Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 72 "Memories in the Snow"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
12 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Debbie,
A tiny tale of horror indeed! You really build up the tension and then .... swipe! Yikes!
Nicely done, dear. :)
Love,
Sonali
She had stayed until sunset, before walking the .. . suggest: ... she stayed until sunset
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Hello Debbie,
A tiny tale of horror indeed! You really build up the tension and then .... swipe! Yikes!
Nicely done, dear. :)
Love,
Sonali
She had stayed until sunset, before walking the .. . suggest: ... she stayed until sunset
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my friend. I'll look at that~Debbie
Comment from Dean Kuch
No, I didn't think that at all, Debbie. In fact, I knew that is exactly what you wanted us to think, lol.
I only hope that whoever the poor guy was, it wasn't someone Alice was very fond of. I know one thing. I certainly wouldn't care to ax Alice any questions. She apparently has a tendency to get hacked off quite easily.
Good story!
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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No, I didn't think that at all, Debbie. In fact, I knew that is exactly what you wanted us to think, lol.
I only hope that whoever the poor guy was, it wasn't someone Alice was very fond of. I know one thing. I certainly wouldn't care to ax Alice any questions. She apparently has a tendency to get hacked off quite easily.
Good story!
~Dean
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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I wouldn't want to ax her either.Did you read, A Fish and a Storm--another post that I messed up and forgot to add to the book. I would appreciate your feedback if you have time. I think I've got enough horror to submit for Samie's book. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
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I'll make sure to read it, Debbie. Did you read my latest, Life Bites? I can't recall if I saw a review from you or not...
~Dean
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
gotta hate that fumbling with the keys bit... every time I see that scene in a movie it tenses me up, just like you achieved in this vinaigrette... and why did she lock her door anyway? Seems it would have been easier just to lock it after she was safe... note to self...never lock the door when I go out for a walk... just in case... yeah, not too much suspense in that eh? Well not until the axe came through the front door... all jokes aside, another great little ride into the terror trail... really enjoyed the read.
With our thoughts we create,
nimble fingers,
James vx's
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Hi Debbie,
gotta hate that fumbling with the keys bit... every time I see that scene in a movie it tenses me up, just like you achieved in this vinaigrette... and why did she lock her door anyway? Seems it would have been easier just to lock it after she was safe... note to self...never lock the door when I go out for a walk... just in case... yeah, not too much suspense in that eh? Well not until the axe came through the front door... all jokes aside, another great little ride into the terror trail... really enjoyed the read.
With our thoughts we create,
nimble fingers,
James vx's
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Memories in the Snow
by dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A story about Alice and a mysterious man that followed her home. At the end she kills the man with an ax. Who is the man? We don't know. Well done!
[Alice felt as though there someone following her (there was)]
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Memories in the Snow
by dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A story about Alice and a mysterious man that followed her home. At the end she kills the man with an ax. Who is the man? We don't know. Well done!
[Alice felt as though there someone following her (there was)]
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I won't walk into our house alone unless there is lights on. Sometimes it gets really inconvenient waiting for another family member to come home. I thought it was her father. You tricked me. I enjoyed reading your post.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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I won't walk into our house alone unless there is lights on. Sometimes it gets really inconvenient waiting for another family member to come home. I thought it was her father. You tricked me. I enjoyed reading your post.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Is Harley a good watch dog?
Katie Jo isn't. Hope this wasn't too scary for you. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
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Harely isn't much of a watch dog, more of an alarm dog. He announces everything that happens in the neighborhood rather loudly.
Comment from royowen
An excellent addition to these "tiny tales of terror" Debbie. I almost feel sorry for the poor guy, there was an axe as his reward, but what I do like about it, is the reverse to what could really happen, she was not frozen with fear! Well constructed story, fascinating plot, and a worthy addition, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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An excellent addition to these "tiny tales of terror" Debbie. I almost feel sorry for the poor guy, there was an axe as his reward, but what I do like about it, is the reverse to what could really happen, she was not frozen with fear! Well constructed story, fascinating plot, and a worthy addition, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my friend. Have a blessed day~Debbie
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You too Debbie.
Comment from mumsyone
Still the comma issue, Debbie, and tense. I know you will fix these.
Romance,(no comma) was her genre of choice.
Her father had passed on last year, and this will (was) be the first year she can (could) remember,(no comma) without their annual first snow walk.
They hadn't tackled cutting down a whole tree,(no comma) but had enjoyed spitting logs together.
Today,(no comma) was the first snow.
Alice felt as though there someone following her the last quarter of a mile,(no comma) and picked up her pace.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Still the comma issue, Debbie, and tense. I know you will fix these.
Romance,(no comma) was her genre of choice.
Her father had passed on last year, and this will (was) be the first year she can (could) remember,(no comma) without their annual first snow walk.
They hadn't tackled cutting down a whole tree,(no comma) but had enjoyed spitting logs together.
Today,(no comma) was the first snow.
Alice felt as though there someone following her the last quarter of a mile,(no comma) and picked up her pace.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Maybe I need to read about the proper use in commas. They are all fixed. Have a good evening, my friend. Thank you~Debbie
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Debbie...
_ Oh, yeah! But, did she really ax him, OR did he turn it on her???
_ Inquiring minds want to know----so you have to write a and installment. (*<*)
_ Well penned, my friend.
>>> Delete comma.
_ Romance[,] was her genre of choice.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Hi, Debbie...
_ Oh, yeah! But, did she really ax him, OR did he turn it on her???
_ Inquiring minds want to know----so you have to write a and installment. (*<*)
_ Well penned, my friend.
>>> Delete comma.
_ Romance[,] was her genre of choice.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Jay Squires
Another good thriller piece.
and this will be the first year she can remember, without their annual first snow walk. [...and this WOULD BE the first year she COULD remember ... >> keeping your tenses consistent.]
They jztackled cutting down a whole tree, but had enjoyed spitting logs together. [Don't know what the "jz" is doing there.]
Alice felt as though there someone following her [There WAS someone following her.]
That sounds like the kind of dream I would have.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Another good thriller piece.
and this will be the first year she can remember, without their annual first snow walk. [...and this WOULD BE the first year she COULD remember ... >> keeping your tenses consistent.]
They jztackled cutting down a whole tree, but had enjoyed spitting logs together. [Don't know what the "jz" is doing there.]
Alice felt as though there someone following her [There WAS someone following her.]
That sounds like the kind of dream I would have.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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I took care of these. Thank you so very much for your editing, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Eric1
Hi Debbie, I absolutely love these short horror stories that have a twist at the end, this one is perfect because it is the stuff of many people's nightmares, yes, we have all had them, the feeling of being watched or followed, excellent my friend.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Hi Debbie, I absolutely love these short horror stories that have a twist at the end, this one is perfect because it is the stuff of many people's nightmares, yes, we have all had them, the feeling of being watched or followed, excellent my friend.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
