When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Wristlock"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Donya Quijote
What a pleasant read. It seems that after all the turmoil you found some peace, even found hubby something meaningful to do though retired.
A turkey neck, now that is a description, one that needs no picture or video. Is what I got to look forward too? I must be the only person on the planet who can walk into a bar or put my photo on a dating site and not get noticed. Invisibility is a blessing and a curse.
Didn't notice any spag or other issues. I'm guessing I am arriving late again to this chapter. I get the feeling this story is winding down. Is it?
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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What a pleasant read. It seems that after all the turmoil you found some peace, even found hubby something meaningful to do though retired.
A turkey neck, now that is a description, one that needs no picture or video. Is what I got to look forward too? I must be the only person on the planet who can walk into a bar or put my photo on a dating site and not get noticed. Invisibility is a blessing and a curse.
Didn't notice any spag or other issues. I'm guessing I am arriving late again to this chapter. I get the feeling this story is winding down. Is it?
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Correct Diane. I figure two more chapters should do it. Fortunately not everyone gets a turkey neck. Dye your hair neon green and wear purple lipstick and earrings. You'll get noticed. LOL
Comment from sibhus
A silver-lining, you found something for Frank to occupy his time with, ha, ha. Somehow, I can image Frank as the Substitute, as in the B-grade movie, ha, ha. Good chapter and it seems as if things in your life slowed down and gained a little more balance. Curious, how these things seem to happen all at once, then taper off. Good stuff there, Spitfire.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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A silver-lining, you found something for Frank to occupy his time with, ha, ha. Somehow, I can image Frank as the Substitute, as in the B-grade movie, ha, ha. Good chapter and it seems as if things in your life slowed down and gained a little more balance. Curious, how these things seem to happen all at once, then taper off. Good stuff there, Spitfire.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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About two more chapters to go with one big emotional scene still to come. Thanks for following.
Comment from joann r romei
Poor Lyle Loveit, everyone said the same thing, that he was homely, he looked exactly like someone in my writing group. Your sister doesn't waste time.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Poor Lyle Loveit, everyone said the same thing, that he was homely, he looked exactly like someone in my writing group. Your sister doesn't waste time.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Neither did Norm, if you ask me. He hadn't been a widow that long.
Comment from Curly Girly
This was a well written chapter. Working with youth in detention must be a difficult job. Good people are needed to do that sort of thing.
Your chapter ended with:
The year 2003 brought good news to Nichole too. Jeff remained the only one not touched by luck.
My immediate thought was: What sort of luck? If Nichole was pleased because he had not been touched by bad luck, then it seems a bit of an odd way to say it. That's the only niggle--all else--great.
Nicole
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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This was a well written chapter. Working with youth in detention must be a difficult job. Good people are needed to do that sort of thing.
Your chapter ended with:
The year 2003 brought good news to Nichole too. Jeff remained the only one not touched by luck.
My immediate thought was: What sort of luck? If Nichole was pleased because he had not been touched by bad luck, then it seems a bit of an odd way to say it. That's the only niggle--all else--great.
Nicole
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Nichole. I'll take another look at it to see if I can make it clearer.
