The Ghosts In Aunt Grace's House
in my aunt's house?35 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Sounds haunted to me, although I have no idea who the ghosts may be. I found it a travesty that this wonderful story had no six star rating so I am righting that wrong with my late night much coveted Saturday Six Star!
Okay, I just really wanted you to know that you are missed when you are not here. Good night my friend. You have some great prices of work on this sight!
Douglas
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Sounds haunted to me, although I have no idea who the ghosts may be. I found it a travesty that this wonderful story had no six star rating so I am righting that wrong with my late night much coveted Saturday Six Star!
Okay, I just really wanted you to know that you are missed when you are not here. Good night my friend. You have some great prices of work on this sight!
Douglas
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thank you, and thanks for the six stars for this old story. My grammar wasn't the best in those days, which is most likely why it didn't get any six-star reviews. I have cleaned my grammar up a lot since then.
Comment from Lovinia
Hi prettybluebirds
I read your story a couple of days ago and had no time to review. I though it was excellent in style and interesting and entertaining. A lovely bit of personal nostalgia and your heartfelt emotions come through in your story of Aunt Grace's house.
I love the descriptives of the timber and artistry of the house (I do love these old timbered homes), I've enjoyed very much Aunt Grace's eccentric behaviour with cleanliness. My grandma and my aunts were the same ... a sign of a good wife in those days. She certainly was proud of her fine home built by her husband and the community. I always fall in love with my homes and the special features. It broke my heart when you relayed the verandah came off ... and the house painted PINK!! Oh those beautiful maples.
Joe sounds quite a character ... and seems to be falling for the original features he's destroyed ... perhaps a little of your influence ... perhaps Aunt Grace and Uncle Claude may well have an influence as well. I'm open-minded when it comes to 'ghosts'/spirits, I have felt coldness and strange feelings in some very old homes in my home city and when travelling ... can't say I've had a sighting though. My sister says her house has a ghost and she' seen him reflected in her large windows.
I notice you've taken the good advice given by the writers and edited the grammar errors. I'm a bit the same with grammar ... I can't remember the 'rules' from school days. You have excellent story-telling talent ... I also find it a bonus when they are true. Love to hear more of your stories. Good luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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Hi prettybluebirds
I read your story a couple of days ago and had no time to review. I though it was excellent in style and interesting and entertaining. A lovely bit of personal nostalgia and your heartfelt emotions come through in your story of Aunt Grace's house.
I love the descriptives of the timber and artistry of the house (I do love these old timbered homes), I've enjoyed very much Aunt Grace's eccentric behaviour with cleanliness. My grandma and my aunts were the same ... a sign of a good wife in those days. She certainly was proud of her fine home built by her husband and the community. I always fall in love with my homes and the special features. It broke my heart when you relayed the verandah came off ... and the house painted PINK!! Oh those beautiful maples.
Joe sounds quite a character ... and seems to be falling for the original features he's destroyed ... perhaps a little of your influence ... perhaps Aunt Grace and Uncle Claude may well have an influence as well. I'm open-minded when it comes to 'ghosts'/spirits, I have felt coldness and strange feelings in some very old homes in my home city and when travelling ... can't say I've had a sighting though. My sister says her house has a ghost and she' seen him reflected in her large windows.
I notice you've taken the good advice given by the writers and edited the grammar errors. I'm a bit the same with grammar ... I can't remember the 'rules' from school days. You have excellent story-telling talent ... I also find it a bonus when they are true. Love to hear more of your stories. Good luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Lovina. Yes, I am always open to suggestions from reviewers and am trying to learn my grammar over again. Like you I forgot most of what I learned in school. Hugs
Comment from Silent wind
Interesting story even for a sceptic like myself. To me this story is less about the mystery toasts and more about the nostalgia for past. If I may say, I would enjoy it even more if it was not so informative, and matter of fact and more sentimental
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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Interesting story even for a sceptic like myself. To me this story is less about the mystery toasts and more about the nostalgia for past. If I may say, I would enjoy it even more if it was not so informative, and matter of fact and more sentimental
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Silent wind. Yep, you may be right that I needed more sentiment in the story. I am always open to suggestions
Comment from joann r romei
I do, and i love these stories, one of my secret desires is to meet a friendly ghost, haha, hope he can make the old folks happy.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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I do, and i love these stories, one of my secret desires is to meet a friendly ghost, haha, hope he can make the old folks happy.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the six stars. I am glad you enjoyed the story. Think maybe joe can make them happy?
Comment from barkingdog
Many people believe in spirits haunting a place that meant a lot to them. That would apply to your aunt and uncle. Who else would suggest that he put the porch back as it was and paint the house white again?
Or maybe he made it all up, hoping to exchange another story for a strawberry pie.
I'd read more. This was well written and very interesting.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Many people believe in spirits haunting a place that meant a lot to them. That would apply to your aunt and uncle. Who else would suggest that he put the porch back as it was and paint the house white again?
Or maybe he made it all up, hoping to exchange another story for a strawberry pie.
I'd read more. This was well written and very interesting.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Maybe you are right, Joe could have made it up. He did say some things that I don't know how he could possibly have known unless he knew my aunt and uncle. Who knows?
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This was an intriguing tale. As to whether or not Joe is delusional depends on your take on your own reality. Everyone's reality is different and our interpretations vary greatly!
they painted the house ( PINK ) - needs closing punctuation here.
history of this house.
My Aunt Grace - there needs to be another line break here to separate the paragraphs.
was determined, that - comma not needed here.
You vary between using capitals and lower case for aunt and uncle. You should decide which and stick with it for the sake of consistency.
'For twenty years? - 'For twenty years?'
in there at night, closing speech marks needed.
that is why I have - opening speech marks needed.
live in the house", - comma inside speech marks.
"Sorta,- closing speech marks needed,
I had to agree - opening speech marks needed.
"And what woman is that", - the comma should be a question mark and be inside the speech marks.
the basement"." Some - neither set of speech marks are necessary here as there is not break in the speech.
house". - full stop inside speech marks.
GMG
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Hi there,
This was an intriguing tale. As to whether or not Joe is delusional depends on your take on your own reality. Everyone's reality is different and our interpretations vary greatly!
they painted the house ( PINK ) - needs closing punctuation here.
history of this house.
My Aunt Grace - there needs to be another line break here to separate the paragraphs.
was determined, that - comma not needed here.
You vary between using capitals and lower case for aunt and uncle. You should decide which and stick with it for the sake of consistency.
'For twenty years? - 'For twenty years?'
in there at night, closing speech marks needed.
that is why I have - opening speech marks needed.
live in the house", - comma inside speech marks.
"Sorta,- closing speech marks needed,
I had to agree - opening speech marks needed.
"And what woman is that", - the comma should be a question mark and be inside the speech marks.
the basement"." Some - neither set of speech marks are necessary here as there is not break in the speech.
house". - full stop inside speech marks.
GMG
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you. I love it when you do a review for me. You always show me my errors. I will edit and correct my mistakes. I really appreciate it when someone will take the time to help with my grammar. Grammar is my weak point.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Of course the ghosts didn't like him... he destroyed the beauty of their house. You can't buy that sort of woodwork anymore, and if you tried, it would cost a fortune.
I don't believe in ghosts, so I have to think he's just alone too mcuh. :)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Of course the ghosts didn't like him... he destroyed the beauty of their house. You can't buy that sort of woodwork anymore, and if you tried, it would cost a fortune.
I don't believe in ghosts, so I have to think he's just alone too mcuh. :)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you. You are absolutely right; it made me sick to see all that beautiful woodwork gone.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well, for me, I think it is Claude and Grace looking after the place they built and loved and lived in all of their life together. From what you have described he was all but demolishing the beauty of the home, I don't blame them for making their presence felt. Enjoyed this read.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Well, for me, I think it is Claude and Grace looking after the place they built and loved and lived in all of their life together. From what you have described he was all but demolishing the beauty of the home, I don't blame them for making their presence felt. Enjoyed this read.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the input. I still don't know what to think
Comment from robyn corum
An interesting story. Unfortunately, I don't THINK I believe in spirits -- but who knows?? Keep us posted, though!
Here are some comments to consider:
1.) It always makes me sad to drive past the home where my aunt Grace used to live.
--> 'Aunt Grace'
2.) Claude was determined, that before they married, he wanted to build a house for his new bride.
-->Claude was determined (-no comma-) that before they married, he wanted to build a house for his new bride. --OR-- to simplify:
--> Claude was determined to build a house for his new bride before they married.
3.) Unfortunately, FatherTime catches up with all of us
--> Father (space) Time
4.) Claude passed away sometime in the late fifty's or early sixty's.
--> in the late Fifties or early Sixties
5.) but finally had to go live with her sister Hazel after osteoporosis made it impossible for her to live alone. Finally, Aunt Grace had to give in...
--> two 'finally's very close together. Consider revising?
6.) Even the beautiful banisters were gone from the stairway going upstairs.
--> 'going upstairs' isn't necessary. Your readers should automatically assume the stairs go up, and this addition just confuses.
7.) "I won't even sleep in there at night,(") Joe said, (")that is why I have the camper sitting outside".
--> add quotation marks as indicated, please
8.) "Really, I thought to myself,...
--> "Really,(") I thought to myself(.)
9.) Can't say as I blame Claude and Grace for kicking good old Joe out of their house, though". I would have done the same if I were in their place.
--> Not sure what your intention is here as far as punctuation...?
10.) Joe went on to tell me that he was a very spiritual person and was trying to work out some kind of agreement with Claude and Grace.
--> This is not correct. Since you're telling this portion from Joe's point of view and he doesn't really know these people, it's not appropriate to call them by name. Remember, he's been calling the woman 'Gramma'.
11.) Joe had actually done quite a bit of work on the inside (of) the house.
12.) "Sorta,(") Joe replied(.) (")I had to agree to replace the porch and paint the house white again, among other things."
13.) Gramma told Joe that on no uncertain terms was Joe ever to bring THAT woman into the house again...
--> perhaps a better way of saying this would be:
--> Gramma told Joe in no uncertain terms that he was never to bring THAT woman into the house again...
14.) he really lives in My Aunt Grace and Uncle Claude's old
--> lower case 'my'
Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the read --
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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An interesting story. Unfortunately, I don't THINK I believe in spirits -- but who knows?? Keep us posted, though!
Here are some comments to consider:
1.) It always makes me sad to drive past the home where my aunt Grace used to live.
--> 'Aunt Grace'
2.) Claude was determined, that before they married, he wanted to build a house for his new bride.
-->Claude was determined (-no comma-) that before they married, he wanted to build a house for his new bride. --OR-- to simplify:
--> Claude was determined to build a house for his new bride before they married.
3.) Unfortunately, FatherTime catches up with all of us
--> Father (space) Time
4.) Claude passed away sometime in the late fifty's or early sixty's.
--> in the late Fifties or early Sixties
5.) but finally had to go live with her sister Hazel after osteoporosis made it impossible for her to live alone. Finally, Aunt Grace had to give in...
--> two 'finally's very close together. Consider revising?
6.) Even the beautiful banisters were gone from the stairway going upstairs.
--> 'going upstairs' isn't necessary. Your readers should automatically assume the stairs go up, and this addition just confuses.
7.) "I won't even sleep in there at night,(") Joe said, (")that is why I have the camper sitting outside".
--> add quotation marks as indicated, please
8.) "Really, I thought to myself,...
--> "Really,(") I thought to myself(.)
9.) Can't say as I blame Claude and Grace for kicking good old Joe out of their house, though". I would have done the same if I were in their place.
--> Not sure what your intention is here as far as punctuation...?
10.) Joe went on to tell me that he was a very spiritual person and was trying to work out some kind of agreement with Claude and Grace.
--> This is not correct. Since you're telling this portion from Joe's point of view and he doesn't really know these people, it's not appropriate to call them by name. Remember, he's been calling the woman 'Gramma'.
11.) Joe had actually done quite a bit of work on the inside (of) the house.
12.) "Sorta,(") Joe replied(.) (")I had to agree to replace the porch and paint the house white again, among other things."
13.) Gramma told Joe that on no uncertain terms was Joe ever to bring THAT woman into the house again...
--> perhaps a better way of saying this would be:
--> Gramma told Joe in no uncertain terms that he was never to bring THAT woman into the house again...
14.) he really lives in My Aunt Grace and Uncle Claude's old
--> lower case 'my'
Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the read --
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your input and your helpful comments. I am always open for suggestions on my grammar. It is my weak point. I will go back and edit the story with your suggestions. Thanks again
Comment from mfowler
I thought this tale was fantastic. You really explained the essence of the house very well, going back to the origins and it's association with you and your uncle and aunty. The description of Joe's dismantling of the heritage was perfect although not for the house. The following conversations you've had with Joe about ghosts etc seem far-fetched but way too real to ignore; especially given your aunt and uncle's obsession with keeping it pristine. I hope you find the $150,000 as you probably are the one who should live there. You would also be able to reconnect with the past. Really enjoyed this most unusual tale.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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I thought this tale was fantastic. You really explained the essence of the house very well, going back to the origins and it's association with you and your uncle and aunty. The description of Joe's dismantling of the heritage was perfect although not for the house. The following conversations you've had with Joe about ghosts etc seem far-fetched but way too real to ignore; especially given your aunt and uncle's obsession with keeping it pristine. I hope you find the $150,000 as you probably are the one who should live there. You would also be able to reconnect with the past. Really enjoyed this most unusual tale.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thank You for the input. Maybe someday I will try to but the house from Joe. I don't know if I really want to at this point.
