Secrets In The Wind
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written story draws readers into the scene where they can much better experience all the events unfolding around them.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2015
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Well written story draws readers into the scene where they can much better experience all the events unfolding around them.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2015
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Brett,
Thank you for your review and your comments.
Ward
Comment from c_lucas
Some claim the CIA was the true motivation of the Vietnam Police Action. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Some claim the CIA was the true motivation of the Vietnam Police Action. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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I don't know if they were the true motivation but I know for a fact they were there. Thank you for reading and for your feedback.
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They almost got a friend of mine killed.
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They did get a friend of mine killed.
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I lost respect for the CIA when they got involved in drug trafficking.
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I guess they must have their place but they do some very dirty work.
Comment from Zue65
This story is a reflection of what is going on in the mind of a soldier hit man. We, the outsider cannot and won't truly understand their actions , their refexes, how they snap at the slightest provocation, how lives are wasted and killed upon orders of their superiors. You have a flair for writing and it is evident in this post. God bless.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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This story is a reflection of what is going on in the mind of a soldier hit man. We, the outsider cannot and won't truly understand their actions , their refexes, how they snap at the slightest provocation, how lives are wasted and killed upon orders of their superiors. You have a flair for writing and it is evident in this post. God bless.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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War can do strange things to people. The person who returns is frequently not the same one who left. Thank you so much for reading and for the feedback.
Comment from barkingdog
So, he was Green and set himself up to be shot. Awesome twist for the reader to fathom. Well done.
-When everything you thought you knew end(s) up being just sound bites and lies(, you) find you have burned all the bridges back to the truths you could count on.
- Strangely(,) I felt convinced that she heard me(,) and my mind was at peace
-When I saw the picture I had been sent(,) I knew that either
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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So, he was Green and set himself up to be shot. Awesome twist for the reader to fathom. Well done.
-When everything you thought you knew end(s) up being just sound bites and lies(, you) find you have burned all the bridges back to the truths you could count on.
- Strangely(,) I felt convinced that she heard me(,) and my mind was at peace
-When I saw the picture I had been sent(,) I knew that either
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the punctuation help.
Was he Green? He doesn't seem to know himself. Then again, he is not sure who he is much of the time.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from quashdog
This character comes across like some psycho killer. My only question is; how could he possibly spot scopes on a roof off the reflection off a cell phone. It seems a little unrealistic, especially being that he was indoors.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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This character comes across like some psycho killer. My only question is; how could he possibly spot scopes on a roof off the reflection off a cell phone. It seems a little unrealistic, especially being that he was indoors.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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They were not indoors, I never said they were. Many funerals are held outside. I can see reflections on my cell phone when the screen is blank.
It is more like this guys mind was broken by all he's seen and done.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. This is a very well writtne story which is why the five stars. However, you could make it a lilttle easier to read with more of a break between your paragraphs and a little larger font size. The story itself is very good.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Excellent. This is a very well writtne story which is why the five stars. However, you could make it a lilttle easier to read with more of a break between your paragraphs and a little larger font size. The story itself is very good.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading and for your suggestions. I tried making the font larger and it came out the same size. I don't know what I did wrong.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Great job. I really enjoy the read of this chapter again. Good use of Col Green as a major character in this chapter. A well done chapter as others.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Great job. I really enjoy the read of this chapter again. Good use of Col Green as a major character in this chapter. A well done chapter as others.
ola thomas
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading and for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Joyce Long
Very well done. Your ending opens up questions. I will certainly want to go back and read the earlier chapters of your book. P.A.T.I.E.N.C.E. and Patience--two different ideas. Well done. Who is Col. Green? Does the reader ever really know?
I didn't see any errors or corrections.
With everyone dead, you can have a series of books with these same characters. With the discussion with the EMTs, you brought your book to a good ending.
Joyce 10-8-15
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Very well done. Your ending opens up questions. I will certainly want to go back and read the earlier chapters of your book. P.A.T.I.E.N.C.E. and Patience--two different ideas. Well done. Who is Col. Green? Does the reader ever really know?
I didn't see any errors or corrections.
With everyone dead, you can have a series of books with these same characters. With the discussion with the EMTs, you brought your book to a good ending.
Joyce 10-8-15
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading. I appreciate the feedback and your kind comments. I have written other parts over the years and can't find them at the moment. If I ever do I may post them individually.
