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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a good poem Bill with a clever rhyme scheme. In all four stanzas the lines 1,2 and 3 are mono-rhyme, and lines 4 in all four stanzas rhyme. It works very well and you give us a really amusing poem. A bit of poetic license with 'bester' LOL and it works well in this poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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This is a good poem Bill with a clever rhyme scheme. In all four stanzas the lines 1,2 and 3 are mono-rhyme, and lines 4 in all four stanzas rhyme. It works very well and you give us a really amusing poem. A bit of poetic license with 'bester' LOL and it works well in this poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 12-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Thanks, Dorothy, for giving this a look and your encouraging review. Bill
Comment from robina1978
Is the name of the girl for real? I liked your poem. A girl inherits loads from her rich father. She is in and out of court for various things. The dozens of illegitimate children are now after her. She will spend as much as she can, then burn the rest. She will make the headlines once more.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Is the name of the girl for real? I liked your poem. A girl inherits loads from her rich father. She is in and out of court for various things. The dozens of illegitimate children are now after her. She will spend as much as she can, then burn the rest. She will make the headlines once more.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thanks for reviewing, Ine. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
LOL, Bill I gotta admit you write the most original poetry I've ever read on this site. I especially love the name Rudulfini Laughter Schwartz.
Your interesting rhymes work well with that name and this story.
As always an entertaining and nicely metered read.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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LOL, Bill I gotta admit you write the most original poetry I've ever read on this site. I especially love the name Rudulfini Laughter Schwartz.
Your interesting rhymes work well with that name and this story.
As always an entertaining and nicely metered read.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
Good poem, Bill. Humor seems to be where you shine. You have impeccable timing and are not afraid to bend the spelling and grammar rules to fit the needs of the poem.
This made me laugh.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Good poem, Bill. Humor seems to be where you shine. You have impeccable timing and are not afraid to bend the spelling and grammar rules to fit the needs of the poem.
This made me laugh.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for the kind and upbeat review. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Oh, goodie,another one! This is my favorite phrase: castles (with a jester). I also like: cloistered concubines. Such fun... where do you get these bizarre ideas? :)
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Oh, goodie,another one! This is my favorite phrase: castles (with a jester). I also like: cloistered concubines. Such fun... where do you get these bizarre ideas? :)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Phyllis, for a terrific review. Bill
Comment from krys123
Bill;
-I found the rhyming to be difficult but workable and someone neither forced nor labored while the other ones were little strained and most of the rhymes were helpful in making the rhythm flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter and tempo again in this poem along with the cadence and timing were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The use of enjambment which is the running out of a thought and concept from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break was also justified.
-This being the following poem from the previous poem had worked together well with each other and followed the same conceptual format and idea.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Bill;
-I found the rhyming to be difficult but workable and someone neither forced nor labored while the other ones were little strained and most of the rhymes were helpful in making the rhythm flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter and tempo again in this poem along with the cadence and timing were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The use of enjambment which is the running out of a thought and concept from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break was also justified.
-This being the following poem from the previous poem had worked together well with each other and followed the same conceptual format and idea.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for this meticulous breakdown. Bill
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Again you are so welcome Bill
Comment from Clockwise
Very fun, and well written. Rhythm and flow are excellent. The uniqueness of the work is what really earns that sixth star. I'm entertained.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Very fun, and well written. Rhythm and flow are excellent. The uniqueness of the work is what really earns that sixth star. I'm entertained.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, CW, for the nice review. Bill
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Rudulfini Laughter Schwartz
by Bill Schott
Rudulfini spent time in and out of court. Her dad left her a great inheritance and everyone he knew want it a piece of it, she realized money is not that important. Good job!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Rudulfini Laughter Schwartz
by Bill Schott
Rudulfini spent time in and out of court. Her dad left her a great inheritance and everyone he knew want it a piece of it, she realized money is not that important. Good job!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, GBR, for reviewing this. Bill
Comment from TAB_that's me
Quite a fun little tale told poetically:) I love the good humor and the tongue twisting names and words. Well done.
~~Teresa~~
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Quite a fun little tale told poetically:) I love the good humor and the tongue twisting names and words. Well done.
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Teresa, for giving this a look. Bill
