Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "I Can't Set You Free"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
26 total reviews
Comment from Domino 2
I don't understand exactly what 'free style' is, Brett.
Free verse has no particular form or structure, and blank verse requires structure but no end rhymes. However, both forms require certain poetic devices such as metaphor, alliteration etc. as you probably know.
Yours is well written in a regular structured stanza form and has a good ABCB rhyme scheme.
From the artwork and author notes, I thought this was going to have a 'dog' theme, but unless you have a VERY SPECIAL relationship with one, that seems highly unlikely. ;-)
Sad sentiments of rebuttal and longing, expressed very well.
Best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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I don't understand exactly what 'free style' is, Brett.
Free verse has no particular form or structure, and blank verse requires structure but no end rhymes. However, both forms require certain poetic devices such as metaphor, alliteration etc. as you probably know.
Yours is well written in a regular structured stanza form and has a good ABCB rhyme scheme.
From the artwork and author notes, I thought this was going to have a 'dog' theme, but unless you have a VERY SPECIAL relationship with one, that seems highly unlikely. ;-)
Sad sentiments of rebuttal and longing, expressed very well.
Best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these Country lyrics. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from MacMhuirich
Nice work, the rhyme and rhythm make this a real pleasure to read, loved the lines, "Go on and leave me here alone, You do it all the time" well written my friend.
John
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Nice work, the rhyme and rhythm make this a real pleasure to read, loved the lines, "Go on and leave me here alone, You do it all the time" well written my friend.
John
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Comment from Chrissy710
A great poem Brett' good words and rhymes nicely, quite catchy too. Is this a song too? Perhaps the lines " I played around so many times. Now I'm losing you " is the clue to the lost love! Well done Cheers Christineð???
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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A great poem Brett' good words and rhymes nicely, quite catchy too. Is this a song too? Perhaps the lines " I played around so many times. Now I'm losing you " is the clue to the lost love! Well done Cheers Christineð???
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nicely done
Perfect rhyme and rhythm.
Flow and meter are spot on.
It may be in southern style but the only place it picked up a glich for me (just for me) was the word ain't. That's just me. and that was the only spot.
Again nicely done
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Nicely done
Perfect rhyme and rhythm.
Flow and meter are spot on.
It may be in southern style but the only place it picked up a glich for me (just for me) was the word ain't. That's just me. and that was the only spot.
Again nicely done
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these Country lyrics. Appreciate your comments and support. And, "ain't" stays. We say it all the time here in Nashville.
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understood. we way it too but not in that graceful way. Still lovei it even with the aint.
Comment from Pantygynt
A free flowing lyrical piece like most of your poetry. It tells the same old story, hands out the blame, takes it on the nose and teturns to the image of loneliness with which it began, that table for two, me and your memory.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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A free flowing lyrical piece like most of your poetry. It tells the same old story, hands out the blame, takes it on the nose and teturns to the image of loneliness with which it began, that table for two, me and your memory.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thanks.
Comment from Glasstruth
Great lyrics. Has everything that a country and western song needs. The picture you used fooled me. At first I thought it was about a dog, but as I read further it was a typical you left me song. The line: "all alone at a table for two" really sets the mood. Great job. Les
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Great lyrics. Has everything that a country and western song needs. The picture you used fooled me. At first I thought it was about a dog, but as I read further it was a typical you left me song. The line: "all alone at a table for two" really sets the mood. Great job. Les
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Appreciate your comments and support. Glad you enjoyed these Country lyrics.
Comment from MelB
This made me very sad at first because I thought it was about the dog. You do like the theme of love lost, but it tends to be a great subject for song lyrics.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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This made me very sad at first because I thought it was about the dog. You do like the theme of love lost, but it tends to be a great subject for song lyrics.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Appreciate your comments and support. Glad you enjoyed these Country lyrics.
Comment from Curly Girly
Thanks for using my picture of my sheep dog when she was a pup. She's all grown up now--long and lanky, and runs really fast.
These are great song lyrics, they make a good ballad.
This got my attention:
I played around so many times
Now I'm losing you
Yep, that's what happens.
Thanks
Nicole
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thanks for using my picture of my sheep dog when she was a pup. She's all grown up now--long and lanky, and runs really fast.
These are great song lyrics, they make a good ballad.
This got my attention:
I played around so many times
Now I'm losing you
Yep, that's what happens.
Thanks
Nicole
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these Country lyrics. And, your pup does look like my Danny, so thanks again for the use of your picture. Could not resist.
Comment from Gloria ....
Yay, Brett! Holding on to a love that has ended is never a good idea. It reminds me of that old song:
When you just give love, and never get love,
you'd better let love depart.
Great lyrics, it's a real tear-jerker.
One nit:
And start our love a new (anew)
Great job, my friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Yay, Brett! Holding on to a love that has ended is never a good idea. It reminds me of that old song:
When you just give love, and never get love,
you'd better let love depart.
Great lyrics, it's a real tear-jerker.
One nit:
And start our love a new (anew)
Great job, my friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
The dog sure is cute. What's your dog's name that looks like the picture?
What kind of a dog is it? When I first saw the picture and I started reading the poem I thought you had written it for the dog. Leave it to me to think something like that. I loved both the picture and you poetry.
Kat
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Hi Brett,
The dog sure is cute. What's your dog's name that looks like the picture?
What kind of a dog is it? When I first saw the picture and I started reading the poem I thought you had written it for the dog. Leave it to me to think something like that. I loved both the picture and you poetry.
Kat
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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His name is Danny. Like the idea of writing a lyric for him. Maybe I will. Appreciate your comments and support.
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I'd sure like to read a lyric about Danny.
