Good Morning
Rhopalic Verse9 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
Beautifully bucolic! Sunrise as artist, painting morning's delicate embroidery across pastural landscape, awakening the dreamer. :-)
Wonderful job wrangling the form into submission :-)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Beautifully bucolic! Sunrise as artist, painting morning's delicate embroidery across pastural landscape, awakening the dreamer. :-)
Wonderful job wrangling the form into submission :-)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you!
Yes, not an easy form to control...
Steve
Comment from mauial
Very well done in following the prompt. I also liked the poem's very easy flow. None of the lines seemed forced. The imagery was great too.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Very well done in following the prompt. I also liked the poem's very easy flow. None of the lines seemed forced. The imagery was great too.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thank you!
Comment from RahulChadha
A perfectly and beautifully written poetry. Nicely shaped and put into words. A different topic as well.
I loved it.
Best of luck and best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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A perfectly and beautifully written poetry. Nicely shaped and put into words. A different topic as well.
I loved it.
Best of luck and best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 28-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Rahul, thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Tessa Kay
Never heard of Rhopalic Verse. You make it sound easy the way your poem flows beautifully, but I could imagine it's quite restrictive to be so tied to syllable count even in the individual words. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Never heard of Rhopalic Verse. You make it sound easy the way your poem flows beautifully, but I could imagine it's quite restrictive to be so tied to syllable count even in the individual words. Well done. :)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Tessa, thanks for the kind words.
Comment from AnnieDawn
This is a new kind of poetry to review for me but from what I count in syllables you have aced this contest. Your poem speaks for itself and I think that is exactly what they want. Great poem and great job.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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This is a new kind of poetry to review for me but from what I count in syllables you have aced this contest. Your poem speaks for itself and I think that is exactly what they want. Great poem and great job.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thank you!
Comment from mvbrooks
This poem is descriptive and creates a colorful image in the reader's mind. The poem requirements are challenging--this poem seems to have mastered them as each line begins with one syllable words and grows--but this poem doesn't seem forced for the sake of making words fit the syllable count. It has a strong , positive flourish.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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This poem is descriptive and creates a colorful image in the reader's mind. The poem requirements are challenging--this poem seems to have mastered them as each line begins with one syllable words and grows--but this poem doesn't seem forced for the sake of making words fit the syllable count. It has a strong , positive flourish.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Mornings. Who needs them? Not my favorite time of day. Well written poem depicts the harshness of having to get up and face another one. Should also be a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Mornings. Who needs them? Not my favorite time of day. Well written poem depicts the harshness of having to get up and face another one. Should also be a good contest entry.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Brett
Comment from NJK62
I really enjoyed reading this poem written in a form with which I was unfamiliar. The first stanza vividly conveys the brilliance of the morning scene: the image of dawn as an artist is highly effective in emphasizing the colours of the scene: the words 'richly', 'radiant' and 'iridescent' tied together by the consonance emphasize the brightness and complexity of the colours of the scene. This idea is vividly picked up and reinforced in the second stanza in the metaphors: 'golden needlepoint' and 'intricate embroideries'. The scene is bewitching, but slowly you come round and the image 'disintegrates' and 'unravels'. This is a successful poem and I hope you do well in the competition.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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I really enjoyed reading this poem written in a form with which I was unfamiliar. The first stanza vividly conveys the brilliance of the morning scene: the image of dawn as an artist is highly effective in emphasizing the colours of the scene: the words 'richly', 'radiant' and 'iridescent' tied together by the consonance emphasize the brightness and complexity of the colours of the scene. This idea is vividly picked up and reinforced in the second stanza in the metaphors: 'golden needlepoint' and 'intricate embroideries'. The scene is bewitching, but slowly you come round and the image 'disintegrates' and 'unravels'. This is a successful poem and I hope you do well in the competition.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much for the thorough review.
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Enjoyed reading the poem and writing the review.
Comment from Nosha17
The dawn for me is the most fascinating part of the day, with its different nuances and moods. Good descriptions and imagery to convey your thoughts. Lovely picture to complement, good luck in the contest. faye
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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The dawn for me is the most fascinating part of the day, with its different nuances and moods. Good descriptions and imagery to convey your thoughts. Lovely picture to complement, good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Faye.
