The Orange Sky of His Goodbye
Picture This Challenge - Prose Poem26 total reviews
Comment from vapros
Well, without knowing the contest rules, I have to conclude that this is, indeed, a prose poem, and a very good one. You see the color orange as a connection to Anthony, who was taken very young. Questioning your own faith at such a time can be understood. You have written well.
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Well, without knowing the contest rules, I have to conclude that this is, indeed, a prose poem, and a very good one. You see the color orange as a connection to Anthony, who was taken very young. Questioning your own faith at such a time can be understood. You have written well.
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Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for adding the significance of the twenty-eight stars. I was so sorry to learn of your loss. Your tribute to Anthony is powerful, from the "mesmeric mixture" of colors to the "blessed balloon" that saluted him; from his achievements to your "question". I hope the "solace of the orange color" stays with you. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you for adding the significance of the twenty-eight stars. I was so sorry to learn of your loss. Your tribute to Anthony is powerful, from the "mesmeric mixture" of colors to the "blessed balloon" that saluted him; from his achievements to your "question". I hope the "solace of the orange color" stays with you. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you, dear Joan.
Comment from Naham Mills
beautiful descriptive poem filled with great attention to detail.
Appreciation of the little things in life can gift us with a sense of great meaning and purpose even where, for others, it is hard to find.
The combination of colours Orange, Red and Yellow strike me as somewhat of a synonym for GOLD
God Bless and Namaste
Have a GOLDEN day,
And best of luck!!!
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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beautiful descriptive poem filled with great attention to detail.
Appreciation of the little things in life can gift us with a sense of great meaning and purpose even where, for others, it is hard to find.
The combination of colours Orange, Red and Yellow strike me as somewhat of a synonym for GOLD
God Bless and Namaste
Have a GOLDEN day,
And best of luck!!!
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Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading my work with such intensity. An honor. Thank you.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
What a beautiful piece of work! Your heartfelt poem about your grandson's death is heart breaking to me but I hear that you have made peace with his death and accepted it as part of life. I love this line---I see the one that stayed behind--the balloon that became enlaced in the branches of a tree... so beautiful. Well done!
gypsy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Hello,
What a beautiful piece of work! Your heartfelt poem about your grandson's death is heart breaking to me but I hear that you have made peace with his death and accepted it as part of life. I love this line---I see the one that stayed behind--the balloon that became enlaced in the branches of a tree... so beautiful. Well done!
gypsy
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you Gypsy for your heartfelt comments.
Comment from reconciled
the short life span of a butterfly, celebrates each moment as beautiful. hi Nance...-smile- I'm sorry the butterfly morphs into more so soon. Big bear squeeze for you. love Michael
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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the short life span of a butterfly, celebrates each moment as beautiful. hi Nance...-smile- I'm sorry the butterfly morphs into more so soon. Big bear squeeze for you. love Michael
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Michael.
Comment from sgalletti
Hi Nancy! This is so interesting. Is this a particular contest or prompt? I read Robyn's and understand there are more...They often have prose prompts that challenge a writer to write about a particular piece of artwork. But, rarely poetry contests. Your prose verse is lovely - descriptive and lyrical. Reminds me of the kind of prose one would read in a haibun. Enjoyed! Sue
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Hi Nancy! This is so interesting. Is this a particular contest or prompt? I read Robyn's and understand there are more...They often have prose prompts that challenge a writer to write about a particular piece of artwork. But, rarely poetry contests. Your prose verse is lovely - descriptive and lyrical. Reminds me of the kind of prose one would read in a haibun. Enjoyed! Sue
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Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Yes dear Sue. Haibun lessons still in my mind and heart. Thank you for reading my work.
