Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "The Dead of Night"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
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Comment from I am Cat
LOL,... ok, that's sick.
;)
I always get excited about these Tiny Tales... It's going to hit me one day... just hold on to your hat...
;)
One point... if he's one the graveyard shift...
then how does she awaken him in the middle of the night?
the graveyard shift it 11pm - 7 am... (my mom worked it a lot when I was growing up) ... so he would be awake already, right?... so she would have to wake him during the daytime, would she?
days 7 am - 3 pm (typical)
swing shift 3 pm - 11 pm
graveyard 11 pm - 7 am
(that's how it went at the paper mill in my old hometown)
??
;)
loved it though...
oh, by the way... I went to that website where the E.G. Marshall old radio shows were... OMG! That brought back such memories! i"m going to listen to some more... maybe i"ll get inspired.... .crreeeeeaaaakkkkkk!
Until next time..... pleasant.... dreams? lol
;)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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LOL,... ok, that's sick.
;)
I always get excited about these Tiny Tales... It's going to hit me one day... just hold on to your hat...
;)
One point... if he's one the graveyard shift...
then how does she awaken him in the middle of the night?
the graveyard shift it 11pm - 7 am... (my mom worked it a lot when I was growing up) ... so he would be awake already, right?... so she would have to wake him during the daytime, would she?
days 7 am - 3 pm (typical)
swing shift 3 pm - 11 pm
graveyard 11 pm - 7 am
(that's how it went at the paper mill in my old hometown)
??
;)
loved it though...
oh, by the way... I went to that website where the E.G. Marshall old radio shows were... OMG! That brought back such memories! i"m going to listen to some more... maybe i"ll get inspired.... .crreeeeeaaaakkkkkk!
Until next time..... pleasant.... dreams? lol
;)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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I caught it after I posted it, Cat, and changed it as soon as I could. I had a completely different ending originally and in editing, I forgot to change that. But thanks a bunch for pointing it out to be just the same.
I listen to those old radio shows every night myself. They force you to use your imagination, which can only help in your aversion to developing writer's block, I would think.
Much obliged for the great feedback. ~Dean :)
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No problem! Well, perhaps i'll start listening to them. (maybe during the day though... .) it's DARK here in the country at night... Like I told Sara (Mr. Dark) it's damn black dark here with a HUGE canyon and a big ass drop off with a waterfall... and yeah, a big ass hole and lots of creatures... I don't do 'scary' after dark here.. .I spend WAY too much time alone. LOL
Thanks Dean... always a pleasure
Cat
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Dean,
my reactions to your Horror and Thriller Flash Fiction --
too bad the lack of sleep from a babe crying led the dad could no longer stand,
could not get a bit of peace when finally the crib was empty. (who's fault was that?)
I figured it out when the dad went to her grave and begged
for her to stop crying..
Gert the
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Hello Dean,
my reactions to your Horror and Thriller Flash Fiction --
too bad the lack of sleep from a babe crying led the dad could no longer stand,
could not get a bit of peace when finally the crib was empty. (who's fault was that?)
I figured it out when the dad went to her grave and begged
for her to stop crying..
Gert the
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Who's fault is right, Gert.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this latest in our series. I really do appreciate your support.
~Dean :)
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You are welcome Dean
Did you receive my PM?
Gert
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I'll make sure to check, Gert.
Comment from Acquired Taste
One wonders if the guilt in his heart caused his demons to scream so loudly. And what better way to haunt and torture than the guilt to sound like a baby's cry. Short, sweet in that wicked way you have - enough to make you think of your actions and complaints. Just my thoughts....AT=/
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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One wonders if the guilt in his heart caused his demons to scream so loudly. And what better way to haunt and torture than the guilt to sound like a baby's cry. Short, sweet in that wicked way you have - enough to make you think of your actions and complaints. Just my thoughts....AT=/
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thanks, Acquired Taste. I appreciate you having a peek at this bloodless terror tale. No guts galore in this one--no ma'am! Just a good, old fashioned ghost story...in 100 words of course, lol.
Much appreciated. ~Dean ;)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Dean! That really was a terror tale! He killed his baby daughter! How terrible is that! Brilliant, my friend, you can really think up some ghastly tales, and I am just going to bed! Excellent! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Dean! That really was a terror tale! He killed his baby daughter! How terrible is that! Brilliant, my friend, you can really think up some ghastly tales, and I am just going to bed! Excellent! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Geesh, what time is it where you live, Sandra? Here in the States, in the great state of Ohio (to be more specific), it's just 5:30 in the evening, lol.
Thanks for your review and unique interpretation. I certainly appreciate it.
~Dean
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It's coming up for 11pm here. Did I get the interpretation wrong? Goes to show, my brain get tired even earlier than the rest of me!!
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No, there's really no wrong way to interpret it, Sandra. Whatever you took away from the story is fine. I'm just glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from barkingdog
Phrases like 'dead of night' and 'graveyard shift' set our minds up for this spooky one.
Great haunted tale, Dean.
Now did his wife leave him or 'leave' him? lol
Did he bury them together? Was the baby still alive when he shoveled in the dirt?
I've so many thoughts after your nightmarish story.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Phrases like 'dead of night' and 'graveyard shift' set our minds up for this spooky one.
Great haunted tale, Dean.
Now did his wife leave him or 'leave' him? lol
Did he bury them together? Was the baby still alive when he shoveled in the dirt?
I've so many thoughts after your nightmarish story.
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thanks, Ellen. Just another one of those 100 word micro horror tales that leaves a lot of interpretation up to the readers as to what happened next.
Thanks very much for the review. ~Dean
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I still can't write micro-fiction.
I'll keep trying. Grr.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
You certainly have me worried about the little one that is screaming and the poor man that don't really knows how to comfort a screaming child.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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You certainly have me worried about the little one that is screaming and the poor man that don't really knows how to comfort a screaming child.
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Couple with with the fact that his child is dead, and he's hearing her ghost, makes this doubly troubling, wouldn't you agree, Sandra? That's why he visited the cemetery...to ask her to be quiet.
Thanks for reading, and for your review as well. ~Dean
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I was thinking about that as well, why would the ghost of a child haunting him, that is troubling.
