Rooted in time (haibun)
Finding comfort in the midst of change18 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
I can imagine the site of an old grade school would be very significant in one's recollections. I went back to a B&B at the foot of Ben Nevis in Scotland 30 years later and it had gone, I was distressed. Well expressed thoughts, good use of descriptive language. Enjoyable read. faye
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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I can imagine the site of an old grade school would be very significant in one's recollections. I went back to a B&B at the foot of Ben Nevis in Scotland 30 years later and it had gone, I was distressed. Well expressed thoughts, good use of descriptive language. Enjoyable read. faye
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Zue65
A nostalgic journey can be fun, and memories of the good old past will never be forgotten that easily. We develop such an affinity with the past that leaving it , thugs at our heart a bit. Your poem did just that as we join your travel to memory lane. God bless.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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A nostalgic journey can be fun, and memories of the good old past will never be forgotten that easily. We develop such an affinity with the past that leaving it , thugs at our heart a bit. Your poem did just that as we join your travel to memory lane. God bless.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from visionary1234
What a beautiful haibun, Dallas! I felt myself 'sighing' as I read your lovely words ... in fact, the whole piece reads like a long, soft sigh of memory. Quite lovely!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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What a beautiful haibun, Dallas! I felt myself 'sighing' as I read your lovely words ... in fact, the whole piece reads like a long, soft sigh of memory. Quite lovely!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reviewing. Serenity is available in some really unique musings.
Comment from LeslieP5
This poem evokes the comfort and serenity of a revisit to old memories that are rooted in our past. - sometimes small insignificant ones yet anchors for our stability and serenity.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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This poem evokes the comfort and serenity of a revisit to old memories that are rooted in our past. - sometimes small insignificant ones yet anchors for our stability and serenity.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Spitfire
These brushes with yesterday's dust replenish me-- I never thought of it this way. I remember when my 50th high school reunion took on a tour of the changes to our junior high. We were impressed with the technology but also disappointed that it stomped on our memories. Beautiful written with two excellent haikus. So glad I have a six left.
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These brushes with yesterday's dust replenish me-- I never thought of it this way. I remember when my 50th high school reunion took on a tour of the changes to our junior high. We were impressed with the technology but also disappointed that it stomped on our memories. Beautiful written with two excellent haikus. So glad I have a six left.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thanks for the stellar review. .Whenever I see a familiar landmark that causes me, if only for a fleeting moment, to be steeped in the past, I understand what it means to be part of the universe. I'm not sure that twenty years ago it would have had the same effect.
Thanks for the bonus star.
Comment from angel123
Your poem is interesting, well written and thought provoking. It flows well with your thoughts and sentiments of past memories. I really like your last sentence of your first paragraph. Your artwork choice is interesting.
Angel123
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Your poem is interesting, well written and thought provoking. It flows well with your thoughts and sentiments of past memories. I really like your last sentence of your first paragraph. Your artwork choice is interesting.
Angel123
Comment Written 09-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
I like this poem because it has a good message and it is follows the rules of a haibun. As we grow older we remember the past good memories the ones that makes us smile and the bad ones to haunt us to go back and try and fix the things that went wrong.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Hello :)
I like this poem because it has a good message and it is follows the rules of a haibun. As we grow older we remember the past good memories the ones that makes us smile and the bad ones to haunt us to go back and try and fix the things that went wrong.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thanks for reviewing. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Dallas, this is a truly wonderful Haibun that speaks volumes for all those wonderful memories tucked away in the dark recesses of our minds,when awoken the joy that they bring is beautiful, thanks for sharing this my friend.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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Hi Dallas, this is a truly wonderful Haibun that speaks volumes for all those wonderful memories tucked away in the dark recesses of our minds,when awoken the joy that they bring is beautiful, thanks for sharing this my friend.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Eric.
Comment from artemis53
I can't exactly tell you why but I love this poem. Perhaps it's in the permanence reiterated throughout the whole verse or the remnants of another world that still remain without their original purpose. It speaks to something that lies deep inside me and I can't even identify it.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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I can't exactly tell you why but I love this poem. Perhaps it's in the permanence reiterated throughout the whole verse or the remnants of another world that still remain without their original purpose. It speaks to something that lies deep inside me and I can't even identify it.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much for the stellar review. Glad you loved it. There is something about that feeling of being steeped in the past that opens the portal to being part of the universe. Appreciate the bonus star.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Marvelous, You even threw in a twist, making readers believe you were mourning a person and then have it be a concept--childhood--or a school.
It's really good. Soft tone and gentle, like gentle waves. I might consider changing dusting to dust--only because it reads that way to me, but is not a critique.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Marvelous, You even threw in a twist, making readers believe you were mourning a person and then have it be a concept--childhood--or a school.
It's really good. Soft tone and gentle, like gentle waves. I might consider changing dusting to dust--only because it reads that way to me, but is not a critique.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thanks for the bonus star. Glad you liked it. Think you are right about the dust. I changed it.
