Comment from RahulChadha

Excellent

A very well written poetry and nicely expressed and put into words. A decent vocabulary is used and a different topic is chosen,
I would appreciate if you would read my work and give your precious review.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015

This poem serves well to describe the awesome affection one feels when love hits. The astrological comparisons help elevate the sense of numbing attraction one feels when love strikes. All of the celestial references advanced the idea that the reader is totally smitten. Nice.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your beginning the tale of Conrad with the alliteration of hard "c's" and continuing with an effective rhyme scheme in your quatrains. Your "'Helland'/Netherworld" is a clever play on Holland/Netherlands/hell. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015

Thank you, Joan, for noticing those things and the excellent review. Bill

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I wish you knew how much I admire your flippant, humorous, and yet edgy poetry.

Smiling like a Katzenjammer

He'd smash men's toes with a sledge hammer

then throw them in the Russian slammer

because they screamed a lot and walked funny

My sense of correctness expected a rhyme in the last line. Not only didn't you rhyme it ... you added a couple of syllables.

The unexpected. You have a gift, sir!

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015

Thank you, Jay, for the uplifting critique. I appreciate your comments. Bill

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is a creative and unique poem. Your use of words makes Comrade Conrad come to life and show his dark side. Your use of words is clever and makes this a fun poem to read out loud.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015

Thank you for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

The say what goes around comes around. Love the ending with the "javelin" coming back. Nice rhyming throughout. No akwardness at all. Great alliteration in the first line. A truth that is to be told. Well done. Les

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015

Thank you, Les, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Hmm, this is fine. It seemed to be a poem that is focused on a play with words.

note:


because they screamed a lot and walked funny
- This line seems to a bit strange. He was going to throw them in the slammer anyway, right?

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015

Thanks for giving this a look. The joke is they scream and walk funny because he smashed their feet with a hammer.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I understand why you wrote this poem after the recent events. I can't agree more. My mother was worried immediately when they broke the German wall. How right she was.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015

Thank you, Ine, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

That Conrad was a mighty powerful troublesome fellow, he lied through all those eras of Russian history, he suffered from longevity, too! Fun poem with good touch of humour, good use of rhyming, most enjoyable. faye

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015

Thank you, Nosha, for the great review. Bill