Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Beyond Fear"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Fear can come in many shapes and sizes. However, one thing is certain to be constant, true, and get you through any fear imaginable, and that is simply "Cast your vote for Jesus. Keep your eyes on Calvary". Well written poem that should also be a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Fear can come in many shapes and sizes. However, one thing is certain to be constant, true, and get you through any fear imaginable, and that is simply "Cast your vote for Jesus. Keep your eyes on Calvary". Well written poem that should also be a good contest entry.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words and generous review!
Comment from Lovinia
Hi playinaround
Nice to see you back.
A good entry for the contest. Excellent use of metaphor to describe the pain of being lost, and now returning back home, to God.
You've written a strong lament, from the first line I felt the chill and deep, dark emotions. The first four lines seem to create the rocking "to and fro", the following build a little to the stronger waves which may cause the 'boat' to falter. The next verse seems to lift on the wave and perhaps a little forward movement. Yet still the difficult work of 'walking the talk', the "Row Row Row ...".
Well done and an interesting and creative free verse for the contest. A strong expression of faith in so few words. Excellent presentation. Light touches of alliteration, assonance and consonance provide an awakening of the audial as well as the visual. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
A couple of typos:
tossing two(to) and fro in the darkness
rocking eb(ebb) and flo(flow) in the piercing chill
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Hi playinaround
Nice to see you back.
A good entry for the contest. Excellent use of metaphor to describe the pain of being lost, and now returning back home, to God.
You've written a strong lament, from the first line I felt the chill and deep, dark emotions. The first four lines seem to create the rocking "to and fro", the following build a little to the stronger waves which may cause the 'boat' to falter. The next verse seems to lift on the wave and perhaps a little forward movement. Yet still the difficult work of 'walking the talk', the "Row Row Row ...".
Well done and an interesting and creative free verse for the contest. A strong expression of faith in so few words. Excellent presentation. Light touches of alliteration, assonance and consonance provide an awakening of the audial as well as the visual. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
A couple of typos:
tossing two(to) and fro in the darkness
rocking eb(ebb) and flo(flow) in the piercing chill
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Thank you Lovinia, Even your reviews are so artful. I really feel encouraged that you liked my poem. I changed to 'ebb and flow', and I thank you so much for the correction. Looking forward to your next poem... You are the best. kitty
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I always love a good free verse. You've written a goodie here ... so, please DO feel encouraged. :)))
It sounds like times have been tough on you, I'm pleased to see you pulling through it. If I can help in any way, please feel free to PM. Have a great day sweet one. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
