Striking
tanka form26 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
Hahaha. Lol. It sounds nasty but is a very good description of bowling.
Thank you for sharing a laugh!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Hahaha. Lol. It sounds nasty but is a very good description of bowling.
Thank you for sharing a laugh!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Rebekka, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from honeytree
I found the art work was great
for the words written.
I guess within our world
lots of situations can happen
that can be good bad or indifferent
We are human beings.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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I found the art work was great
for the words written.
I guess within our world
lots of situations can happen
that can be good bad or indifferent
We are human beings.
Honeytree
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Honeytree, for the positive review. Bill
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That's fine
Annie
Comment from Michelle Joy
Wow, you wrote this wonderfully. I was not expecting that at all but it did not disappoint. What a clever and creative twist. Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Wow, you wrote this wonderfully. I was not expecting that at all but it did not disappoint. What a clever and creative twist. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Michelle, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
Well I gotta say, Bill, bowling isn't really my thing because it makes me quite cranky. Because I just haven't ever been able to get those strikes, dangit, always spares, if not always alley shots. *sigh*
But as always you are bang on with your poetry so Ima give you a six for this strike tanka.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Well I gotta say, Bill, bowling isn't really my thing because it makes me quite cranky. Because I just haven't ever been able to get those strikes, dangit, always spares, if not always alley shots. *sigh*
But as always you are bang on with your poetry so Ima give you a six for this strike tanka.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the striking review. I'm a real go-GUTTER when it comes to bowling. Bill
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hello Bill ...
First, I am retired from the Army (1965 - 1988). Thank you for your service!
My son and I bowled league for many, many years. We used to go to the Amateur's National Championships every year. He's an exceptional bowler ... 221 average. I'm decent at 181.
Your poem certainly resonates with me! And you summed it all up quite nicely! Super job! Wishing you the best ...
Alan
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Hello Bill ...
First, I am retired from the Army (1965 - 1988). Thank you for your service!
My son and I bowled league for many, many years. We used to go to the Amateur's National Championships every year. He's an exceptional bowler ... 221 average. I'm decent at 181.
Your poem certainly resonates with me! And you summed it all up quite nicely! Super job! Wishing you the best ...
Alan
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, PSW, for the positive review. Here's to you, Brother, on a career well spent. Bill
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You are welcome. And thank you in return.
Comment from LeslieP5
Excellent Tanks - true to form and syllable count. It describes well the bowling ball, and the X tacy when release causes a good roll and probably a strike. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Excellent Tanks - true to form and syllable count. It describes well the bowling ball, and the X tacy when release causes a good roll and probably a strike. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Leslie, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi Bill, hey, neat write. Almost sounds like a training lecture for the use of a weapon. I liked it! The use of X-tacy can easily be identified by the reader. That rush of adrenaline hoping the bullet finds its mark. Cheers.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Hi Bill, hey, neat write. Almost sounds like a training lecture for the use of a weapon. I liked it! The use of X-tacy can easily be identified by the reader. That rush of adrenaline hoping the bullet finds its mark. Cheers.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Benjamin, for the X-ellent review. Bill
Comment from Writeronboard
I like this because sure you're talking about bowling but also someone's love for the game. Now I want to go bowling! And that's striking!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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I like this because sure you're talking about bowling but also someone's love for the game. Now I want to go bowling! And that's striking!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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Thank you, WOB, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
You must be a bowler. I am a terrible one. LOL
I like your tanka, it is a lot of fun. You did a good job following the tanka format. Excellent!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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You must be a bowler. I am a terrible one. LOL
I like your tanka, it is a lot of fun. You did a good job following the tanka format. Excellent!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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Thank you, GBR, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from anabellapongasi
This is a clever tanka about bowling and maybe also about something else. There are hints of double meanings scattered throughout the lines. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Anabella
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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This is a clever tanka about bowling and maybe also about something else. There are hints of double meanings scattered throughout the lines. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Anabella
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Anabella, for the excellent review. Bill
