When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "New Directions "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from boxergirl
I like how your life has calmed down and gained some normalcy. I particularly relate to the last line about touching lives...that is what made me love my job the most. Good stuff...8-)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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I like how your life has calmed down and gained some normalcy. I particularly relate to the last line about touching lives...that is what made me love my job the most. Good stuff...8-)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Thanks, NG. Things get even better next post.
Comment from abbasjoy
I love this last sentence, it truly made my night.
"Teaching gifted classes gave me a chance to expand brains. Teaching average and below average teens gave me a chance to touch souls."
That's what teaching should do, as it make you realize what you were born to do. Not just teach, but to actually take what was a mere speck within a human body, and nurture it, to bring it to fruition. Well done!
Glad Frank cut you some slack, so your relationship could grow, instead of withering and dying.
Well written chapter.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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I love this last sentence, it truly made my night.
"Teaching gifted classes gave me a chance to expand brains. Teaching average and below average teens gave me a chance to touch souls."
That's what teaching should do, as it make you realize what you were born to do. Not just teach, but to actually take what was a mere speck within a human body, and nurture it, to bring it to fruition. Well done!
Glad Frank cut you some slack, so your relationship could grow, instead of withering and dying.
Well written chapter.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Thanks for the very insightful review, abbasjoy.
Comment from light
A positive attitude always important. But not always possible.
I admire anyone who can write about their life.
I like that you were able to make an impression on your students. There are always some that you can't reach. Good chapter
Elaine
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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A positive attitude always important. But not always possible.
I admire anyone who can write about their life.
I like that you were able to make an impression on your students. There are always some that you can't reach. Good chapter
Elaine
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Thanks, Elaine. I can't write everything about my life. The juicy parts I don't want to put on paper. LOL
Appreciate you took the time to read and review.
Comment from joann r romei
This was certainly an upbeat chapter, looks like everyone was headed in a positive direction, like the line they thought the other had money. lol
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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This was certainly an upbeat chapter, looks like everyone was headed in a positive direction, like the line they thought the other had money. lol
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Yea! I'm glad someone finally mentioned that. Her daughter gave me the information.
Comment from Louise Michelle
I can't help but smile at the affirmations. I guess if we say them enough and every day, they could work.
I hope you appreciated how lucky you were to have a husband that was really interested in your life. First a hug, then the questions. How wonderful...
What is the connection between Mom's spirit and the artificial roses?
Haha - I bet that traditional wedding was welcome (although Nicole's was so much fun).
How wonderful that you had such a rewarding job and how wonderful for the students that they had you.
This is a good chapter, Shari, packed with a lot of information. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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I can't help but smile at the affirmations. I guess if we say them enough and every day, they could work.
I hope you appreciated how lucky you were to have a husband that was really interested in your life. First a hug, then the questions. How wonderful...
What is the connection between Mom's spirit and the artificial roses?
Haha - I bet that traditional wedding was welcome (although Nicole's was so much fun).
How wonderful that you had such a rewarding job and how wonderful for the students that they had you.
This is a good chapter, Shari, packed with a lot of information. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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The roses go back to a chapter where she promised to send me a sign when she passed over. We agreed it would be a rose.
That's the theory behind affirmations. They worm their ways into a subconscious. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Love the ending. THe last two sentences say SO MUCH. You're adaptable. You found joy in what you were doing instead of griping about the job. That's HOW teachers make a difference, and those kids were lucky to have you as their teacher. :)
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Love the ending. THe last two sentences say SO MUCH. You're adaptable. You found joy in what you were doing instead of griping about the job. That's HOW teachers make a difference, and those kids were lucky to have you as their teacher. :)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Thanks, Phyllis. It's so important to make your life meaningful.
Comment from Jay Squires
Hey, Shari. I'm sorry it took so long to read this since I loaded it last night. I got so far behind and play catch-up in order. So, don't count spags toward deductions, though I still show them.
I loved this chapter. It resonated with me since there was a huge stress factor involved with my retirement. It ended with our separation. You and Frank were wise enough to make
it work.
Some of the things I found that others have pointed out, I'm sure, and you've already corrected:
dependingon whether he got a Saturday or Sunday off. [Spacing]
"Hey, Mom," she phoned unexpectedly [This is not a speech tag. You need a period after "Mom" and cap your "s" in "she".]
restaurants and high priced stores. [No closed quote]
being a speech therapist? [No closed quote]
" That's your organizational [Vagrant space after open quote.]
"You can throw those out now," my daughter giggled. [Can't use an action as a speech tag. You could say, "my daughter said, giggling." Or, a period after "now" and a new sentence with "MY".]
classes gave me a chance to expand brains. [another vagrant space after "me".]
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Hey, Shari. I'm sorry it took so long to read this since I loaded it last night. I got so far behind and play catch-up in order. So, don't count spags toward deductions, though I still show them.
I loved this chapter. It resonated with me since there was a huge stress factor involved with my retirement. It ended with our separation. You and Frank were wise enough to make
it work.
Some of the things I found that others have pointed out, I'm sure, and you've already corrected:
dependingon whether he got a Saturday or Sunday off. [Spacing]
"Hey, Mom," she phoned unexpectedly [This is not a speech tag. You need a period after "Mom" and cap your "s" in "she".]
restaurants and high priced stores. [No closed quote]
being a speech therapist? [No closed quote]
" That's your organizational [Vagrant space after open quote.]
"You can throw those out now," my daughter giggled. [Can't use an action as a speech tag. You could say, "my daughter said, giggling." Or, a period after "now" and a new sentence with "MY".]
classes gave me a chance to expand brains. [another vagrant space after "me".]
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Wow! Sorry to hear your marriage didn't survive the stress factor. Thanks for finding my spags.
Hey, Mom," she phoned unexpectedly - I did it right the first time but my word processor red-lined it until I used a comma instead of a period.
Comment from judiverse
This is really great and shows how you're progressing with your life--indeed, making lemonade out of the lemons you'd been handed. I was especially interested in how you made the best of working with your average or below average students. Great concluding sentence. Although Nicole has hit the jackpot with her new job, while Jeff was still trying to get acting jobs. I'm sure you were happy about your son getting married. Great story of your family. Sounds like Frank needed something to occupy his time. judi
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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This is really great and shows how you're progressing with your life--indeed, making lemonade out of the lemons you'd been handed. I was especially interested in how you made the best of working with your average or below average students. Great concluding sentence. Although Nicole has hit the jackpot with her new job, while Jeff was still trying to get acting jobs. I'm sure you were happy about your son getting married. Great story of your family. Sounds like Frank needed something to occupy his time. judi
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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That he did, and it's part of the next post. You'll also hear (surprise, surprise) that Jeff does get a couple of gigs. THanks so much for the exceptional rating. The students I remember with personal fondness were not the honors, but the average and underdogs.
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You're welcome. Yes, you figure the honors kids can take care of themselves, whereas the underdogs need help. Interesting to hear that Jeff lands some acting gigs. judi
Comment from Deniz22
"Teaching gifted classes gave me a chance to expand brains. Teaching average and below average teens gave me a chance to touch souls." Great contrast, beautiful thought...this statement alone deserves a six. Lois Lane rocks the Planet...again!
CK (in awe)
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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"Teaching gifted classes gave me a chance to expand brains. Teaching average and below average teens gave me a chance to touch souls." Great contrast, beautiful thought...this statement alone deserves a six. Lois Lane rocks the Planet...again!
CK (in awe)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Does that mean you'll change into Superman again and fly me around the universe? Thanks for the six, CK.
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Anytime....:)
Comment from robyn corum
Cool chapter!
1.)We saw into each other two and a half days a week depending(space)on whether he got a Saturday or Sunday off.
--> lose the (into) at beginning -- unless you're telling a whole different kind of story...
2.)They each thought the other had money.
--> Bless their hearts!
3.)"Hey, Mom," (she said when) she phoned unexpectedly in February 2001.
4.) offered me a job as assistant in the Department of Human (R)elations and Restaurants at Caruso Enterprises.
5.) "You can throw those out now(period)" (M)y daughter giggled.
6.) I adjusted to my regular classes making it a challenge to pick out students singled out as nerds or misfits and (trying) to find their talents.
7.) Cody's classmates giggled or made faces when he over-dramatized (his off-the-wall ideas) with voice and hands.
8.) Teaching gifted classes gave me (delete extra space?) a chance to expand brains.
9.) Teaching average and below average teens gave me a chance to touch souls.
--> GOOD ON YOU!!
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Cool chapter!
1.)We saw into each other two and a half days a week depending(space)on whether he got a Saturday or Sunday off.
--> lose the (into) at beginning -- unless you're telling a whole different kind of story...
2.)They each thought the other had money.
--> Bless their hearts!
3.)"Hey, Mom," (she said when) she phoned unexpectedly in February 2001.
4.) offered me a job as assistant in the Department of Human (R)elations and Restaurants at Caruso Enterprises.
5.) "You can throw those out now(period)" (M)y daughter giggled.
6.) I adjusted to my regular classes making it a challenge to pick out students singled out as nerds or misfits and (trying) to find their talents.
7.) Cody's classmates giggled or made faces when he over-dramatized (his off-the-wall ideas) with voice and hands.
8.) Teaching gifted classes gave me (delete extra space?) a chance to expand brains.
9.) Teaching average and below average teens gave me a chance to touch souls.
--> GOOD ON YOU!!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Yikes! Don't know how I missed a few of these obvious errors. Thanks too for helping me re word two awkward sentences.
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Sure! I'm enjoying your story!
