British Parliament Congress USA
Governments officials are failing us5 total reviews
Comment from EMB
I'm not that familiar with the government here, but I did enjoy the continued play on words and occasional rhyming employed. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I'm not that familiar with the government here, but I did enjoy the continued play on words and occasional rhyming employed. Nicely done.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think you should consider changing this from script to non-fiction / fiction as to view it as a script would mean it has a lot of work needed to be done to it. It isn't formatted as such.
I don't think many people are taken in at all by the rhetoric of politicians these days. certainly not in the UK on the whole - I can't speak for the US.
All the best
GMG
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Hi there,
I think you should consider changing this from script to non-fiction / fiction as to view it as a script would mean it has a lot of work needed to be done to it. It isn't formatted as such.
I don't think many people are taken in at all by the rhetoric of politicians these days. certainly not in the UK on the whole - I can't speak for the US.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
Comment from konni
Wow! A lot of thinking going on here, (and lots I agree with).
Lost me a little bit in pov, as first there's a narrator, then "you" and finally, "we."
This is insanely interesting, but I think you have to narrow your focus a tad, like shining a light.
Your language is superb esp. at the beginning of this piece--the first two paragraphs (stanzas?) SHINE.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Wow! A lot of thinking going on here, (and lots I agree with).
Lost me a little bit in pov, as first there's a narrator, then "you" and finally, "we."
This is insanely interesting, but I think you have to narrow your focus a tad, like shining a light.
Your language is superb esp. at the beginning of this piece--the first two paragraphs (stanzas?) SHINE.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Thank you. It is always helpful to have a flashlight on the path.
Comment from ellie6
Cynical, but oh, so true. Whatever the country or state, the story is the same - power corrupts. The general public walk toward destruction as zombies , deviod of critical thought.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Cynical, but oh, so true. Whatever the country or state, the story is the same - power corrupts. The general public walk toward destruction as zombies , deviod of critical thought.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Thank you
Comment from Jean Lutz
Sound the trumpet! You have penned the truth. I think it is not limited to the UK and US, but is global. Here in America the slogan is printed on our currency "In God We Trust" yet it does not seem to live in beating hearts.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Sound the trumpet! You have penned the truth. I think it is not limited to the UK and US, but is global. Here in America the slogan is printed on our currency "In God We Trust" yet it does not seem to live in beating hearts.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Thank you
