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Comment from Dawn Munro
LOL - now that's alliteration if ever I say it, er, read it, er, said it! YOLO, huh? That Polo! Leaving poor Pinky Pamela solo. It's an epidemic I tell ya!
Cute poem. I enjoyed it very much, as you could tell if you could see my grin...(LOL)
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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LOL - now that's alliteration if ever I say it, er, read it, er, said it! YOLO, huh? That Polo! Leaving poor Pinky Pamela solo. It's an epidemic I tell ya!
Cute poem. I enjoyed it very much, as you could tell if you could see my grin...(LOL)
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Dawn, for the terrific review. Bill
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It was my pleasure. :)
Comment from Adri7enne
Fun. A different kind of rhyme scheme. Poor Pam, went from a couple to a single in no time flat. Lots of fine alliterations, like that first line:"Pinky Pamela Probuntai". I think it was just meant to be a fun piece, and it was.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Fun. A different kind of rhyme scheme. Poor Pam, went from a couple to a single in no time flat. Lots of fine alliterations, like that first line:"Pinky Pamela Probuntai". I think it was just meant to be a fun piece, and it was.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Adrienne, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Bill, this is an interesting poem. It starts off fun but ends on a sad note - poor Pam. Polo chased another 'bone' seems a strange terminology. The word 'bone' could be taken another way and can be construed as running off with another man... Even sadder for poor Pam.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Bill, this is an interesting poem. It starts off fun but ends on a sad note - poor Pam. Polo chased another 'bone' seems a strange terminology. The word 'bone' could be taken another way and can be construed as running off with another man... Even sadder for poor Pam.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thank you, DD, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Great alliteration and assonance, very creative and instinctive work. I like the rhythm of the poem. The poem in itself is kind of sad but also funny, is that possible?
Good job!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
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Hello :)
Great alliteration and assonance, very creative and instinctive work. I like the rhythm of the poem. The poem in itself is kind of sad but also funny, is that possible?
Good job!
Gypsy
Comment Written 03-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
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Thank you, GBR, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Manic Mike
The name of this poem alone is a poem...
Very cool use of alliteration. I think there there are some implications here going over my head but nonetheless I like the cute and simple flow that you created in this poem. It's very nice and fun to read aloud.
Nice Job!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
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The name of this poem alone is a poem...
Very cool use of alliteration. I think there there are some implications here going over my head but nonetheless I like the cute and simple flow that you created in this poem. It's very nice and fun to read aloud.
Nice Job!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Mike, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Louise Michelle
Haha - this is a fun-to-read poem, Bill. I really got a kick out of her name. Poor Pam is now drinking sodas solo. Oh, well, she'll find another. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2015
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Haha - this is a fun-to-read poem, Bill. I really got a kick out of her name. Poor Pam is now drinking sodas solo. Oh, well, she'll find another. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 02-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Louise, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from BeasPeas
I got a kick out of this one. The feel of it reminds me of those high school days when everyone would end up at the local ice cream parlor. Very enjoyable to read. Marilyn
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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I got a kick out of this one. The feel of it reminds me of those high school days when everyone would end up at the local ice cream parlor. Very enjoyable to read. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Marilyn for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
You know, Bill, you seriously have the most unique poetry I have ever read, and this is no exception.
And where do you ever come up with such unique names? Pinky Pamela. Yeeeeeeees.
Super job with a most entertaining trip down to the Y.
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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You know, Bill, you seriously have the most unique poetry I have ever read, and this is no exception.
And where do you ever come up with such unique names? Pinky Pamela. Yeeeeeeees.
Super job with a most entertaining trip down to the Y.
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the nice review and comments. Bill
Comment from krys123
Bill;
-truly and very entertaining my friend and I enjoyed reading it very much for it had a reference to a limerick the way it was written.
-Your rhyming was very convincing in each rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic cadence, timing and tempo while helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy. Helpful was the fact that your rhyming was neither forced the nor labored.
-First line of your poem was full of alliteration.
-Good use of enjambment.
-Thanks for your author's notes for I never would've figured out what Y.O.L.O. would be and if it's right in.
-Thanks for sharing and posting this and may the good Lord be with you always Bill.
Alex
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Bill;
-truly and very entertaining my friend and I enjoyed reading it very much for it had a reference to a limerick the way it was written.
-Your rhyming was very convincing in each rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic cadence, timing and tempo while helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy. Helpful was the fact that your rhyming was neither forced the nor labored.
-First line of your poem was full of alliteration.
-Good use of enjambment.
-Thanks for your author's notes for I never would've figured out what Y.O.L.O. would be and if it's right in.
-Thanks for sharing and posting this and may the good Lord be with you always Bill.
Alex
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for the super review. Bill
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You are so very welcome Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
Bill, what amazes me most about your poetry, is the fun you have writing it. You have to get a huge charge out of coming up with intelligently humorous verses, time and again. It can't be said enough. You just keep me smiling. An occasional giggle squeaks out, among other things--but it's just the age.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Bill, what amazes me most about your poetry, is the fun you have writing it. You have to get a huge charge out of coming up with intelligently humorous verses, time and again. It can't be said enough. You just keep me smiling. An occasional giggle squeaks out, among other things--but it's just the age.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for being such a shot in the arm. I really appreciate your positive comments. Bill
