavering in his decisions, a title 'Running round in circles' could be more befitting.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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I feel such a poem with good lyrics and flow should have a better title than 'Untitled'. For the fellow who is so wavering in his decisions, a title 'Running round in circles' could be more befitting.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Will consider the title suggestion. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Zue65
I believe this is inspired by a relationship that started beautifully then it turned sour through time. When love is not nurtured the way it should be, love just fade away. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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I believe this is inspired by a relationship that started beautifully then it turned sour through time. When love is not nurtured the way it should be, love just fade away. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Great lyrics here and a nice, slice-of-life story about a fellow who can't seem to settle down. I think others gave some really good suggestions for a title, so I'll refrain from offering one. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Great lyrics here and a nice, slice-of-life story about a fellow who can't seem to settle down. I think others gave some really good suggestions for a title, so I'll refrain from offering one. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from LanceHill
Nicely written poem with a great flow. Too many people, men and women, do not want to take their vows seriously anymore. Always thinking the grass is greener only to find out it's the same grass. I would suggest "Stepping Out" as the title as the poem shows that's what he did. God bless.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Nicely written poem with a great flow. Too many people, men and women, do not want to take their vows seriously anymore. Always thinking the grass is greener only to find out it's the same grass. I would suggest "Stepping Out" as the title as the poem shows that's what he did. God bless.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Will consider the name. Your comments and support appreciated.
