The Wonder
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Yesterday's Excalibur "miscellaneous poems
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Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery. One cannot stand alone without having the strength to do so.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery. One cannot stand alone without having the strength to do so.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Hi Charlie...-smile-
appreciate you taking the time. love to you...michael
Comment from Lynn27
This is an interesting love poem. I liked how you expressed your thoughts and the word choices were unusual but it work in this piece.
Happy Writing,
Lynn
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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This is an interesting love poem. I liked how you expressed your thoughts and the word choices were unusual but it work in this piece.
Happy Writing,
Lynn
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Hi Lynn....-smile-
ah well thanks...glad you stopped by. love to you...Michael
Comment from Slythytove2
I wash only that I could follow your plethora of images and references, But I seem to get lost. If this were the first time I'd blame myself for my ignorance, but when it happens repeatedly I can only assume you don't care enough to make your message understood. To be felt- a reader has to be able to understand what you're saying., and follow along with you. It isn't always because we're ignorant.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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I wash only that I could follow your plethora of images and references, But I seem to get lost. If this were the first time I'd blame myself for my ignorance, but when it happens repeatedly I can only assume you don't care enough to make your message understood. To be felt- a reader has to be able to understand what you're saying., and follow along with you. It isn't always because we're ignorant.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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It ain't gonna happen again....I promise...-wink-
Comment from johnwilson
Firstly, it's hard, man, to follow up such a piece as Van Morrison and that video was .... no words can match what I want to say at the moment. Where did you see it? I have enjoyed your poems and the dances you use to accompany them. It took my breath away and I still have those goose bumps. I am going to bookcase so I can look at it late some summer night? Thank you for sharing your work with us!!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Firstly, it's hard, man, to follow up such a piece as Van Morrison and that video was .... no words can match what I want to say at the moment. Where did you see it? I have enjoyed your poems and the dances you use to accompany them. It took my breath away and I still have those goose bumps. I am going to bookcase so I can look at it late some summer night? Thank you for sharing your work with us!!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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ah...I found it on utube..."braveheart" has always been one of the best movies ever made....the "uncommon" love he held for his wife....embedded itself. I remember...finding the song...planning on writing something pretty for her. but ...instead it was reflection...from wasted..heart ripped from chest bleeding to death...to not even sure how...why I survived. Then remembering halfway in....I kept my honor....through it all I kept my honor. such a sweet thing...dancing with the sting...still alive....-smile-....ah my poetry aint Jack and Jill. love to you...Michael
Comment from DR DIP
beautifully written reconciled you a beautiful way with words. I like the set out written in free verse plus the bonus Van Morrison sound track
dip
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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beautifully written reconciled you a beautiful way with words. I like the set out written in free verse plus the bonus Van Morrison sound track
dip
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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appreciate you Bro...-smile-.....I've always been good at expressing myself in written form. Since I came here....I've grown....I enjoy creating now....bringing...nothing to life....-smile-...perhaps its my way of playing god. Truth is....when I know I've written something...ah worthy....I always thank Him immediately.....love to you man...michael.
Comment from LIJ Red
Excalibur, the sword in the rock. Van Morrison...oh, yeah, Brown eyed girl...old oak with rope burns... old man with boyhood memories...
song says he'll never grow old again... lotsa stuff here...
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Excalibur, the sword in the rock. Van Morrison...oh, yeah, Brown eyed girl...old oak with rope burns... old man with boyhood memories...
song says he'll never grow old again... lotsa stuff here...
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Hey man...-smile-
amen....its all in there. appreciate you taking the time. love to you...Michael
Comment from Leineco
I think that I shall never see. . .
and yet the tune
of yesterday's ease
may far exceed
the symphony of summer's leaves
once swung beneath
on rubber ring
yet pressed against
earth's flowing breast
its majesty
will serve as bridge
from boardroom back
through aged and weathered memory
and lead
to trusted compass bound dreams
that span both sky
and time's sojourn
how sweet
the special song she sings
when lit in fading twilight's
gloam.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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I think that I shall never see. . .
and yet the tune
of yesterday's ease
may far exceed
the symphony of summer's leaves
once swung beneath
on rubber ring
yet pressed against
earth's flowing breast
its majesty
will serve as bridge
from boardroom back
through aged and weathered memory
and lead
to trusted compass bound dreams
that span both sky
and time's sojourn
how sweet
the special song she sings
when lit in fading twilight's
gloam.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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hm...very pretty....-smile-
thank you Dear. I'm going through my portfolio....remembering....-smile-....better lock up....love to you ...Michael
Comment from Hayley Solomon
I have altogether missed the sense of this. While it is very well written, with a delightful lyrical quality, it has not communicated your message to me. A certain degree of opacity is perfect, but this was just a little too much. I get a sense of nostalgia, certainly, but specifically, say... vacant signs swing times used tyre...
if the 'times' had a apostrophe maybe? Perhaps more punctuation would help. In the meanwhile,four stars for beautiful language.
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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I have altogether missed the sense of this. While it is very well written, with a delightful lyrical quality, it has not communicated your message to me. A certain degree of opacity is perfect, but this was just a little too much. I get a sense of nostalgia, certainly, but specifically, say... vacant signs swing times used tyre...
if the 'times' had a apostrophe maybe? Perhaps more punctuation would help. In the meanwhile,four stars for beautiful language.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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thats correct...you have.
this is a body comparing an oak trees reliability to his own honor. -smile-...I could explain...but I dont like the way you asked hayley....love to you...Michael
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a powerful poem that reveals its glimpses of retro discovery. This line, 'ancient history now bows back to basically born' speaks to me of the important, life-shaping experiences that we let dissolve into clouded memory, but, on occasion, realize and rejoice in where we came from.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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This is a powerful poem that reveals its glimpses of retro discovery. This line, 'ancient history now bows back to basically born' speaks to me of the important, life-shaping experiences that we let dissolve into clouded memory, but, on occasion, realize and rejoice in where we came from.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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looking back...its easy to see the ah why...of reactions and the reasons things played out history. and even the stupidity of it all....wiser as we are. Thanks Bill...always good to see you Sir. love to you...michael
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, I love when you come out and show the true you...
remarkable how little has become so much more
the lad inside this man
who strolls the woodgrove of youth hope found....favorite
I would have made a book out of this review...but it takes away the true meaning of your poetry...
unique to you ...feelings written from your heart...you are a brilliant writer my love...a stunning picture...and I love the video...love your poem....and I love you...Linda xxoo soon
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Hi Michael, I love when you come out and show the true you...
remarkable how little has become so much more
the lad inside this man
who strolls the woodgrove of youth hope found....favorite
I would have made a book out of this review...but it takes away the true meaning of your poetry...
unique to you ...feelings written from your heart...you are a brilliant writer my love...a stunning picture...and I love the video...love your poem....and I love you...Linda xxoo soon
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Hey bug a boo...-smile- ah thank you Dear...but i'm a mixed bag of "stuff" experienced and stuffed inside...-smile- mucho appreciate you...love you Michael
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thank you sweet boy...just got settled down...babysat for a few hours tonight...now I am on pause...love you back...Linda xxoo
