The Orange Sky of His Goodbye
Picture This Challenge - Prose Poem26 total reviews
Comment from Sambangi
Hi Amada,
I admire your love for your grand children and great grand children. Lot of imagination has gone into this poem. You have seen lullabies in swaying branches. Leaves opening softly is an indication of opening up opportunities, followed by Anthony climbing heights in life. So I give six star for your great imagination
Cheers
Sambangi
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Hi Amada,
I admire your love for your grand children and great grand children. Lot of imagination has gone into this poem. You have seen lullabies in swaying branches. Leaves opening softly is an indication of opening up opportunities, followed by Anthony climbing heights in life. So I give six star for your great imagination
Cheers
Sambangi
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you for reading this work. Sorry for the delay. Wrestling with a cold.
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You are welcome. Wish you recover soon
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Amada,
Am I reading this correctly - did your grandson pass? Gosh, that makes it hard for me to find the right words to give to you. However, I will say that this is a lovely poem, very poignant. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2015
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Hi Amada,
Am I reading this correctly - did your grandson pass? Gosh, that makes it hard for me to find the right words to give to you. However, I will say that this is a lovely poem, very poignant. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2015
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Sorry to say but it's true. Seven's months anniversary today. Still feels like a deadly punch in the guts! Thank you for your concern, dear poet.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Amada,
Oh, this is most eloquent prose poem and remembrance of your grandson. I am
so very sorry for your loss. The symbolism, metaphors and style is so lovely. The
orange balloon that strayed behind, the peace and the lingering grief are all expressed so warmly and creatively.
Your ending is also very beautiful:
"I also see my long narrow road under the solace of the orange color. Those days with a twist of brightness are the days when his sunny presence graces me."
I don't I could give this anything other than exceptional,
Linda
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Amada,
Oh, this is most eloquent prose poem and remembrance of your grandson. I am
so very sorry for your loss. The symbolism, metaphors and style is so lovely. The
orange balloon that strayed behind, the peace and the lingering grief are all expressed so warmly and creatively.
Your ending is also very beautiful:
"I also see my long narrow road under the solace of the orange color. Those days with a twist of brightness are the days when his sunny presence graces me."
I don't I could give this anything other than exceptional,
Linda
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the great sentiments. Kind and lovely heart, that's you. Thanks!
Comment from RGstar
oh what beauty. I seemed to have missed this one. Utterly beautiful. Every imagery possible awakens the senses here. I have been in and out of hospital so still improving.
Lovely, so lovely.
Have a beautiful, Sunday...you have a beautiful soul.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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oh what beauty. I seemed to have missed this one. Utterly beautiful. Every imagery possible awakens the senses here. I have been in and out of hospital so still improving.
Lovely, so lovely.
Have a beautiful, Sunday...you have a beautiful soul.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Roy, your comments means so much to me. I was hoping for your comments. I hope your health is improving, dear friend.
Comment from trimple
Hello there, Amada
Your take on the 'picture challenge' has most certainly brought out your some deep feelings.
So terribly sad when we loose a loved one. You describe him as a person so full of energy and in love of live.
The turn of pace here...
'I see the days with dark slashes on the road' WOW!
What a slap in the face...
A fantastic line.
pleasure to read, my friend, though so very sad.
My thoughts are with you.
hugs
trimple
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hello there, Amada
Your take on the 'picture challenge' has most certainly brought out your some deep feelings.
So terribly sad when we loose a loved one. You describe him as a person so full of energy and in love of live.
The turn of pace here...
'I see the days with dark slashes on the road' WOW!
What a slap in the face...
A fantastic line.
pleasure to read, my friend, though so very sad.
My thoughts are with you.
hugs
trimple
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your very touching review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is a great tribute to a great man. I enjoyed it for the meaning--sorry for your loss. You did a great job expressing your feelings.
I see no changes. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Your poem is a great tribute to a great man. I enjoyed it for the meaning--sorry for your loss. You did a great job expressing your feelings.
I see no changes. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi amanda, this is such a beautiful poem that tells of your great love and devotion for your grandson and just how much the colour orange portrayed his life and death. ( my deepest sympathy for your loss) This was written as if he was holding your hand as the words seem to flow effortlessly. I loved you last 2 lines of your long path but when his sunny presence graces you. A lovey tribute and you have done justice to this image so well Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2015
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Hi amanda, this is such a beautiful poem that tells of your great love and devotion for your grandson and just how much the colour orange portrayed his life and death. ( my deepest sympathy for your loss) This was written as if he was holding your hand as the words seem to flow effortlessly. I loved you last 2 lines of your long path but when his sunny presence graces you. A lovey tribute and you have done justice to this image so well Cheers Christine
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much Christine.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello amada
I find your poem very touching and felt the deep emotions of you Grandson and how you reflected his life of twenty eight years
beautiful prose poem
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Hello amada
I find your poem very touching and felt the deep emotions of you Grandson and how you reflected his life of twenty eight years
beautiful prose poem
Gert
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thank you, dear friend.
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smiles to you amada
Gert
Comment from Bryana
My dearest friend I can see the pain in your
words as you remember that grandson you
lost. My heart aches when I think about. I'
so very sorry.
Your writing is absolutely beautiful.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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My dearest friend I can see the pain in your
words as you remember that grandson you
lost. My heart aches when I think about. I'
so very sorry.
Your writing is absolutely beautiful.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you, dear friend.
Comment from justafan
My goodness and I just gave my last 6...grrrr! This is just so hauntingly beautiful. I love the stars at the bottom. Certainly see it is written from the heart. Just so lovely.
Always,
Missy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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My goodness and I just gave my last 6...grrrr! This is just so hauntingly beautiful. I love the stars at the bottom. Certainly see it is written from the heart. Just so lovely.
Always,
Missy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading my work and getting the meaning of the stars at the bottom.
