The Wonder
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Eye Candy Have Any"miscellaneous poems
13 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
Is it the lips that manifest
the essence of candy's sweetness;
the heady scent
of honied-chocolate ambrosia
or is it the mesh
of his and hers exchanging heat waves...
her lips, his flesh; his pulse, her thrum
their palpitations
harmonizing,
or is it a matter of savoring
the piquant spice of marinade
- two parts anticipation,
three parts implication,
a dash of aged longing,
a peppering of flirtation and thyme
steeped in mixed juices
(Pinot, pomegranate
and dragon fruit).
Ah. . .
but why analyze
when the press of the mouth
will spill the beans
tell everything
.....make logic and reason melt away,
leave nothing
but flesh, fire and steam
mattering.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Is it the lips that manifest
the essence of candy's sweetness;
the heady scent
of honied-chocolate ambrosia
or is it the mesh
of his and hers exchanging heat waves...
her lips, his flesh; his pulse, her thrum
their palpitations
harmonizing,
or is it a matter of savoring
the piquant spice of marinade
- two parts anticipation,
three parts implication,
a dash of aged longing,
a peppering of flirtation and thyme
steeped in mixed juices
(Pinot, pomegranate
and dragon fruit).
Ah. . .
but why analyze
when the press of the mouth
will spill the beans
tell everything
.....make logic and reason melt away,
leave nothing
but flesh, fire and steam
mattering.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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ya know...if anyone can find anything more poetic then that...or not...I'll gladly kiss your butt Leinko...-smile- ...you make my knees shake and heart palpitate....your...you're...like life unexpected ...-smile-...love Michael
Comment from closetpoetjester
A sticky sweet intoxication here M, like a bottle of wine that's made to savour.
Enjoy every drop...
Ripe fruit, a hot steam iron and some rock hard granite...mmm talk about a winning combination haha
No silent audience here...I swear to God, I just felt the earth move LOL I just went with it haha
Such a way with words you have...well done as always.
Sass x
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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A sticky sweet intoxication here M, like a bottle of wine that's made to savour.
Enjoy every drop...
Ripe fruit, a hot steam iron and some rock hard granite...mmm talk about a winning combination haha
No silent audience here...I swear to God, I just felt the earth move LOL I just went with it haha
Such a way with words you have...well done as always.
Sass x
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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aha...Well Honey Bun...sticky sweet intoxication is your right to life...-smile-..so I'll take your taste for it...word for every finger licking word...-smile- Thank you Beautiful...your the reason boys dream. love Michael
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Hot stuff! I loved your imagery especially the reference to the "naked grape" and the "vineyard". Who says writing on sexual themes can't be tasteful - guess you proved them all wrong. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Hot stuff! I loved your imagery especially the reference to the "naked grape" and the "vineyard". Who says writing on sexual themes can't be tasteful - guess you proved them all wrong. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Why thank you Sweetheart...-smile-.....very pleased you enjoyed this with me. Love michael
Comment from Hayley Solomon
Well written, evocative,lush imagery,
well assembled, enjoyable read.
I think the last two lines are innovative and refreshing.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Well written, evocative,lush imagery,
well assembled, enjoyable read.
I think the last two lines are innovative and refreshing.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Hi Hayley...-smile-
appreciate ya Darling....glad you enjoyed this with me...love Michael
Comment from royowen
Well done, there's nothing better than the opposite sex, to go through the gambit of emotion that is required to enjoy a beautiful women, and beauty comes in many ways, outside of physical beauty. Like aging wine, greatly to be savoured. Well done, beautifully worded, descriptive imagery, excellent alliteration, well done, Michael, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Well done, there's nothing better than the opposite sex, to go through the gambit of emotion that is required to enjoy a beautiful women, and beauty comes in many ways, outside of physical beauty. Like aging wine, greatly to be savoured. Well done, beautifully worded, descriptive imagery, excellent alliteration, well done, Michael, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 29-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Hi Roy...-smile-....thank you Sir...much appreciated...love Michael
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Most welcome Michael
Comment from Teri7
Wish I had six stars to give you for this great poem you have penned. It is full of great descriptive wording. It was a joy to read as well as review. Great job my friend. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Wish I had six stars to give you for this great poem you have penned. It is full of great descriptive wording. It was a joy to read as well as review. Great job my friend. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Hi Teri...-smile- Thank you Beautiful. yea this was a big hit with all my fans...way way back when i had some...-wink-...haha...again i thank you for enjoying. love Michael
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, OMG...what a beautiful poem oh King of Poetry!!!...and yes it starts with a kiss...and continues to flow like the music of a waterfall...feelings felt within... I made a wish...my words may be simple....but they are yours...I love your words...and beautiful video...a wink back at ya...love you forever...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Hi Michael, OMG...what a beautiful poem oh King of Poetry!!!...and yes it starts with a kiss...and continues to flow like the music of a waterfall...feelings felt within... I made a wish...my words may be simple....but they are yours...I love your words...and beautiful video...a wink back at ya...love you forever...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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yes yes welcome to my realm...-smile- where the king fisher and I kick it . Holy Grail in search of finding forever heaven, knowing within the search we find ourselves. Now take your earthly clothes off and walk with me spirit form...COME...unleash the red carpet, hush the crowd, new birth breaches our world!.....-smile- thank you Lady Linda. love Michael
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my wish is granted my King...and yes it does...smiling big...thank you...love Linda xxoo soon!!!
Comment from tfawcus
This line dragged me in - 'an eye wish feast'! What a great wordplay!
Your economy of language bombards the reader with imagery which is more than just eye candy - a feast for the brain too. Great use of alliteration.
For consistency the line 'continuous across your continents contour' needs an apostrophe.
It's hard to pick a favorite part of this - it hangs so well together as a whole. I did particularly like these lines though:
'caressing gently inch by every bare skin intimate design
grape naked intoxicated
vineyard's ripened taste...
looms a fruit tongue tempting source explore'
It's the old story - Thursday evening here and no sixes left. This ranks as one of the poems that I have most enjoyed reading in quite a while.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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This line dragged me in - 'an eye wish feast'! What a great wordplay!
Your economy of language bombards the reader with imagery which is more than just eye candy - a feast for the brain too. Great use of alliteration.
For consistency the line 'continuous across your continents contour' needs an apostrophe.
It's hard to pick a favorite part of this - it hangs so well together as a whole. I did particularly like these lines though:
'caressing gently inch by every bare skin intimate design
grape naked intoxicated
vineyard's ripened taste...
looms a fruit tongue tempting source explore'
It's the old story - Thursday evening here and no sixes left. This ranks as one of the poems that I have most enjoyed reading in quite a while.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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why thank you Sir...a respected opinion indeed. -smile- happy you enjoyed , hope you have a great night. love Michael
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written poem about how a relationship starts. Draws readers into the scene and uses expressions such as "vineyard's ripen taste," and "hot iron," to better illustrate the passion found in a kiss.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Well written poem about how a relationship starts. Draws readers into the scene and uses expressions such as "vineyard's ripen taste," and "hot iron," to better illustrate the passion found in a kiss.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Hey Brett...-smile- much obliged...my appreciation waters his horse. love Michael
Comment from amada
Wonderful love poem and very sultry love song. Its sounds like a bossa nova. I like your metaphor of that "vineyard's ripened taste..." Wishing you the best, dear friend.
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Wonderful love poem and very sultry love song. Its sounds like a bossa nova. I like your metaphor of that "vineyard's ripened taste..." Wishing you the best, dear friend.
l
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Hey Nance...-smile- ..ah thanks...yea "bossa Nova" sounds like a hell of guy...-smile-....and i you...always. love Michael
