Where Did My Beautiful Body Go
A poem about my aging body15 total reviews
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
What a wonderful, fun, gallivanting, self-effacing, life-loving, romp of a poem. I see this was posted seven years ago! You must have some more these gems up your sleeve! Please post! Thanks again.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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What a wonderful, fun, gallivanting, self-effacing, life-loving, romp of a poem. I see this was posted seven years ago! You must have some more these gems up your sleeve! Please post! Thanks again.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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Thank you. That was one of my few attempts at writing poetry. I had actually forgotten about it. Glad you liked it.
Comment from sunnilicious
Eat right, exercise daily and wonder if you're aging normal when the mirror shows you otherwise. I understand. I sympathize and cry with you. I'm shocked that you can talk so openly about the process. Good flow of words. Relatable topic. Good repeat words with rhymes. Great work. Good luck in the contest. Regardless, you're always a winner :)
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Eat right, exercise daily and wonder if you're aging normal when the mirror shows you otherwise. I understand. I sympathize and cry with you. I'm shocked that you can talk so openly about the process. Good flow of words. Relatable topic. Good repeat words with rhymes. Great work. Good luck in the contest. Regardless, you're always a winner :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Thank you. Oh my goodness, you went way back to find this writing. I don't do poetry anymore, I prefer to write prose. I do remember writing it, though.
Comment from kiwijenny
It's with mine...they escaped
But you know they left me my mind...well occasionally that appears to be missing too. Suppose we just have to muddle through. Good thing our eyes are going or we couldn't stand it
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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It's with mine...they escaped
But you know they left me my mind...well occasionally that appears to be missing too. Suppose we just have to muddle through. Good thing our eyes are going or we couldn't stand it
God bless
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you. Yep, we just have to live with these changes and be glad we are alive to see them. Even if some are not for the best.
Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed your poem about our aging bodies. I guess our bikini days are finished. Photo is beautiful (I know it isn't you by your author's note). You're right about needing our body to enjoy life. Got to keep in the best shape we can at any age.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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I enjoyed your poem about our aging bodies. I guess our bikini days are finished. Photo is beautiful (I know it isn't you by your author's note). You're right about needing our body to enjoy life. Got to keep in the best shape we can at any age.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you. That picture is of my best friends mother taken in the 1940s. I remember her as a child, she was a very beautiful woman. I was always kind of in awe of her. I wasn't even born and neither was my best friend when that picture was taken.
Comment from mfowler
I found your poem very amusing and reckon most of us over the hillers (my words) know just what you mean. There is no holding back the tide, just the need to learn acceptance or get a gym membership. Well written and very amusing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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I found your poem very amusing and reckon most of us over the hillers (my words) know just what you mean. There is no holding back the tide, just the need to learn acceptance or get a gym membership. Well written and very amusing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you f or your comments. At 70, I guess I will have to accept
Comment from Chrissy710
For not being into poetry stuff this is not bad and I can identify with your sentiments, although I still wear a bikini ( at 62) and shorts bit have to pack it in a bit more ha ha. A good poem I enjoyed reading this and had a smile too Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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For not being into poetry stuff this is not bad and I can identify with your sentiments, although I still wear a bikini ( at 62) and shorts bit have to pack it in a bit more ha ha. A good poem I enjoyed reading this and had a smile too Cheers Christine
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you. I still wear shorts at 70 but am not brave enough for a bikini
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Yes I agree lol but I still do
Comment from Pantygynt
Don't worry, it happens to everyone, something comes along in the middle og the night and swaps it for the one they don't want. Sounds like it'll be your turn soon to go on the prowl.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Don't worry, it happens to everyone, something comes along in the middle og the night and swaps it for the one they don't want. Sounds like it'll be your turn soon to go on the prowl.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind reviewThank you. I wrote that poem after taking a shower last night and looking in the mirror. I am truly grateful that my body still works good and is healthy at age 70
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At 74 I'm reasonably happy with what I've got, but soon who knows!
Comment from Lovinia
Hello Mystery Poet
I guess many of us can ask this question and relate to many of your past attributes. lol At least some of us can have a sense of humour about it. 'Alive and kicking', I guess that's what really counts, and whether we enjoyed every stage of our body's life be-in-it. :))) I love the image you've selected to complement the message in your poem.
A prose writer dabbling in the poetry world, or perhaps a newbie, new to it all. I think you've done very well. A good technique used well in your refrain line. You've also done well with rhyme and rhythm. A lament with a sense of humour. Hahahaha! A fun read, I really enjoyed.
A fun entry, and keep on hanging in there. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Hugs - Lovinia xoxox
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Hello Mystery Poet
I guess many of us can ask this question and relate to many of your past attributes. lol At least some of us can have a sense of humour about it. 'Alive and kicking', I guess that's what really counts, and whether we enjoyed every stage of our body's life be-in-it. :))) I love the image you've selected to complement the message in your poem.
A prose writer dabbling in the poetry world, or perhaps a newbie, new to it all. I think you've done very well. A good technique used well in your refrain line. You've also done well with rhyme and rhythm. A lament with a sense of humour. Hahahaha! A fun read, I really enjoyed.
A fun entry, and keep on hanging in there. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Hugs - Lovinia xoxox
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from RYME4U
You have done well. I like the repetition at the end of each stanza. The descriptions are good and the"what you used to wear" list is well done. Picture adds to the meaning of your words. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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You have done well. I like the repetition at the end of each stanza. The descriptions are good and the"what you used to wear" list is well done. Picture adds to the meaning of your words. Good job!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. I am not much of a poetry writer, but I enjoy reading good poetry. This was just a spur of the moment thing.
Comment from robyn corum
I HAVE to tell you -- before I EVER began reading your piece, I was in love with the title! Fabulous!!!!
Though there were a few issues:
--> the fact that it rhymed in some places and didn't in others -- which made me stop reading and go back to see if I had missed something--
--> the fact that some of your sentences, especially toward the bottom were a bit longer than the others, and lost some of the 'jauntiness' --
--> the fact that you repeated yourself --
In spite of these little things, I can EASILY see a true poet here. Coming up with these BRILLIANT ideas is the hard part. Tweaking the finished product is not! I am impressed. I would suggest some editing when you are ready (and WHEN, and IF, YOU and only YOU, think it's appropriate.)
Thanks so much for sharing this, and I look forward to many more. Much luck in this contest!
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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I HAVE to tell you -- before I EVER began reading your piece, I was in love with the title! Fabulous!!!!
Though there were a few issues:
--> the fact that it rhymed in some places and didn't in others -- which made me stop reading and go back to see if I had missed something--
--> the fact that some of your sentences, especially toward the bottom were a bit longer than the others, and lost some of the 'jauntiness' --
--> the fact that you repeated yourself --
In spite of these little things, I can EASILY see a true poet here. Coming up with these BRILLIANT ideas is the hard part. Tweaking the finished product is not! I am impressed. I would suggest some editing when you are ready (and WHEN, and IF, YOU and only YOU, think it's appropriate.)
Thanks so much for sharing this, and I look forward to many more. Much luck in this contest!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you. As I said, I am not much into poetry. This was just a spur of the moment thing. I looked in the mirror and said eek, then went and wrote this poem
