Poetry and Poison
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Comment from Aiona
Again, a well-written story. I am amazed at how you managed to incorporate poetry into the story, almost as characters, really.
I didn't see any typos. I may have to start using the word "smaze."
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Again, a well-written story. I am amazed at how you managed to incorporate poetry into the story, almost as characters, really.
I didn't see any typos. I may have to start using the word "smaze."
Comment Written 31-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Oh, thank you, Aiona, for your review. Yes, I am using poems as characters. Go ahead and use the word "smaze." Thanks.
Comment from jlsavell
Sis Cat,
Such a beautiful and well written story.
Study their poetry. Your Mother and Father.. I would love to think their chemistry was absolutely and undeniably there.
Your Father battled his demons and perhaps succumbed at will.
Beautiful work and beautiful poetry.
I apologize for being so late
Jimi
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Sis Cat,
Such a beautiful and well written story.
Study their poetry. Your Mother and Father.. I would love to think their chemistry was absolutely and undeniably there.
Your Father battled his demons and perhaps succumbed at will.
Beautiful work and beautiful poetry.
I apologize for being so late
Jimi
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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That's all right, Jimi, better late than never. Thank you for your generous, six star review. Yes, there had to have been some chemistry there with my parents. This chemistry survived their marriage and their deaths. Thank you again for your review.
Comment from I am Cat
Andre,
Once again... here we are... I meant to comment on the comment you made at the last of the fourth chapter, which you start this chapter with...
"Thanks Mom, for the inspiration"
(this is like my son, when we took him to tour his 'dream' university... Full Sail University, in Winter Park, Florida) He wanted to study game art/computer animation... (he's quite talented/artistic) I remember, after the tour, he turned to his father and said, "Thanks dad, for this opportunity to attend this school, I know how hard you have worked all these years to make this happen." then he turned to me and said, "Thanks mom, for giving me the artistic support, and nurturing the artistic talents you saw in me as a kid... and for passing all your creativity on to me. I wouldn't be here without you." Sons... I do love them. ;)
Anyway... on with the story.
I was touched by your father's obvious detachment from the universe after he lost your mother... lost his soulmate... I know how that feels. In 1992, I lost my dear G'amma AND my mother-in-law, Maxine within two weeks of each other. I also lost my 'religion'. My church didn't stick by me, and I felt there was no 'god' to guide me, yet again... I felt alone and floundering in the universe... I was sunk in a deep depression and I can understand your father's woefulness... his need to find another meaning, one much more concrete than belief in a deity who had NOT answered his prayers. Had not been there to 'save' his marriage... where or not it was his fault... didn't matter, his heart was obviously aching. (at least that's what I can feel so far)
I've never returned to 'religion'... not organized religion, so great was my departure. And believe me, I was a BIG TIME attendee of my church. But when the chips were down... *looks around*... no one was there.
Sometimes, you have to take care of yourself and your heart the only way that works for you at the time.
I'm looking forward to hearing more about your parents and the love and the connection they so obviously shared.
And... to finding out how it affect you and your siblings.
Thanks Andre,
i'm truly glad you're writing this down and it's getting out there.
Well done
Cat
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Andre,
Once again... here we are... I meant to comment on the comment you made at the last of the fourth chapter, which you start this chapter with...
"Thanks Mom, for the inspiration"
(this is like my son, when we took him to tour his 'dream' university... Full Sail University, in Winter Park, Florida) He wanted to study game art/computer animation... (he's quite talented/artistic) I remember, after the tour, he turned to his father and said, "Thanks dad, for this opportunity to attend this school, I know how hard you have worked all these years to make this happen." then he turned to me and said, "Thanks mom, for giving me the artistic support, and nurturing the artistic talents you saw in me as a kid... and for passing all your creativity on to me. I wouldn't be here without you." Sons... I do love them. ;)
Anyway... on with the story.
I was touched by your father's obvious detachment from the universe after he lost your mother... lost his soulmate... I know how that feels. In 1992, I lost my dear G'amma AND my mother-in-law, Maxine within two weeks of each other. I also lost my 'religion'. My church didn't stick by me, and I felt there was no 'god' to guide me, yet again... I felt alone and floundering in the universe... I was sunk in a deep depression and I can understand your father's woefulness... his need to find another meaning, one much more concrete than belief in a deity who had NOT answered his prayers. Had not been there to 'save' his marriage... where or not it was his fault... didn't matter, his heart was obviously aching. (at least that's what I can feel so far)
I've never returned to 'religion'... not organized religion, so great was my departure. And believe me, I was a BIG TIME attendee of my church. But when the chips were down... *looks around*... no one was there.
Sometimes, you have to take care of yourself and your heart the only way that works for you at the time.
I'm looking forward to hearing more about your parents and the love and the connection they so obviously shared.
And... to finding out how it affect you and your siblings.
Thanks Andre,
i'm truly glad you're writing this down and it's getting out there.
Well done
Cat
Comment Written 03-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you, I Am Cat, for your insightful review. Speaking from your own experience, you are accurate to describe my father's loss of religion after the divorce. Such things happen. While other reviewers criticized him, you understood where he was coming from. I am glad you know this. Thank you for your review.
Comment from MaBaker
I found this a tad confusing. As I don't write poetry I tend not to read it. Anyway well written no mistakes that I could find but to give a true rending I must read the story 'before' Regards MaBaker
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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I found this a tad confusing. As I don't write poetry I tend not to read it. Anyway well written no mistakes that I could find but to give a true rending I must read the story 'before' Regards MaBaker
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Yes, MaBaker, reviewing the middle of a book can be confusing if you have not read the chapters that came before. Thank you for your review.
Comment from kiwijenny
Just because opposites attract it doesn't mean they should attach.
This is profound,....opposites do attract but it is hard to live together...I do know people who have made it work but it is tough
This is a profound piece of writing
God bless
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Just because opposites attract it doesn't mean they should attach.
This is profound,....opposites do attract but it is hard to live together...I do know people who have made it work but it is tough
This is a profound piece of writing
God bless
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015
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Yes, kiwijenny, making a relationship work is hard for people who are opposites. This revelation came to me while driving through the haze of wildfires. I am glad my parents stayed together long enough for me to be born. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Unspoken94
What a legacy you have been given. Poetry from both of your parents. I envy you being able to trace their connection and disconnect as well as the way their poetry relates to the end of their lives. You have been able to balance their works and you are so fair to both of them. I haven't read previous chapters but I will try to do that.
=Bill
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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What a legacy you have been given. Poetry from both of your parents. I envy you being able to trace their connection and disconnect as well as the way their poetry relates to the end of their lives. You have been able to balance their works and you are so fair to both of them. I haven't read previous chapters but I will try to do that.
=Bill
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Bill, for your generous review. Yes, my parents gave me quite a legacy. Most people do not have poetry from both parents. I am glad sharing our story touched you.
Comment from winespiller
This is very fresh. A different way of telling a tale. Even better if your a big fan of poetry like me. Looking forward to reading more from you.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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This is very fresh. A different way of telling a tale. Even better if your a big fan of poetry like me. Looking forward to reading more from you.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Oh, thank you, winespiller, for your generous review of "A different way of telling a tale."
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo that complements your chapter perfectly. I seem to remember that I saw one earlier chapter and missed the next ones. It is a great story about both your parents dying shortly after each other. They both wrote poetry, in this your father's poetry.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Excellent photo that complements your chapter perfectly. I seem to remember that I saw one earlier chapter and missed the next ones. It is a great story about both your parents dying shortly after each other. They both wrote poetry, in this your father's poetry.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thank you, robina1978, for your encouraging review. Yes, my parents revealed a lot about themselves and their marriage through the poetry they left behind.
Comment from Lesley Collier
A wonderful and poignant story of a couples union through a poem of romance and belief in God to the ending in divorce explained through the father's eyes who views the creation of the universe and love from a purely scientific point. His son pursues an explanation of his parent's lost love through their poetry and pieces together the different points of view which lead to their ultimate separation. Well written with an excellent use of poetry to examine the mystery of the human race which seperates not only couples but mystifys the human race to this day!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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A wonderful and poignant story of a couples union through a poem of romance and belief in God to the ending in divorce explained through the father's eyes who views the creation of the universe and love from a purely scientific point. His son pursues an explanation of his parent's lost love through their poetry and pieces together the different points of view which lead to their ultimate separation. Well written with an excellent use of poetry to examine the mystery of the human race which seperates not only couples but mystifys the human race to this day!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Yes, Lesley, years ago I thought the poems were similar. It was only when I took a closer look at my father's wording did I realize that the poems opposed one another. That "P.S. In Retrospect" in which my father searches for his soul mate (written a year and a half after the divorce) clinched the poem's wider significance for me. Thank you for your generous, six star review of this poetry mystery.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, sis cat, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the poetry of your parents' marriage brought you to tears as you sought to find answers through their words
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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this is an excellent write, sis cat, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the poetry of your parents' marriage brought you to tears as you sought to find answers through their words
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Yes, I was stunned to find my parents' bookend poems of their marriage. Thank you for your review.
