Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Aw, this is really sad, Bill. Specially the please mama part about pweez bweevin'. All your poetry is so amazingly unique. Wherever do you get all your ideas from?

As always perfectly written.

Gloria

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015

Thank you, Gloria, for the terrific review. Bill

Comment from trimple

Excellent

Hello there, Bill

Love this satyrical story/poem.

Life and death so often share a humorous side, and you have brought out the best of both here.

A good read

kind regards

tracey

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015

Thank you, Tracey, for giving this a look. Bill

reply by trimple on 26-Sep-2015

:)

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I loved the poem until this line:

"Pweez (sniff) bweev"

What is "bweev". Also, perhaps write it like this.

"Pweez," he sniffed, "bweev"

Outside of that dialogue - loved it. Your poem tells a story in a fun way. Joe really comes alive in this poem. Great job.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015

Thanks, Michael, for the excellent review and the dialog advice.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

What a terrible fate she had choking on Alka Seltzer foam! Poor Joe, he is left alone to grieve. Good humour and rhyming. Fun read. faye

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015

Thank you, Faye, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

Dang git, Bill. Poems about death are not supposed to be laughed at.

Hahahhaha! Dang git. That is funny. I would love to know how you keep your creative humor so vital and fecund.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015

Thank you, Jay, for being an upbeat voice. Since school's started I have less time to punch these out. I've a long list of reviews to read as well. I really appreciate your views on this. Bill

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Bill;
-a black humored satirical piece of poetry Were each of the rhyming words are contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter, cadence, timing and Tempo also helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
-I found this poem lucidly sad.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and made the good Lord be with you always Bill.
Alex

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015

Thank you, Alex, for the great review. Bill

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

a nicely run story in a poem. I love the 'straight to read' format of this poem. Joe Jerome will forever stay in the honeycomb, right?

ola thomas

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015

Thank you, Ola, for the terrific review. Bill