Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This is a terrific scene with the most accurate description of a carny member with weathered skin, self-made tattoos, clothes that were a second skin by then, and a personality that began with caution, awaiting permission to be a happy, free-spirited soul.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks so much Bill:)

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is a great little scene. The narrator relates to the carnival man by recalling the grandpa who had a circus. You give such a great description of the carnival man--his leathery skin, the old red bike. It seems that his face told the story of his 40 years of working with the carnival. Great details, and a memorable guy. judi

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thank you Judi:)

reply by judiverse on 17-Aug-2015

I loved your story of the carnival man. judi

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

I love this remarkable picture that you've written. Everything is so clear, I can almost hear him as he warms to your greeting and is willing to share mutual experiences.
I especially like the last four lines.
/Nearly forty years of carney life;
Father Time, hard work, beer
and cigarettes
were etched across his face. /

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks so much:)

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Knew this one had to be about a Grandpa somewhere, some how. Well written poem clearly depicts scenes of yesteryear, his time, that will probably never be seen again.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thank you Brett:)

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a wonderful poem in every way. Descriptions, scene, content, characters. My uncle worked for a carnival for years. He had the stories to tell. Good job. Marilyn/BeasPeas

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks Marilyn:)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Great poetry. Describing an old man came rifing on an old red bike. Memories of your grandfather who owned a carnival once upon a time. All the hard work,beer and cigarettes over time etched across his face.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thank you Sandra:)

Comment from LeslieP5

Excellent

Yes, I can picture the man, the sheepishness at first and then the ride which he wore with steady gaze. Your comments then opened the door to conversation and you summarized how his carney life, hard work, cigarettes, and beer were etched on his face. The commonality brought back memories of your grandfather's carnival. All starts from being observant and noticing the hand drawn carnival scenes in ink when the man enters the store.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks so much:)

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

tab I love this sweet little write of an occurrence and meeting in your life thankyou for sharing this little experience through words and great observation

dip

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Thank you dip:)

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

I like the sharp line division between the incident and the commentary. This was a big story wrapped up in only two stanzas. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Thank you so much Dallas:)

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, Theresa, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the man that reminded you of your grandfather's carnival so you were able to relate to him. I enjoyed reading it

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Thank you swj:)