All In the Night's Work
A meeting With the Dark Angel8 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Cass, OMG what a story...how very sad...it sounds like he was very much loved...and didn't think he was worth it...what a awful way to die...story very well written...and very well told...I am so sorry I don't have a six....******...God Bless...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
HI Cass, OMG what a story...how very sad...it sounds like he was very much loved...and didn't think he was worth it...what a awful way to die...story very well written...and very well told...I am so sorry I don't have a six....******...God Bless...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Dear Linda, thank you for your review and the five stars. My grandmother was Ruth Scott. She was an angel of mercy to the tragic people she cared for. She didn't tell any one about this happening, it was the young policeman who was a friend of my elder brothers.. Grandma was very conscious of the confidentiality of her calling and never told my family any of what she did as a nurse. I knew her and loved her dearly cheers Cass
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you are so welcome Cass...luff xxoo
Comment from Nosha17
What a lovely interesting story, you told it so well, with all the detailed descriptions of the events, the characters and the dialogue were all well done. How superstitious they were those days. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
What a lovely interesting story, you told it so well, with all the detailed descriptions of the events, the characters and the dialogue were all well done. How superstitious they were those days. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you for your review and the five stars. My grandmother was Ruth. She was a wonderful woman. I loved he dearly Cheers Cass
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
You've a good solid story, Cass, but the presentation is rather all over the place, which can easily be sorted.
Nurse ! Nurse Scott ! - move the exclamation marks in against the word. Also you need to go through and move the commas and periods in against the words, which will improve on presentation.
You're too late(,)" sobbed the woman - add comma
self-loathing
heavy and cold.The - leave space after period
Are you there?(") - inverted commas
Thanks to you(,)" he said quietly - add comma
You also need to leave spaces between the lines of speech which will make it much easier for reviewers to read.
good luck
Margaret
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
You've a good solid story, Cass, but the presentation is rather all over the place, which can easily be sorted.
Nurse ! Nurse Scott ! - move the exclamation marks in against the word. Also you need to go through and move the commas and periods in against the words, which will improve on presentation.
You're too late(,)" sobbed the woman - add comma
self-loathing
heavy and cold.The - leave space after period
Are you there?(") - inverted commas
Thanks to you(,)" he said quietly - add comma
You also need to leave spaces between the lines of speech which will make it much easier for reviewers to read.
good luck
Margaret
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Dear Margaret, thank you for your careful, in depth review and the five stars. I will act upon all your suggestions promptly.
My keyboard skills need honing , so I tend to misplace the dots and dashes at times.. I will do a tweak to follow your advice Sincere thanks Cheers Cass
Comment from kiwijenny
What a beautiful story of love and redemption
Of kindness and good sense..
Who was your grandmother in the story? The Boer war was early 1900s wasn't it? Lord Baden Powell founder of Boy Scouts in England was in that war
God bless
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
What a beautiful story of love and redemption
Of kindness and good sense..
Who was your grandmother in the story? The Boer war was early 1900s wasn't it? Lord Baden Powell founder of Boy Scouts in England was in that war
God bless
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you for your review and the five stars. My grandmother was Ruth . Her maiden name was Scott which I used to preserve anonymity. As friendly and amiable as FanStory is, I still prefer to maintain a slight distance. Also, there are people still living
Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Fascinating story. Was your grandmother Ruth, the nurse?
I have to wonder why Reg would choose a painful death by carbolic cleaner over a painless, instant gun shot, since he had a gun with him. I guess we'll never know.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
Fascinating story. Was your grandmother Ruth, the nurse?
I have to wonder why Reg would choose a painful death by carbolic cleaner over a painless, instant gun shot, since he had a gun with him. I guess we'll never know.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes Ruth was my grandmother and an absolute heroine to those who knew her and loved her for her work among the destitute and lost souls she reached out to.
I know this story to be true as it was told to us by the young policeman who was a friend of my elder brothers.
My father was very angry with her .,My mother flapped her hands and did nothing. Grandma never said a word.
cheers Cass
Comment from danpald
This is a beautiful account of the power of love
Love for the eternal rest that all are called to hold
The reality of mental illness was not known so well
So you had the first old priest lost to his true calling
The reality of prayer coming from the heart
Repentance called for and answered with sacraments
The young priest came as was his duty
While the soul moved toward heaven for ever to ponder
The old nurse gave life with her care
The prayers of a wife answered with time
The memory of an old soldier Given Honor
Well the moment is remembered in your story
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
This is a beautiful account of the power of love
Love for the eternal rest that all are called to hold
The reality of mental illness was not known so well
So you had the first old priest lost to his true calling
The reality of prayer coming from the heart
Repentance called for and answered with sacraments
The young priest came as was his duty
While the soul moved toward heaven for ever to ponder
The old nurse gave life with her care
The prayers of a wife answered with time
The memory of an old soldier Given Honor
Well the moment is remembered in your story
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Dear Dan, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Your poetic words are truly lovely and I am deeply touched by them.
this is a true story, the young policeman was a friend of my elder brothers, and it was he who told my parents of that terrible night. Thanks again for looking cheers Cass
Comment from LeannaP
Hi there,
I really enjoyed reading this piece,
I thought it was a great submission for
this contest prompt. It is a delicate story
one about trust and even faith.Its also
the first ive reviewed of your work
Great read!
leanna
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
Hi there,
I really enjoyed reading this piece,
I thought it was a great submission for
this contest prompt. It is a delicate story
one about trust and even faith.Its also
the first ive reviewed of your work
Great read!
leanna
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Dear Leanna , thank you for your review and the five stars. I wasn't sure whether to post this story or not, but I think I'm going to be very glad that I did. The story is true. My grandmother was a heroine to the people she cared for.Thanks again cheers Cass
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hero then, hero forever!
your welcome!
Leanna
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Carbolic soda. Good grief what a horrendous and painful death that must have been.
Yes, there was a time when most churches refused to even bury suicides in consecrated ground. Happily, the young priest seems to have accepted the man's repentance.
Ruth's concern for the man's salvation is most touching.
You tell the story well.
'(Some-one)' should be 'someone.'
Warmly,
Juliette
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
Carbolic soda. Good grief what a horrendous and painful death that must have been.
Yes, there was a time when most churches refused to even bury suicides in consecrated ground. Happily, the young priest seems to have accepted the man's repentance.
Ruth's concern for the man's salvation is most touching.
You tell the story well.
'(Some-one)' should be 'someone.'
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Dear Julie, thank you for your review and the five stars. this is one of many stories I have learnt about my grandmother's heroic life. I hope to present more as time goes on
Cheers Cass