Drinking Problem -- The Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Teen Scene -- Part One"Alcohol destroys life long friendhip
15 total reviews
Comment from redrocklover
Oh my, now you've gone and done it - I have to read more of your story to find out if Rex is going to try and run them off the road (or worse). Your writing is easy to read and captures the teenage angst.
Peace,
Linda
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Oh my, now you've gone and done it - I have to read more of your story to find out if Rex is going to try and run them off the road (or worse). Your writing is easy to read and captures the teenage angst.
Peace,
Linda
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Teen Scene - Conclusion is posted. Glad you enjoyed this little tale. Stay tuned. Much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story puts a lot of balls in the air. We've the jealous kid, the thrill-seeker, the flirty girlfriend with a bun in the oven, and tension in that ball-filled air. Nice.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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This story puts a lot of balls in the air. We've the jealous kid, the thrill-seeker, the flirty girlfriend with a bun in the oven, and tension in that ball-filled air. Nice.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Aiona
I'm curious how you know the streets of Seattle, with you being in Tennessee. Engaging story. I had read the ending, so had to read the beginning, of course. I'm also curious who your target audience is. It seems as if it's something teenagers should read, but would they read it? Obviously, I did, but I'm not a teenaged boy. :) I like your style of writing. Cut off sentences, phrases. Reads quickly, as it should be.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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I'm curious how you know the streets of Seattle, with you being in Tennessee. Engaging story. I had read the ending, so had to read the beginning, of course. I'm also curious who your target audience is. It seems as if it's something teenagers should read, but would they read it? Obviously, I did, but I'm not a teenaged boy. :) I like your style of writing. Cut off sentences, phrases. Reads quickly, as it should be.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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The central theme of the storyline is the affect alcohol has on everything it touches. Much more of this story to be told yet. Stay around and follow as it goes. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A perfect scenario which shows the ingredients so important to modern youth at play.
A real melting pot of emotions fuelled by drugs, lust, revenge, and rebellion.
Immaturity and irresponsibility form a very potent mix which often spell disaster.
Very well written.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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A perfect scenario which shows the ingredients so important to modern youth at play.
A real melting pot of emotions fuelled by drugs, lust, revenge, and rebellion.
Immaturity and irresponsibility form a very potent mix which often spell disaster.
Very well written.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more still to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE
Thank you for this insight into the teenage world of today. My granddaughter will be sixteen next year, so knowledgeable, yet so young in the complexity of today's world. I am glad they have my daughter-in-law as a mother, and together with my son, God and destiny, she and her brother will continue to unfold to treasure a precious journey between childhood and becoming fully human individuals, able to choose and enjoy the fullness of life.
You write well, with much sensitivity to the depth of our `ripening humanity'. Having grown up, through and with, the reality of this girl's parents, and complexities centered around bonding to a child, even in a world that may endeavour to empower and support, I shall look forward to catching up with these characters later.
And, as my writing is fairly limited to inspiration, and poetry, I will look forward to strengthening my wings with the gifts of FanStory as I go. Blessings, Maureen*&*
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you for this insight into the teenage world of today. My granddaughter will be sixteen next year, so knowledgeable, yet so young in the complexity of today's world. I am glad they have my daughter-in-law as a mother, and together with my son, God and destiny, she and her brother will continue to unfold to treasure a precious journey between childhood and becoming fully human individuals, able to choose and enjoy the fullness of life.
You write well, with much sensitivity to the depth of our `ripening humanity'. Having grown up, through and with, the reality of this girl's parents, and complexities centered around bonding to a child, even in a world that may endeavour to empower and support, I shall look forward to catching up with these characters later.
And, as my writing is fairly limited to inspiration, and poetry, I will look forward to strengthening my wings with the gifts of FanStory as I go. Blessings, Maureen*&*
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more of the story still to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
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Keep bubbling forth. Blessings, Maureen*&*
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Brett, not a bad story ,that is fairly typical of many a teenager and I am sure there are quite a few like Mark Jenner, brash and cocky with big ideas. while the girls are a bit dittsy and airheaded . Will be interesting to see where you go with this. Will we see some road rage. ? Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Hi Brett, not a bad story ,that is fairly typical of many a teenager and I am sure there are quite a few like Mark Jenner, brash and cocky with big ideas. while the girls are a bit dittsy and airheaded . Will be interesting to see where you go with this. Will we see some road rage. ? Cheers Christine
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Do not know, but you may not want to miss my conclusion to this story. Glad you enjoyed it. Your comments and support appreciated.
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Hi Brett I will keep a look out for it Cheers Christine
Comment from judiverse
With teens, add drugs and alcohol into the mix and it's pure disaster. Sixteen is too young to be acting like a hot shot. Rex is displeased, and may cause trouble for Mark. Stupid teenagers whole let hormones substitute for thought need more guidance than these kids are getting. If Dorothy is pregnant, dumb move. She's too young, Mark (if he is indeed the father) is too young and irresponsible to take any responsibility. Happens way too often. I do not see a happy future. judi
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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With teens, add drugs and alcohol into the mix and it's pure disaster. Sixteen is too young to be acting like a hot shot. Rex is displeased, and may cause trouble for Mark. Stupid teenagers whole let hormones substitute for thought need more guidance than these kids are getting. If Dorothy is pregnant, dumb move. She's too young, Mark (if he is indeed the father) is too young and irresponsible to take any responsibility. Happens way too often. I do not see a happy future. judi
Comment Written 23-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more of it still to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
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You're very welcome. Happy trails. judi
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Teenagers. Devil may care attitudes and reckless behavior.
I can just imagine Rex is going to challenge Mark and Car verses motorcycle ... well, we all know how that will end. Good imagery and lifelike situations. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Teenagers. Devil may care attitudes and reckless behavior.
I can just imagine Rex is going to challenge Mark and Car verses motorcycle ... well, we all know how that will end. Good imagery and lifelike situations. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more of it still to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This is another really great part of your story. I loved every word of it. I sure hope Rex didn't do anything with Mark's motor bike, or whatever it's called. He seems like the kind who would do something like that because Dorothy left him to be with Mark.. I look forward to reading more of this story.
Kat
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Hi Brett,
This is another really great part of your story. I loved every word of it. I sure hope Rex didn't do anything with Mark's motor bike, or whatever it's called. He seems like the kind who would do something like that because Dorothy left him to be with Mark.. I look forward to reading more of this story.
Kat
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more of the story to come still. Your comments and support appreciated.
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I really enjoy reading your wonderful work and look forward to the next chapter. Kat
Comment from GE Parson
Sounds like the late 50's scene; Dope, beer, sex and
hto cars and hotter girls. Thus far eveything pretty familier except some bloody fights wih someone going
to the hosptal and others going to jail.
Looking forward to nxt installment.
Jerry
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Sounds like the late 50's scene; Dope, beer, sex and
hto cars and hotter girls. Thus far eveything pretty familier except some bloody fights wih someone going
to the hosptal and others going to jail.
Looking forward to nxt installment.
Jerry
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. So much more to come still. Your comments and support appreciated. Yes, teens are still the same as they have always been. They never learn. And, they never change.
