Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I don't do well when children die in real life for in stories. I know it's reality, but I see so many unwanted and abused kids in my school. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale, Barbara. I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story. This story is not going to be entered in any contests , LOL. Just another chapter in our multi-authored book.
Thanks again! ~Dean :}

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

True mastery of horror leaves the scares in what is unsaid, the jolt the reader steered to fill in the blanks. You achieve that jolt in spades...of grave dirt. Excellent short one that is both psychological and supernatural.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale, Ed. I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story. "In spades," he says...that's a good one, heh-heh!
Thanks again! ~Dean :}

Comment from rod007

Exceptional

This deserved an exceptional rating because the words at the end gave me a real shock. So he killed her to keep her mouth shut but her ghostly screams became worse after the poor child's death. Very well done, Dean.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale, Rod, and for the six stars as well. I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story.
Thanks again! ~Dean :}

Comment from evilynne

Exceptional

Heh, heh, heh. Your writing is scarily good, as always. I don't think this guy has a ghost of a chance of getting a sitter for this kid (especially on the graveyard shift). Evi

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale, Evi, and for the six stars too! I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story.
Thanks again! ~Dean :}

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

Creepy baby ghost, sooooo, did he kill the baby, or is this a psychological thing where the mother leaves because she can't take the pain of having lost a child, and the poor father is going crazy because he lost them both? Or, have I been reading way too many stories on Fanstory????
Rhonda

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

That's the beauty of flash/micro fiction, Rhonda. Much is left open for you to decide and interpret the way you see fit. But since you asked, my intent was your last scenario--the wife left because she couldn't deal with the fact of having aborting their baby, and he couldn't deal with the guilt of allowing her to do so.
I very much appreciate your review. Thanks for reading. ~Dean

Comment from CD Richards

Excellent

Oh dear. The thing that makes this all the more chilling I think, is that things like this actually happen, all the time-- and not at the hands of some psycho serial killer type, but some normal, and possibly quite nice person who has just reached their limit and snapped. That is a very scary thought.

Well done Dean, simple and effective.

If you ever need the perfect music to go with this, I think Tim Minchin has written the ideal song. It's called "Lullaby":

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ESFANzZTdYM

Thanks for sharing. I'm glad my kids have all grown up and flown the coop, otherwise I might not be getting too much sleep :)

Craig.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale, Craig. I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story. I'll look into that video link you mentioned, although it seems to put folks off their feed a bit (so to speak) when I add soundtracks to these stories.
Thanks so much again! ~Dean :}

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

OMG Dean - how could you write something like this, LOL. It really gave me a shock - so sudden. I always think horror/sad stories where children are concerned pack the biggest punch. Yet one more good one from you. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale, Dorothy. I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story. I also agree that horror stories which feature children are some of the most terrifying.
Thanks so much again! ~Dean :}

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Good shocker at the end wrapped this up perfectly. Terrific idea and well executed with minimal wording. I see that it's 99 words. With one more added this would have easily won the 100 word horror prompt taking entries now. Too bad you didn't see it.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thank you very much, Phyllis, and I did see that prompt. I just think I've worn out my welcome where contests are concerned. I've now lost seven in a row, the latest being the Nuances of Noise contest. So rather than waste my time and hard earned funny money on a blind entry that might get six reviews and two votes (if I was lucky), I opted for the exposure instead.
I appreciate your review, and your kind comments as well.
~Dean :)

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 12-Aug-2015

I see your point. I don't usually enter blind contests for the same reason... fans don't get notified and numbr of reviews is absurd.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Yours are the only poems for which I hold up my hands or a book to block my view of the animation on the screen because I know it is going to be something horrible that will give me night terrors. But, as the tired man said, "I gotta get some sleep." Poor kiddie. You are WRITE. He did not stand a ghost of a chance. Thank you for scaring.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale, Andre. I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story.
Thanks again! ~Dean :}

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Dean;
-what a wonderfully thought out and well conceived story, short as it may be, that leaves much to be desired is the concept blew me away at the end. He was troubled with the crying of his daughter who had passed away forever haunting him throughout his time.
-Thank you so much for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Dean.
Alex

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for reading my Tiny Tale of Terror, Alex. I sincerely appreciate your review, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed the story.
Thanks again! ~Dean :}

reply by krys123 on 13-Aug-2015

You are so very welcome Dean