When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "A Volcano at Home"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Sis Cat
This is excellent work. I started yesterday posting a biographical novel, so I am intrigued to study other examples. Yours is a good one. I enjoyed your focus on workplace conflict. At the same time, you plan your mother's memorial. I also enjoy your use of a question for a cliffhanger. Thank you for sharing and for the example. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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This is excellent work. I started yesterday posting a biographical novel, so I am intrigued to study other examples. Yours is a good one. I enjoyed your focus on workplace conflict. At the same time, you plan your mother's memorial. I also enjoy your use of a question for a cliffhanger. Thank you for sharing and for the example. Keep writing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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I look forward to reading yours. It's good to intersperse dialogue with action and narrative. The first chapter is the most important so don't make the mistake of bogging it down with background information that you can fill in later i.e. birthplace, sisters and brothers, parents occupation. Ask yourself what you want readers to get from reading your story -- inspiration, the power of love or hate, etc.
Comment from sibhus
Ya, what a slap in the face. Working in a factory, I see it all the time. The young female temps get all the cushy jobs, and are constantly monitored by management. Yeah, what a shock, huh? Good chapter with good insight into our floundering school system, which of course is no fault of the parents, not. Parents, who seldom even know where their kids are, go into a rage and blame the teachers when their kids are failing. I'm curious as to how you handled this situation.
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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Ya, what a slap in the face. Working in a factory, I see it all the time. The young female temps get all the cushy jobs, and are constantly monitored by management. Yeah, what a shock, huh? Good chapter with good insight into our floundering school system, which of course is no fault of the parents, not. Parents, who seldom even know where their kids are, go into a rage and blame the teachers when their kids are failing. I'm curious as to how you handled this situation.
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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It was a slap in the face as far as I was concerned and could handled better had she split up the classes giving each of us two. But what the heck do I know.
Comment from barkingdog
In his own way, Frank was being supportive. I can appreciate his anger in your regard.
Your opening remarks to your supervisor were carefully chosen, yet right to the point.
I'm anxious to hear her answer.
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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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In his own way, Frank was being supportive. I can appreciate his anger in your regard.
Your opening remarks to your supervisor were carefully chosen, yet right to the point.
I'm anxious to hear her answer.
:) e
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Yes, he is supportive, nothing wrong with that. But next chapter you'll find why his suggestions annoy me!
