Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Me And The Greyhound"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
44 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
Excellent free style poem reminded me of the blues or country in terms of subject and handling. The tone and voice are direct, confessional as if told to a bartender. I feel this man's regret over a loss and hope for finding her again. You told a story poem that was all too real. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Excellent free style poem reminded me of the blues or country in terms of subject and handling. The tone and voice are direct, confessional as if told to a bartender. I feel this man's regret over a loss and hope for finding her again. You told a story poem that was all too real. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one. Always appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Pantygynt
Yes the artwork does complement the poem - red lights all over the panel. The warning's there. Your poetry and your lyrics paint a great picture of the folklore of modern American life. This one is a little snapshot of angst and misery brought about as you freely admit by your own behaviour but even that doesn't make it easier to bear.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Yes the artwork does complement the poem - red lights all over the panel. The warning's there. Your poetry and your lyrics paint a great picture of the folklore of modern American life. This one is a little snapshot of angst and misery brought about as you freely admit by your own behaviour but even that doesn't make it easier to bear.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Thanks.
Comment from Serendipity!
This is a powerful poem with a neat beat. My but I hope that eventually you found a way to communicate, get a stronger relationship and eventually be reconciled. It's not always easy being married, but it's worth all the struggle which gets less over the years. You're in my prayers.
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This is a powerful poem with a neat beat. My but I hope that eventually you found a way to communicate, get a stronger relationship and eventually be reconciled. It's not always easy being married, but it's worth all the struggle which gets less over the years. You're in my prayers.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these Country lyrics in poem format Your comments and support always appreciated.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This is a nice little poem. You did a good job writing it. Is it a true story or something that just came to your mind? Regardless, I had a great time reading it.
Kat
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Hi Brett,
This is a nice little poem. You did a good job writing it. Is it a true story or something that just came to your mind? Regardless, I had a great time reading it.
Kat
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Country music lyrics. Glad you enjoyed this little poem. Appreciate your comments and support always.
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I love country music!
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem has the makings of a country western song. It has set up the conundrum of whether to keep waiting in the station or hop on a bus and go to Mohammad (the girl).
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This poem has the makings of a country western song. It has set up the conundrum of whether to keep waiting in the station or hop on a bus and go to Mohammad (the girl).
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
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It is a Country music lyric. Glad you enjoyed it. Always appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from royowen
Thanks for the poem Brett, your artwork and freestyle format, there's no artwork and it's in couplet rhyming, the syllable count is a little awry but apart from that it's quite nicely written, in fact quite good, the language expression is good and it has reasonable to it. Well done, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thanks for the poem Brett, your artwork and freestyle format, there's no artwork and it's in couplet rhyming, the syllable count is a little awry but apart from that it's quite nicely written, in fact quite good, the language expression is good and it has reasonable to it. Well done, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these Country music lyrics in a poem format. Always appreciate your comments and support.
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Most welcome Brett
Comment from MelB
Great lyrics for a song here. Good rhyme, rhythm, and flow. Tells the story of a lost love due to lying and cheating. Those two things will always do a person in.
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Great lyrics for a song here. Good rhyme, rhythm, and flow. Tells the story of a lost love due to lying and cheating. Those two things will always do a person in.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
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One of my Country lyrics. Glad you enjoyed this one. Always appreciate your comments and support indeed.
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You're welcome, Brett.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi Brett, Your story poem reminded me of my own memories on the Greyhound bus. Seeing all those people with suitcases in hand now reminds me of everyone going to a promised land; destination unknown. I could feel your anxiety at the end of the paragraph. "It's two in the morning, I need her." Take care and cheers.
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Hi Brett, Your story poem reminded me of my own memories on the Greyhound bus. Seeing all those people with suitcases in hand now reminds me of everyone going to a promised land; destination unknown. I could feel your anxiety at the end of the paragraph. "It's two in the morning, I need her." Take care and cheers.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little poem. Always appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Tessa Kay
Yes, lying and stepping out are not recipes for a happy and lasting relationship.
I like the mind-picture of her with the suitcase and the way the conversation unfolds, with a Greyhound bus at that. Very original.
Thanks for sharing this story in verse.
Have a nice weekend
:) Tessa
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Yes, lying and stepping out are not recipes for a happy and lasting relationship.
I like the mind-picture of her with the suitcase and the way the conversation unfolds, with a Greyhound bus at that. Very original.
Thanks for sharing this story in verse.
Have a nice weekend
:) Tessa
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one. Your comments and support always appreciated.
Comment from rspoet
This is a very good song/poem
It reads very well, like one of those talking songs
The rhyme is excellent in aabb pattern
When I first read the title, I though about a greyhound dog
Maybe I wasn't that far off
"Nothing that I ever did put a smile upon her face"
doesn't leave much room for hope
If she's not back by morning gonna leave this love behind
Must have been a deep relationship
Very well done
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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This is a very good song/poem
It reads very well, like one of those talking songs
The rhyme is excellent in aabb pattern
When I first read the title, I though about a greyhound dog
Maybe I wasn't that far off
"Nothing that I ever did put a smile upon her face"
doesn't leave much room for hope
If she's not back by morning gonna leave this love behind
Must have been a deep relationship
Very well done
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little poem. Your comments and support appreciated.
