An Educational Rigidity
true diagnosis is not as apparent as is believed77 total reviews
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Well, I think it is fabulous. So how is that for a start. The ending twisted so wonderfully. Great writing, fabulous artwork. Flows well. I wouldn't change a thing.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Well, I think it is fabulous. So how is that for a start. The ending twisted so wonderfully. Great writing, fabulous artwork. Flows well. I wouldn't change a thing.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I don't want you to change either! LOL Thank you.
Comment from misscookie
I have no more stars to give.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
This is what I call a food for thought poem.
Meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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I have no more stars to give.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
This is what I call a food for thought poem.
Meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you, my Lady.
Comment from Sis Cat
An effective poem. Yes, "true diagnosis is not as apparent as is believed." Your poem describes the disconnect between appearance and truth. I enjoyed your conversational tone as if talking to a doctor or, more likely, a person with a PHD degree who thinks he knows it all. Your poem strives to delve deep. Your question at the end drives home your point. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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An effective poem. Yes, "true diagnosis is not as apparent as is believed." Your poem describes the disconnect between appearance and truth. I enjoyed your conversational tone as if talking to a doctor or, more likely, a person with a PHD degree who thinks he knows it all. Your poem strives to delve deep. Your question at the end drives home your point. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading.
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Victor, you're welcome. I write a lot of classical formal poetry now. I might search FS for any forms I haven't tried yet.
Andre
Comment from Glasstruth
Very clever. Love the mirror metaphor. As you write: "Your labels inaccurate," spells a biased view. Our schools are controlled by big business. It's to brainwash the youth to what they want. Love this verse:
"We walk upon this planet,
our passing imprint gone
as waves against the rock."
How true! AWESOME!!! Les
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Very clever. Love the mirror metaphor. As you write: "Your labels inaccurate," spells a biased view. Our schools are controlled by big business. It's to brainwash the youth to what they want. Love this verse:
"We walk upon this planet,
our passing imprint gone
as waves against the rock."
How true! AWESOME!!! Les
Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Les. I apologize for my lack of reviewing. But, you prolly know me by now. Doug
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
What a fantastic poem! I especially liked this part:
We walk upon this planet,
our passing imprint gone
as waves against the rock.
This is a very well written poem and a great entry for the contest. Good luck and happy writing!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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What a fantastic poem! I especially liked this part:
We walk upon this planet,
our passing imprint gone
as waves against the rock.
This is a very well written poem and a great entry for the contest. Good luck and happy writing!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from Unspoken94
I almost gave this a six and I apologize for running out of them. Your passion in this poem is evident and being one who was recently diagnosed with Parkinson's, I still want to reject there's been a mistake. I am a free-verse poet, so your poem is especially close to my pulse. If you ever get a moment, go to my portfolio and read a poem I wrote called, "Diagnosis." I would love to hear your feedback. All the best. -Bill
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I almost gave this a six and I apologize for running out of them. Your passion in this poem is evident and being one who was recently diagnosed with Parkinson's, I still want to reject there's been a mistake. I am a free-verse poet, so your poem is especially close to my pulse. If you ever get a moment, go to my portfolio and read a poem I wrote called, "Diagnosis." I would love to hear your feedback. All the best. -Bill
Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I forgot that you were a psycho-analyst and that you had reasonable probability of reading this. (or I would have held back a little) (well, maybe not) LOL I still want to reject I have diabetes. I still want to reject I have to die. I have "worried" about the tumultuous rolling down the hill to death for far too long. No, not all consuming, but with intelligence comes, I think, a need to face facts. And I admit to having a problem with waking every day a step closer to where I damn well don't want to go. (I think) I am not as God revering as you. I do feel spiritual, however. I do feel we owe our fellow man some common help and decency. I have my own ethics and follow them. Can't say ethics makes life easier, more successful, or in any way helps, except I sleep better. (smile) I read your poem and series of rhetorical questions. You don't need my input. Your self reflection is indicative of the type of human being I wish predominated. I ask only a small favor of you. Is my glass half full? No. I don't even have a glass. I have always had the deepest well of sadness inside that I wish wasn't so large. And also, that it didn't seem to contain so many truths. Would you please go back in my portfolio and read the poem "Bludgeon?" I would dearly love to hear your feelings. Doug
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Doug, that poem was powerful and I appreciate the sensitivity you gave it. But, what you are sharing in your reply means more to me than the poem. I think that you are struggling more with the prescription (plan of care) than the disease. I hope you will continue this conversation. My email is on the review. All the best. Bill
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Thank you, Bill. I would like to continue our conversation. It will be intermittent, but ongoing.
Comment from artemis53
Well done. I interpret this to be a rebellion against the labels that no longer apply and therefore stand in the way of achieving self-actualization.
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Well done. I interpret this to be a rebellion against the labels that no longer apply and therefore stand in the way of achieving self-actualization.
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Right on.
