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Comment from kiwijenny
Poor mangy mutt ..skin and bones.
I like the imagery..I like it a lot..I like the Zulu reference
This dog was the runt of the litter..
I'd hate to share this fate...
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Poor mangy mutt ..skin and bones.
I like the imagery..I like it a lot..I like the Zulu reference
This dog was the runt of the litter..
I'd hate to share this fate...
God bless
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Jenny, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from robina1978
Excellent artwork that complements your poem perfectly. Did you make the name, Able Baker up, or is it a dog you know. You told his story in this poem with kind of sad end. It rhymes all the way.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Excellent artwork that complements your poem perfectly. Did you make the name, Able Baker up, or is it a dog you know. You told his story in this poem with kind of sad end. It rhymes all the way.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Ine, for reviewing. It's not based on anything in particular.
Comment from Gloria ....
Bill, what an excellent poem. His fur was simply analog -- what a way to stick out like a sore thumb and be "different" from the others. Wolves really don't like differences and strangely neither do people.
Being the runt is no fun but somebody's gotta do it otherwise the whole family would go runt.
Written to perfection as per your always my friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015
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Bill, what an excellent poem. His fur was simply analog -- what a way to stick out like a sore thumb and be "different" from the others. Wolves really don't like differences and strangely neither do people.
Being the runt is no fun but somebody's gotta do it otherwise the whole family would go runt.
Written to perfection as per your always my friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much, Gloria, for the cool review and encouragement. Bill
Comment from BeasPeas
Although the runt seems to play an important part in the wolf pack it breaks my heart. I think your poem is accurate and well written. Marilyn
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Although the runt seems to play an important part in the wolf pack it breaks my heart. I think your poem is accurate and well written. Marilyn
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Marilyn, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from krys123
Bill;
-One suggestion I do have and I'm sorry to start off like this but in your next to your last line: "Beneath the dust as you (walked) by". Why I see it as such is because you use the word hollowed in the line before which is also past tense.
-I've found this very amusing and you're quite a writer of imagination which is truly inventive and ingeniously creative Bill.
-Each rhyming word that you've written is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly and it was very smooth.
-The rhythmic meter, timing, tempo and cadence while helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-You made me laugh on this one Bill and thank you and thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Bill;
-One suggestion I do have and I'm sorry to start off like this but in your next to your last line: "Beneath the dust as you (walked) by". Why I see it as such is because you use the word hollowed in the line before which is also past tense.
-I've found this very amusing and you're quite a writer of imagination which is truly inventive and ingeniously creative Bill.
-Each rhyming word that you've written is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly and it was very smooth.
-The rhythmic meter, timing, tempo and cadence while helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-You made me laugh on this one Bill and thank you and thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for your great review. We'll have to agree to disagree on that last verb. The narrator and those to whom he speaks are in the present; the story in the past. Happy day.
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I understand now Bill. And as the quip goes: "I see said the blind man as he picked up his hammer and saw." Chuckle!
Comment from prettybluebirds
Aww, what a sad ending. A very good poem. Easy to read and follow. The artwork is excellent. A really good read on an unusual subject. This is a very good piece of work. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Aww, what a sad ending. A very good poem. Easy to read and follow. The artwork is excellent. A really good read on an unusual subject. This is a very good piece of work. Keep it up.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you, PBB, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
What an odd, beautiful, poignant poem in which the character, Able Baker could be ANALOG to John Q Citizen, or any other of us who is not the best, but allowed to live as second- third- fourth-best through through the fog of life.
And then we die.
As cogent a poem as I've read here.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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What an odd, beautiful, poignant poem in which the character, Able Baker could be ANALOG to John Q Citizen, or any other of us who is not the best, but allowed to live as second- third- fourth-best through through the fog of life.
And then we die.
As cogent a poem as I've read here.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for the excellent review, analysis, and positive comments. Bill
Comment from Nosha17
I guess it was the survival of the fittest, poor wolf dog, all skin and bone. A lesson for all of us, maybe? Good use of rhyming, wit and a hint of satire. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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I guess it was the survival of the fittest, poor wolf dog, all skin and bone. A lesson for all of us, maybe? Good use of rhyming, wit and a hint of satire. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Faye, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I lovvve this, Bill! The rhyme hunt/wunt is great. The concept is great, as is the phrasing, and I have to agree with the conclusion. Bravo! :)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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I lovvve this, Bill! The rhyme hunt/wunt is great. The concept is great, as is the phrasing, and I have to agree with the conclusion. Bravo! :)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Phyllis,for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from Eric1
Hi Bill, this is a seriously good piece of poetry, It is really well rhymed in AAAB with a wonderful flow and a great rhythm, some brilliant lines in there too my friend.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Hi Bill, this is a seriously good piece of poetry, It is really well rhymed in AAAB with a wonderful flow and a great rhythm, some brilliant lines in there too my friend.
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Eric, for the excellent review. Bill
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A pleasure to review Bill.
